You know what they say - quality not quantity. I much prefer short, beautiful pieces such as this one, to over-long fics that make me yawn.
I so enjoyed seeing everything from Narcissa's POV, especially her relationship with her sister and her memories of the beach. You managed to paint a picture of her life in... less than 1100 words. And that is no mean feat, I tell you.
I absolutely adore the last three lines. I have an addiction to finishing pieces of writing with simple lines, and I love seeing someone else do it, too. And do it so well.
The transition from the long descriptions of her memories to merely a simple summary of them really gave a feel of her urgency, and the fact that she doesn't have a lot of time left.
Okay, to be honest, I thought it was wonderful. There is nothing that I dislike, so if you wanted constructive criticism, then... I got nothing. Sorry. Even my desperate nit-picking has abandoned me. You have written a simply gorgeous fic.
Author's Response: Kate! *tackles* I heart you to death! Thank you sooo much for the review. I'm not into long stories either, to tell you the truth! I'm more into small character studies such as this one! I'm glad you like it short, I was a bit worried that I didn't have enough. :) Thanks!
That was tremendously good. Again, you made me think and consider a character that before I had no interest in. Wonderful job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
It is so good! I absolutely love how it runs through Narcissa's life and how everything big happened in the same spot. I like how it shows that even someone evil can have real feelings and love and what not. It was truly a good story and I loved it. Keep writing!
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you! I love reviews like this! Thanks!
Wow. I loved the end when you summed it all up with short sentences. It shows the biggest events in her life, and it all happened there. And nice first person! The only concrit I have is that the "family summer" sentence in the last few sentences is a bit longer than the rest, and could be shortened to fit in a bit more.
But overall, great job!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I wasn't completly satisfied with the family summer part, but however I twisted and turned it, I just couldn't get my point across. Thanks again!