Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/11/10 11:43
Chapter: Epilogue

The ending reminds me of my son when he was admitted to college. I was teaching at USD at the time and he applied. When he got his acceptance letter all he could say, over and over, was "I'm going to the U. I'm going to the U." It was a big deal to him after a few years of having everything go wrong:D I can understand Daniella not going close to places that reminded her of her pain. I was annoyed with Albus when he was afraid that Severus would screw up Order plans by trying to exact revenge. You know, there's more to life than the Order. Great chapter. I loved this story. See you in the next one soon.

Author's Response: Two down. One more to go. Have you ever seen the banners for these stories. I worked hard to find three pictures of women who had similar features but aged as Daniella would have aged. I'll send them if they're not in the list. Dani

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/11/10 11:25
Chapter: Chapt 23 - Life Interrupted

This was a case of Saxon being too smart and powerful for his own good. If he had stayed in his bed he might have been safe. I had a Newfie like that once. He died too young because he was so smart he was able to figure out how to escape from the yard and get into things. Did Severus ever know who the two Death Eaters were and who sent them? You know, I was dry-eyed through the funeral but I teared up over the orb with the song and the fact that Severus had to stay away for Daniella's safety. I read ahead a little so I knew what was coming but you were so tricky in letting Daniella live last time that I thought maybe that's what you were doing this time. Great chapter. Sad though.

Author's Response: Severus never finds out who the Death Eaters are or who sent them. I had that song in my head for the entire story, wanting to use it but never finding the right moment. Patience was rewarded at the end. I always choked up when Daniella watches Saxon die and holds him so tight that the men had to pry her arms apart to let him go. I'd probably do the same with my children. I wouldn't let go. Dani

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/10/10 9:37
Chapter: Chapt 22 - Race For A Cure

I have this odd feeling that something bad is going to happen. I was afraid for a moment that somehow one of Anna's children had gotten sick because Daniella had inadvertantly carried the virus into her home. That was very tricky, spreading the virus through swimming pools--what better way? It's good to know that all kinds of prayers work--as long as they're sincere. Saxon sounds adorable--and so powerful already. Great chapter.

Author's Response: Just wait... Dani

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/10/10 9:12
Chapter: Chapt 21 - Interlude

Yay, Daniella found the other Potions Master. How sweet that Pinky is watching over Daniella. Since House Elf magic is different and sometimes even more powerful it can be good to have one watching your back. How funny that the two Masters were trying to deal with Severus. Wouldn't they be shocked to know that Severus is Daniella's husband. I'm so glad they had a night to themselves. Great chapter.

Author's Response: I loved the scene where they had to hunt for their clothes in the morning. Still makes me giggle. Dani

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/07/10 9:46
Chapter: Chapt 20 - The Call To Serve

I don't know why, but I chuckled at the scene in the garden, when Daniella had to pretend to be angry with Severus:D And what an appropriate name, Odius, for a bad guy. I hate to think of people with small children doing things that are so dangerous. Great chapter.

Author's Response: That's okay, I giggled my way through it, too. Hmmm, Odius Wurst, what a name... Dani

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/07/10 9:10
Chapter: Chapt 19 - Weathering the Storms

Poor Severus--he has to be so paranoid with his family. I love this new characterization of him. For a minute I thought it was Sirius riding up on the motorcycle--he was notorious with that thing:D But then I said, how would Sirius know where Daniella lives? Your descriptions of little Saxon are so on target. I remember my children acting that way, with shyness. What a wonderful opportunity for Daniella to go to medical school and get back to England. Great chapter.

Author's Response: Did I say "I love Severus" ? :-D Oh ya, and he's hot in his own bad-boy way. I'd forgotten about Sirius and the motorbike, but - no - he won't show up...ever... Dani

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/06/10 12:45
Chapter: Chapt 18 - Strawberries and Bananas

That was very nice. How old is Saxon now? A few months or just over a year? No matter what the age, it's still really early for him to be showing his powers, especially in such a directed way. It seemed that all the power was concentrated in his female ancesters--will they be as strong in a male? I worry so much for Severus with his spying. It's hard to think of someone so evil as Voldemort destroying so many lives but I guess we muggles have had our own crazy people. Great chapter.

Author's Response: Saxon is about 1 1/2 years old. Too young for any real powers. The Lestrange line was passed through the females. Just wait... Dani

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/06/10 11:49
Chapter: Chapt 17 - 'Tis The Season

That was an outstanding chapter. It brought back a lot of memories. Did I ever mention that when my first child was born, my husband was gripping my hand so tightly that it hurt. I couldn't tell him to let go so I leaned over and bit his hand:D I think that's a story he'll tell to this day even though that baby is now 37 years old and we've been divorced for 12 years. I was so excited that Severus made it to the birth. I'm sure Daniella could tell that he was close by. Excellent chapter.

Author's Response: Mine asked when I wanted the next. I gripped so hard that he landed on the floor in pain. Silly man... Dani

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/05/10 13:07
Chapter: Chapt 16 - Taking Risks

I'm so glad Madam Pomfrey came to check on Daniella, although I am confident that Daniella can take care of things herself. I must have been conceived on Beltane:D My birthday's in the middle of January. I loved it when Daniella felt confident in letting the gossipers know that she was pregnant and felt free to mention her husband. Finally, I loved it when Severus and Daniella actually admitted that they were in a committed "marriage" relationship. Great chapter.

Author's Response: sigh...I don't ya just love when things start to come together? Dani

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/05/10 11:50
Chapter: Chapt 15 - The Mistress and the Master

Geez, ;you'd think Severus would know better than to just pop something into his mouth. Can't one of the parts of that fruit kill you? At least it gives Daniella practice for when the baby arrives:D Great chapter.

Author's Response: I had a science teacher once who would put the weirdest things in his mouth, even if he didn't know what it was...just a taste. Severus popped a "sliver" which isn't very big, but still...you'd think he'd be smarter. I guess he really does trust Daniella completely. (I wrote it to emphasis that.) Dani

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/04/10 12:27
Chapter: Chapt 14 - Confrontations and Reconciliation

I'm relieved that everything worked out--at least for that small period of time. One never knows what the future will bring. I just feel sad that he's missed so much of the pregnancy. I am full of hope that all will go well for them. Great chapter.

Author's Response: For now. There are many "family" moments. Dani

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/04/10 12:05
Chapter: Chapt 13 - Revelations

This is just another case of some guy's low self-esteem coming into play and mucking everything up. For a potions master, Severus is acting kind of dumb. Doesn't he remember the times he was with Daniella? Maybe being Crucioed did something to his memory. Great chapter.

Author's Response: Insecurity and jealousy can make even a sane man insane. Dani

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/04/10 11:22
Chapter: Chapt 12 - Secrets

I thought Daniella might be suffering from more than nerves in the last chapter:D Then I thought, they're both really good at Potions so of course they'd use protection. Then again, I thought that the 'Beltane affair' may have snuck up on them rather quickly. I take it that Severus doesn't know about the baby yet. Albus never does stop being manipulative does he, although in this instance I think he may be right about waiting to inform Severus. Great chapter.

Author's Response: Sometimes passion gets a hold of you and there's little you can do. EVen the best of us have "accidents"...But, was it really an "accident"? Hmmm Dani

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/03/10 10:50
Chapter: Chapt 11 - Into the Shadow Enters the Light

I hope Daniella isn't sick from something more serious than nerves. It seemed to have eased Albus' mind when Severus arrived and they were all able to talk. In your story, Severus must not be entranced with Lily. That's OK by me. I think Severus wasted way too much time pining over Lily. I love that they've set up Daniella's cottage as a safe house. Great chapter. I saw what could be minor errors in three places. 1. "How is Remus? Not much research has done . . ." (something's missing?) 2. Malfoy, the man who tortured had me with Crucio for days, (doesn't sound right). 3. . . . both men needed stay in closer contact. . . (not sure, maybe a 'to' between needed and stay?)

Author's Response: Oh, thoughts of Lily are still there, but I focused on his new relationship with Daniella. Hey...life goes on. Dani

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/03/10 10:21
Chapter: Chapt 10 - The Day After The Night Before

That was very strange and ominous. I'll bet Lindstrom has something to do with Voldemort. I hope Lindstrom got to attend the reception at least:D It was funny that Severus would burn the eggs the day after he was introduced as the youngest and newest Potions Master. Great chapter. By the way, I saw a 'truck' at the beginning when it should've been 'trunk.'

Author's Response: I loved that the infallable Severus burnt the egg. Shows he's human. I'll check the "trunk". Dani

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/01/10 11:42
Chapter: Chapt 9 - Beltane

That was totally beautiful. Am I wrong or was this like a commitment ceremony--almost like a marriage ritual? It was so perfect that Severus showed up during Daniella's ritual. Your writing is so good that I remember scenes for a long time and I learn new and interesting things. I chuckled at the beginning, though, when Daniella dropped off the expired portkey. It sounded like someone dropping off the keys to their rental car or the car they used from work:D I'm in awe of your writing, as I am of a few other authors, and a bit intimidated as I go about weaving my own stories. Great chapter.

Author's Response: Yes, it is a commitment. Interesting. Today is Beltane. It's celebrated through the night of April 30 to May 1. The information given in the story is true. It's the union of the Goddess and the God, a marriage of sorts, and a consumation between lovers. I love making Wizard life seem so normal, like you said, like dropping the keys off from a rental car. Thank ou for the compliment. I love to write but I'm not the sort to write for the sak eof putting anything on paper. I have to mull it over before putting it down. Dani

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/01/10 11:05
Chapter: Chapt 8 - The Reception

I chuckled at the others' description of Severus' appearance and disposition. I thought 'never judge a book by its cover.' Certainly Daniella can't be surprised at Albus comment about needing her skills, rather than talking about needing her personally. I guess, though, that even if you know the truth it still hurts to hear it said out loud and to your face. Great chapter.

Author's Response: Albus has a one track mind, and often doesn't think. That's what his problem was with Elizabett. Dani

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/01/10 9:29
Chapter: Chapt 7 - The Potions Apprentice

How exciting!! She's gone from a girl who was thought to be dead to finishing her apprenticeship and now she gets to see Severus honored. That's the most exciting part of all. She probably won't be able to talk to him much but she'll still be able to see him. I can't wait to see what happens. Great chapter.

Author's Response: As far as everyone else is concerned, Alicia is dead. Daniella is her new personna. Dani

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/01/10 8:12
Chapter: Chapt 6 - A New Day Dawns

That was sad but I still feel hopeful that Severus will return. They may see other sooner than they think, especially since Alicia's message to her grandfather was that "she's ready." The bakery shop owners were so cute when they were protective toward her. I know that both Severus and Alicia will go through a lot before they can be together. Was it just in this prologue that they seemed to be happy together? Great chapter.

Author's Response: The Campta's are ongoing for this story. I wish I knew a couple like that. Yes, Severus and Daniella are happy together. It started off that way in the Prologue. Dani

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/01/10 7:08
Chapter: Chapt 5 - Rome

I don't know if you've edited this version or not. It reads really well. I only noticed tiny little errors and not that many. I chuckled at Severus' glamour--so he really made himself look like a 'greasy git.' Severus seems like such a gentleman and confident. This version is probably more accurate because a wizard as powerful and knowledgeable as he is would more than likely be very confident despite outward appearances. Great chapter.

Author's Response: I sat down last night and edited the entire story. If there are any mistakes, please let me know where. I'd like to fix them. I'm working on "Life in the Shadows" now, but haven't started to transfer the edits onto the site yet. There are a number of peole who are jumping right in, although I've asked them to wait. I guess they're too excited. I love Daniella. She is such a strong character. As for Severus...sigh... Dani

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