Reviews For Who Thrice Defies
Reviewer: silverdoe98
Date: 02/15/12 1:51
Chapter: Refusing to Stay the Darkness

you are an amazing author...this made my cry, cry- but tears of hapiness and contenment. just like you hoped it would be, the ending, and the entire story behind it, was perfect!

Reviewer: HermioneJeanPotter
Date: 10/12/11 4:24
Chapter: Better off Together

Fluff is always a good thing :)

Reviewer: HermioneJeanPotter
Date: 10/12/11 4:09
Chapter: The Morning After

Aw, that's really cute :) I think you did areally nice job

Reviewer: CharmFlicka
Date: 01/03/10 1:27
Chapter: Living the Dream

oops, didnt read the BTW until now! Sorry!

Reviewer: CharmFlicka
Date: 01/03/10 1:20
Chapter: Things Could Be Worse

a few big errors:
-McGonagall
-Lucius
-Imperius
-and that Regulus is Sirius's younger brother, so he shouldnt be out of school yet.

this is a marvelous story! -CF

Reviewer: CharmFlicka
Date: 01/03/10 0:55
Chapter: Laughter and Pain

i know voldy is evil, but i dont think he would cuss-he is a cruel creature, but too refined for coarse language.just a suggestion...

Reviewer: ron lover
Date: 07/20/09 19:27
Chapter: Refusing to Stay the Darkness

I really like the last two paragraphs. Especially the first one. It kinda made me sad to read it like that.

Reviewer: ron lover
Date: 07/20/09 19:12
Chapter: Living the Dream

If it means anything, I love Regulus.

Reviewer: ron lover
Date: 07/19/09 21:41
Chapter: Laughter and Pain

I know that this is a little late but I like when they are on the train and James could hear Voldemort. It was cool.

Reviewer: azngurlwidhighlights
Date: 07/15/09 21:03
Chapter: Voices

I loved your story. It was a bit cliche at times, but the rest was wonderful! And the ending made it seem like a movie and after the screen goes black white words show up like credits!!! aha well it was great!

Reviewer: meldina
Date: 03/15/09 18:37
Chapter: Living the Dream

Shouldn't you know not to put your wand by your buttocks they could get blown off

Reviewer: dancingiththemoon
Date: 06/26/08 12:47
Chapter: Refusing to Stay the Darkness

Oo. I got chills from reading that last paragraph.

Reviewer: Stephallovertheworld
Date: 05/19/08 18:55
Chapter: Refusing to Stay the Darkness

Beautiful story with a fantastic ending. I was in tears!! I love love loved it!

Reviewer: Parchment and Quill
Date: 04/08/08 18:10
Chapter: Refusing to Stay the Darkness

That was an amazing story. I'm sad to see it end; but I'm sure to see better things from you one day, right?

Best line:

Remember, if the time should come when you have to make a choice between what is right and what is easy, remember what happened to two promising adults who were good, and kind, and brave, because they strayed across the path of Lord Voldemort. Remember Lily and James.

I think it sums up what Lily and James did for the Order very nicely.

Keep up the good work. I really miss reading your story here; it was the right place to end it though.

10/10 - for canon, characterization, story structure , dialogue, description and overall plot.

Please continue to write.

~ Parchment and Quill

Reviewer: Parchment and Quill
Date: 04/08/08 18:00
Chapter: Christmas Biddings

This was yet another great chapter. The cliffy I'm not so stoked with; but I'll live. Keep up the good work. 10/10

You need to fix this sentence.

Because we the strongest bond of them all: love.

Best line:

“Yes, I know I just aided you in your rule breaking, but I just couldn’t resist buying it for you,” she said, smiling. Then they were called to dinner.

Hmm; It's good to know that Sirius liked it. I could just imagine him going to his room later and dancing around yelling at the top of his lungs that he could get past any lock he wanted to.

*LOL*

One more chapter to go; I'm going to remember this story of a while after I've finished it. I'll miss it.

~ Parchment and Quill

Reviewer: Parchment and Quill
Date: 04/08/08 6:15
Chapter: Living the Dream

A nice filler; although Mrs. Potter's scolding was a little shocking.

I'm not going to say much other then I love this story and that to keep up the good work. 10/10

Best line:

Lily and Sirius each took a hold of one of his arms and pulled him up. Sirius clapped James on the back as they steering him into the dining room. “For what it’s worth mate, I think overcoming two Death Eaters a pretty formidably feat. Even if they were drunk and one of them was my good-for-less-than-nothing brother.”

Oh, And yeah, Regulas is younger then Sirius but he was in with the death eaters pretty early on as well, so if you changed the grown men part to grown man and a sixteen year old kid, you'd be right.

~ Parchment and Quill

Reviewer: Parchment and Quill
Date: 04/08/08 5:50
Chapter: Things Could Be Worse

Hmm. Nice chapter. It's an interesting one that I didn't see coming.

So, keep up the good work. 10/10

I'm slightly speechless; I didn't see it coming. But I'm sure I'll find my voice soon enough.

Best line:

“I’d rather have you patch me up any day...” He attempted a laugh but started coughing, chokeing on blood.

I like it when something from a previous chapter comes up. It makes things more interesting and you remember things more (I'm talking about subtle things here).

~ Parchment and Quill (The speechless one who's trying to find her voice after losing it due to your unsuspected drama/action.)

Reviewer: Parchment and Quill
Date: 04/08/08 5:29
Chapter: Light in the Gathering Darkness

Another fantastic chapter here. Excellent, I'm jealous because it's not my work, absolutely amazing...

... And I'm going to shut up now.

So, anyway. You get the idea that I liked the chapter, right?

Keep up the good work. 10/10

The way you had James explain to Lily that he loved her was excellent. I think that's the best and most James like way of doing it.

Best line/s:

“Lily, you know I’ve liked you for ages. But lately, the feeling has intensified tenfold. I’m not saying this to force you to say it back to me; in fact, I never want you to say it unless you mean it. And I hope that nothing between us gets akward because I admitted this, but... the other night... I was going to say that Voldemort was trying to destroy the one thing that I care about more that anything.

I love you, Lily.”

I loved the way it was put. But if I had to choose a line he would be the last sentence of it.

Keep doing what you're doing now and you're right.

~ Parchment and Quill

Reviewer: Parchment and Quill
Date: 04/08/08 5:11
Chapter: Homecoming

Well, it's a change from the last few, but the Sirius joke was hilarious.

Anyway, 10/10. Keep up the good work. I loved the chapter and story!

Best line/s:

“Is this your dog? He’s so cute!” Lily said, moving over to pet it. Sirius gave a joyful bark, hopped off James, and lay back on the ground, exposing his belly. Lily knelt down and rubbed the dog’s stomach (something that none of the Marauders ever did), and the image was far too funny to James to make him jealous. The dog kept barking, and James knew this was a canine version of a human laugh.

That whole scene I just laughed. *shots back glares at parent who thinks I'm a totally looney who's better off in a mental hospital*

I'll stop my glares and ramblings and shut up now.

~ Parchment and Quill

Reviewer: Parchment and Quill
Date: 04/08/08 4:59
Chapter: Better off Together

A small smile plays on my lips as I read the flowing words in front of me. "Wow," I whisper quietly, closing my eyes and envisioning it.

The above passage is what I did for the first minute after reading this chapter. I'm serious when I say this.

And it wasn't fluffy, but for some reason heart wrenching *writes down in diary to work out why*.

I'm glad I've stumbled upon you and this story. I've loved this story but this chapter has got to be the best.

Best line:

He’s right. We are better off together.

This line and the last part of the chapter, where James and Lily are sharing the bed; are the best parts in the whole story so far. It's as good as a breath of fresh air; with all that's been going on.

Keep up the good work (yeah, I know I say it every time to pretty much every author, but really; keep up the good work).

10/10 - especially for the above chapter.

~ Parchment and Quill

P.S. You have no idea how much this chapter has effected me. It's touching for some reason. Sweet, and definitely not fluffy.

And a turning point, for sure!

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