Reviewer: BlackPearl
Date: 01/10/08 21:26
Chapter: Chapter 15 - And Back to Back, They Shall Face Each Other

UPDATE PLEASE!!!!

Reviewer: chrissy_coo_coo
Date: 12/05/07 16:40
Chapter: Chapter 15 - And Back to Back, They Shall Face Each Other

Update? When? Whats next? Hows relationship going? Krum? Keep up great, fantastic, amazing, wonderful, spontanious writing! Love this story, hate waiting for updates, but you make it worth it, not that i'm saying make the wait longer, just that your an AMAZING WRITER! Still waiting!
-chrissy

Author's Response: Sorry for the wait - I shall try to get back into my game as soon as I can. Thank you so much for your support :-)

Reviewer: Angua_rocks
Date: 11/29/07 15:17
Chapter: Chapter 15 - And Back to Back, They Shall Face Each Other

update!!! pleasepleasepleasepleaseplease!
I love this story so much, it's just brilliant - perfect characterisation and everything!!

jenn

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I will update as soon as I can - Hopefully it won't be much longer.

Reviewer: La_Rubinita
Date: 11/27/07 12:02
Chapter: Chapter 15 - And Back to Back, They Shall Face Each Other

I'm not entirely sure how I found this, but I certainly am glad that I did! Hermione/Oliver is my new-found obsession and this fits in quite nicely. I love your characterizations, and how you've created a side plot and slowly brought it into focus. I must admit, I'm terribly curious as to what the Malfoys are up to. I'd say from their conversation that they're not bent on bringing Voldemort back, but their plans are surely less than admirable... And a little bit of sexual tension never killed anyone (hypothetically speaking, of course). You make it so real - not at all cheesy. Though I almost choked when Ian interrupted was turning out to be a very steamy situation.

This fic is so much fun. I can't wait for an update :)

~Ruby

Author's Response: I'm so glad you found this, too! It's wonderful to hear that someone's enjoying my side plot, as well as the romance I've attempted to create. *grins*

Thank you so much!

Reviewer: jealousofginny
Date: 11/13/07 19:28
Chapter: Dragons, Dragons Everywhere, And Not a Drop To Drink

i love the plot but im kind of confused as to the whole Goyle/ Oliver predicament. I just don't get it. Other than that it is great!!!!!

Author's Response: If I ever re-write this story, one this I know I'm going to have to do is to try and clear up that bit. You're certainly not the only one who's expressed some confusion.

Oliver and Goyle sent there contracts at roughly the same time. Oliver, of course, entrusted his to an inebriated owl, so Goyle's contract is the one that reached the Ministry first, so he's the one that actually holds a Contract on Hermione. When Oliver's contract arrives, it is treated as a challenge to Goyle's contract, and Goyle is given the choice of settling it before the Wizzingamott or through a Wizards Duel.

Hope that helps!

Reviewer: yipeyaya
Date: 11/01/07 19:23
Chapter: Chapter 15 - And Back to Back, They Shall Face Each Other

i love it...
keep writing =)

Reviewer: Lumos42
Date: 10/25/07 19:39
Chapter: Prologue

So good! The suspense is killing me!

Reviewer: lady_snape
Date: 10/25/07 1:52
Chapter: Chapter 15 - And Back to Back, They Shall Face Each Other

this is a great story. can't wait until the next chapter comes out. keep up the good work

Reviewer: DMsBloodRose
Date: 10/21/07 17:18
Chapter: Chapter 15 - And Back to Back, They Shall Face Each Other

amazing!!!!!!!

Reviewer: brownl
Date: 10/21/07 13:57
Chapter: Chapter 15 - And Back to Back, They Shall Face Each Other

Hey i have just read it again and it keeps getting better. I can't wait to find out what happens next. please hurry with the next chapter!!!!

Reviewer: chrissy_coo_coo
Date: 10/18/07 17:45
Chapter: Prologue

I Love this story! PLEAZ UPDATE! I love your writing but am coming impatient! Pleaz hurry!
-chrissy

Reviewer: chrissy_coo_coo
Date: 10/18/07 17:45
Chapter: Prologue

I Love this story! PLEAZ UPDATE! I love your writing but am coming impatient! Pleaz hurry!
-chrissy

Reviewer: chrissy_coo_coo
Date: 10/18/07 17:43
Chapter: Prologue

PLEAZZZZZZZZZ UPDATE!

Reviewer: twells
Date: 10/06/07 9:29
Chapter: Chapter 15 - And Back to Back, They Shall Face Each Other

Ok, I have you to thank (blame) for my being hopelessly behind at work, and my children having eaten cereal for every meal the past two days. Absolutely stunning story. I have been obsessively reading since chapter two, and finally completed chapter 16 this morning. Thank you! Now, I know that praise is nice (you deserve it) but you also deserve constructive feedback. At this point I am too guilty over ignoring my family for 48 hours to go back and critically examine any of the chapters. However, I am specifically impressed with your sparing use of dialogue and your ability to construct brilliantly complete settings. Although there are many scenes clearly set in my mind, the vision of Hermione, alone, clutching Neville's book, and the scene at the Granger family home, are both quite vivid. Oh, and thanks for being true to Rowling's original Hermione. I've grown so sick of fanfic that has her swooning and crying at the drop of a hat. She is so complex, and I appreciate your respect of her complexity.
So, get writing! I'm waiting for more!

Author's Response: I shall take that blame (thanks) delightedly :-) I can think of no better compliment than to know that I've so completely immersed you in my story - and knowing kids (mine, at least), cereal three times a day is not a bad thing, especially when it means not having to deal with icky vegetables *laughs*

Neville's notebook! I loved that scene when I wrote it - and do you know, I think you may be the first person to comment on it? Thank you so much for such a lovely review!

Reviewer: kutekat528
Date: 10/03/07 19:42
Chapter: Prologue

I just love how you write Oliver- just how I imagine him and quite the gentleman. I have lost way too much sleep over the past several days reading your story and I am just enthralled with it. It keeps getting better and better and I can't wait to see where it leads. I particularly enjoy your ability to paint such perfect scenes and no rush anything; it comes across so realistically.
I hope to see your updates soon! This has quickly become one of my favorite stories of all time on MNFF. Cheers!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I really wanted to write a story where they came together naturally,without it seeming overly contrived. I'm really, really glad people are enjoying the slow pace, and aren't upset or impatient with me :-)

Reviewer: brownl
Date: 10/03/07 11:51
Chapter: Chapter 15 - And Back to Back, They Shall Face Each Other

hey, i really liked this one. I can't wait to find out what happens next. I'm also glad you put in some emotion between oliver and hermione, makes it all the more interesting.

Reviewer: tomfelton lover xo
Date: 09/27/07 20:19
Chapter: Chapter 15 - And Back to Back, They Shall Face Each Other

WAAAAA!!!!!! That was H-O-T
Can NOT wait for the next one!!!! GREAT JOB!!!!

Reviewer: num
Date: 09/27/07 7:50
Chapter: Chapter 10 ~ A Blushing Bridegroom

PMSL!!! LOVED the kiss!!!

Reviewer: num
Date: 09/27/07 4:34
Chapter: Chapter Nine ~ An Uncomfortable Affair

I love the way their relationship's building so gradually.

Reviewer: Starmaiden
Date: 09/26/07 21:35
Chapter: Chapter 15 - And Back to Back, They Shall Face Each Other

I’m going to go ahead and throw out all the minor errors that I noticed (there aren’t any major ones) to start with, then try to organize my thoughts.

Softly glowing light spilled from the windows that someone had obviously been thoughtful enough to leave to greet them
This is cute, but it sounds like someone is greeting them by leaving a gift of windows :)

Hermione couldn’t help but giggle, despite the rather uncomfortable way thinking of a teenaged Oliver in relation to young women’s persons in the privacy of an outbuilding was making her feel.
This is amusing, but I feel like it’s a bit awkward. I know why you wanted to keep it all one sentence, but it’s kind of unwieldy.

He could, Hermione pointed out irritably, as it hadn’t been him who had crept into the loo in the middle of the night and half asleep…
You can take out the “and”.

…she grew to love every square inch of the place, for all it’s wonders and marvels.
You don’t need the apostrophe in “its”.

“Tha’s why Golye wanted you.”
“Goyle” is misspelled here.

I mean, what better way to conceal what they’re up to, an’ then they can simply collect it from the carrier”
This sentence is missing its ending punctuation.

Ian stood staring for several quiet minutes as Oliver tackled the remaining bundles, probably not sure if he should tease or apologize, but in the end, left without a word.
I suggest rearranging this sentence—as it is, it looks like Oliver isn’t sure whether to tease or apologize.

Okay, I’m done being nitpicky :) I am, however, going to mention that the ending, with the Malfoys, didn’t work as well for me as the rest. Of course, that might be because I’m really just reading for the romance. Also, you did a really good job of making sure that we only have a hazy idea of what the Malfoys are up to, so I’ll probably get more into that when they explain a bit more.

Starting over from the top now!

Poor Hermione, faced with the prospect of falling head-over-heels in love with a man she’s already married to. Okay, so there’s nothing wrong with that, but you do a great job of helping us understand her fears. It is so much easier to hide then to face them; it’s just not a good idea if you have to spend the rest of your life with this person you’re hiding from.

I love Cot Luchan. Probably my favourite thing about it is the name and Oliver’s sneaky way of choosing it, but it’s a beautiful little place, easily imagined, and lovely for settling in. I like Hermione’s garden, too.

Oliver is such a sweet person. Actually, that doesn’t quite seem to describe him properly. He’s…multi-dimensional. As all good characters should be, and as all of yours are. You do such an amazing job of giving us people who are people, with faults and problems and real personalities.

I love how Hermione is starting to fall for him, no matter how much she denies it. Come to think of it, she’s got quite the capacity for denial, though that comes from her aforementioned fears.
Even still, she stopped squirming, not wanting to make it more difficult for him, since he was obviously determined in this bit of sentimental foolishness, and her stomach was just fine, thank you very much, and most definitely not fluttering, nor was the hand that was now curling behind his neck there for any other reason than to help her maintain her balance.
…and…
Whatever issues she had with Oliver were personal, and she’d be damned if she let them start on him.
*enjoys*

I enjoy the small and random fact that Oliver can’t dig the well solely by magic. It’s a good, realistic touch that makes the Wizarding world that much more convincing. Besides, I like the bit about a sink-hole.

One of my favourite things about this chapter is that Oliver puts a sort of deadline to their relationship. Yes, Hermione might just come around, but she’s too afraid to try it—I hadn’t realized that she would just let it go. And it’s just fun for Oliver to take the lead.
He’d gladly channel all his energies into building her a home, if only he could woo her with his ability to provide for her, take care of her, and be that solid presence in her life…
Perfect. Hermione would welcome the man who wanted to do this for her, but she’s still closing her eyes to the possibilities out of fear.

I love the idea of “Kiss of the Highlander”. It amuses me greatly that Ginny gave it to her. Hee.

About that tension…I keep thinking that you can’t possibly make it worse, but I obviously don’t know anything. Pretty much the only way you can continue to ramp it up is if they go as far as getting their clothes off before you stop them again. This is all said in admiration, of course.

Viktor Krum, eh? I am amused. This might force Oliver’s hand—actually—it would probably force Hermione’s. Yay!

I don’t think you need a glossary. Enough of the words look like regular English that I can tell what they are, and as you pointed out, context makes the difference. (I don’t think we need to know exactly what Michael said anyway ;)

I agree with your beta in that we’d certainly consider stoning you, but not until you finish the story! And by the way, I am very excited by the pace at which you write (about five times as fast as I do). I don’t know if you’re planning to keep it up—I hope you are—but I was incredibly excited when this one came so soon after fifteen.

Amazing job, of course (which you already know, since I had a Consequentially Yours-inspired dream), and I am waiting on the edge of my seat for the next one!

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