Hey! I love this poem, because of your smart use of refrain of sorts, and it still all makes perfect, sad sence, and it gives the boem the feeling of being complete, and abit surreal... great work!
~Nez

Oh, my! This poem has such an intelligent use of refrain (isn't that what it is, eh? :)). It was excellent, and it seemed a little touching and a little aloof (to me, at least). As my English teacher would say, it's like the detached attachment of the lily. I enjoyed it, and must add it to my favourites! ;)

Author's Response: *laugh* Even I actually don't know what it is ... Thanks for giving mush more credit than I actually merited :)

wow!!! i love how you used the sentences again in the next stanza!! that was really well-written. it seems lie you took a long time to make that. if we could still give rating it would be a 10/10!
~Sara

Author's Response: Thanks for that review. Glad you liked this format. I just wanted to try something different than the usual rhyming pattern or free verse poems :)