It's nice. An interesting one at that, but a really good one.
Keep up the good work. 10/10
~ Parchment and Quill
P.S. This line sounds a lot like Dumbledore: “All is not lost Draco, my offer still stands. You are not a killer.”
this is amazing, i loved how you took our beloved characters and used them to personify the best in each house's ideals. i especially liked ravenclaw, with cho's calm acceptance of luna's beliefs
I am literally sitting here with tears streaming down my face. I am so moved by this beautiful story of how Albus Dumbledore addresses each of the Four Founders. I think you truly captured Dumbledore's character, as well as the students'.
These exquisite lines of Cedric's are what pushed me over the edge:
"“Given another chance I would have done the same thing all over," he smiled brightly, "Harry had to survive. Each of us, no matter how small our part are important in the task to ensure that the Dark Lord will be defeated. It will come to pass I have faith in that.”
What an incredible talent you have!
Thank you for writing this story - I'm grateful I took the time to read it.
Author's Response: As am I grateful for your comments. Thanks for that wonderful review made my day. :)
u write so well! i love d way u articulated d best of al houses even Slytherin
Author's Response: Gryffindors are always the obvious heroes. Always thought that Slytherins would be the ones in the shadows and come out when needed the most. :) Hopefully Book 7 will how that I'm right about Draco.
I liked it very much,it was touching.Only the Houses'unity can leed to the victory of the good side,and you showed it very well.
Author's Response: Thank you. Each house does have its own strenght. :)
Great stuff! There was only two things I had a little problem with. I thought that you used "friend" a bit too much in the Gryffindor part. Ron and Hermione looked at one another and ran after their friend. “Harry!” Ron called out to his friend. Harry didn't turn around to face his friend. And it said "She felt a shadow above her and looked upwards. Dreamy blue eyes met her almond shaped ones. 'Hello Cho' " this is referring to Luna looking up, so wouldn't she be seeing the almond eyes and hers be the blue ones? Other than that I luv it! 8/10 :)
Author's Response: You're right ... I shall fix that st once. Thanks :)
I really enjoyed this drabble. I love how you catch Dumbledore's essence with the students. I love the connection to the four houses; it's as though they truly will unite in the end. You did a wonderful job! It brought tears to my eyes and goosebumps to my arms! Great Job!~MALD
Author's Response: I acyually didn't think this to be eerie ... then again having the dead watching over you is *lol* -- thanks for the review :)
Hey Miel! Yet another one of your fabulous stories! I found myself thinking the same thing as lunafish "wait, wasn't he first met by DD in the orphanage?" but then i realised, the description could go either way. This is yet another awesome fic to bless the err screens of MNFF, so well done!
Author's Response: *sigh* I still haven't figured out how to make the description scream 'orphanage'
Oh, I did read it wrong. In that case 10/10. weasley_wanna_be
Author's Response: ^_^ happens to me plenty of times as well. :)
Author's Response: ^_^ happens to me plenty of times as well. :)
It’s been so long since I’ve been over here to read one of your stories, but as always I’m impressed! In this story, I especially like the moment you give Cho and Luna. I think fan fiction writers don’t usually give Cho the credit she deserves because of her characterization in OotP, but you show here what a year could do to her. I think it’s completely believable that she’s grown and learned just as Harry and the rest have done. And it’s nice to see these two completely different representatives of Ravenclaw interact. Well, since we’re both in SPEW now, I guess I better make some suggestions. The plot holds together very well and seems to do exactly what the original challenge asked (anyway I think this originated in the Three Broomsticks), so I guess I’ll just comment on some grammatical things I noticed: “those twinkling blue eyes scanned the tear strained faces of his beloved students”—is it supposed to be “tear stained”? I also noticed a few awkward verb tense shifts: “he knew he cannot risk that”& “Ron, I’m sick of having people try to protect me and see them fall one after another “ & in the Draco section “but the one he seeked”—the verb tense seems a little odd in these passages; is it meant to be “could not risk”? And you might consider “having…and seeing them fall” with the second sentence. Finally, I think it should be “sought” instead of “seeked.” Oh, I almost forgot: in the Draco section, it seems to say that DD first came across Tom Riddle in the Riddle mansion, but wasn’t it the orphanage where he first met Riddle? But enough of that! I can’t end without saying how great your final section is. I think it’s so beautiful that DD meets Cedric in the light! Overall, I really enjoyed the story!
Author's Response: Yes, it's that particular challenge. *lol* am one of those people who's guilty of writing fics and setting them aside to gather dust. Thanks for those corrections. It's reviews like these, that gets me to look into these old fics. ^_^ I've fixed them.
Surprising it's the Ravenclaw portion that took more thought, although most usually like the Slytherin portion better... maybe because it's more angsty than the rest.
^_^ I actually meant the orphanage here ... hmmm... it is confusing. I'll go change 'large house' to 'building' - maybe it'll make this more obvious this way. ^_^
Thanks for the review Neta. It was really helpful ^_^
I really liked it, and thought it was very well written. All the things Dumbledore says make sense, except for the Ravenclaw one. Hermione isn't in Ravenclaw, so why is she included in that instance? Well, I really like it. 8/10 weasley_wanna_be
Author's Response: Umm… Actually the one in Ravenclaw are Luna and Cho … Hermione isn't even there (She's in the Gryffindor portion). You must have misread it. *L* Not to worry I get crossed-eyed after reading a lot as well.
Appreciate your review ^_^ Thanks!
Beautiful. Those little drabbles sure have a lot of power! I like how they offer hope even in the worst of circumstances. They are all lovely, but Draco's was particularly poignant considering....
Author's Response: The first review never fails to put a smile on my face. ^_^ Thanks lunafish, the Draco drabble was actually the only one that won the challenge but the hardest to write was the Ravenclaw one because there's less canon data to go by. Thanks for reviewing this one ^_^