Reviewer: DracosBaby_232
Date: 07/13/07 9:05
Chapter: Oneshot

This has he makings of a veery good love scandal. You should definately write a sequel.

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: DracosBaby_232
Date: 07/13/07 9:04
Chapter: Oneshot

This has he makings of a veery good love scandal. You should definately write a sequel.

Author's Response: Love scandal? Cool. I might write a sequel.

Reviewer: A House Elf
Date: 01/27/07 19:43
Chapter: Oneshot

Forgive me, but I'm rather lazy, currently, so I didn't read the first part. I just read where Malfoy says something and wakes Susan up or whatever. But I liked it. Really. No, seriously. I'm not kidding.

Author's Response: Well, it's always good that you liked the part that you actually read :) I know all about laziness! Thanks!

Reviewer: hermy_loves_ron
Date: 01/20/07 12:41
Chapter: Oneshot

It made me feel so...warm and fuzzy! lol

Author's Response: Yay! Thanks, that's a feeling that I love having when I'm reading!

Reviewer: whittyleah
Date: 12/11/06 23:19
Chapter: Oneshot

Gemma dear,

Your imagery was amazing! The way you describe how she feels while drinking the champagne and then how nothing else seems to compare was brilliant!

The ship was a bit odd (this coming from a Severus/Hermione shipper). But, I liked it! Draco was OOC, but if fit and I didnít mind. I have never really thought about Susan Bones at all, as a character, but you gave her life and depth. She seemed very human, giving her depression worked well, it pulled the story along just right.

I loved how you pull it all together, using the feeling of warmth after drinking alcohol as the tie. I would have never thought of it! This is going in my favourites!

Great job!

~Leah

Author's Response: Leah, sweetie, thanks so much! Yes, I suppose Draco was OOC, but I have this fantasy of even him being capable of sweetness. :) Thanks so much again!

Reviewer: lilyevans91
Date: 11/21/06 17:18
Chapter: Oneshot

sweet! i like the style of this story, how it's written in the present tense. also, it's cool how you kind of document the major happy things that happen to susan in each year, until it starts getting bad. then, right when it seems like it can't get any worse, it gets a whole lot better, and it's very happy and optimistic! it makes you think that anything can happen. very good, kind makes you feel warm and fuzzy--like champagne--inside!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: lilyevans91
Date: 11/21/06 17:17
Chapter: Oneshot

sweet! i like the style of this story, how it's written in the present tense. also, it's cool how you kind of document the major happy things that happen to susan in each year, until it starts getting bad. then, right when it seems like it can't get any worse, it gets a whole lot better, and it's very happy and optimistic! it makes you think that anything can happen. very good, kind makes you feel warm and fuzzy--like champagne--inside!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! That's so sweet!

Reviewer: Oppungo
Date: 10/28/06 9:04
Chapter: Oneshot

I liked how you went through time, the transition was very smooth with the familiar start of the paragraph with her age and an event - it was very effective. The constant comparisons with champagne also helps to connect everything well, so the reader does not feel confused - again, a nice use of familiarity.

What I really enjoyed reading in this is all the description, you have a wonderful use of not only describing how things are, but how Susan feels, which gave me a very clear picture of what's going on as well as helping me feel closer to the character. "The liquid is at first bitter on Susanís tongue, but once she swallows, warmth spreads down her throat, to her stomach and then out to her fingertips and toes, until her entire body is wrapped in a soft blanket." I loved the association at the end of a soft blanket - it is something a child in particular would liken it too. The only thing I would slightly quibble about is for Susan to take more than one sip - I remember the first time I tasted alcohol I hated it, and so I would think it would take Susan a second sip to truly taste it. But then, everyone's different, and the single good feeling works well with the rest of the story.

I love your use of the senses (which I seem to be commenting on an awful lot these days, but everyone does it so well!), with "her heels clicking and clacking" for sound, the taste of champagne, the sight of Susan 'all grown up' at the party, the touch of warmth in her fingertips, the smell of the aroma around Hogwarts a little later on. I really liked this sentence in particular, "Cats, owls, rats, toads and just about every other animal imaginable screech, scratch, scream and scramble." The use of the lists and alliteration were wonderful, and so that sentence stuck in my mind.

Gosh - what a contrast in her 13 year old paragraph! The mention of a sensitive subject is done very well, although I think maybe you could have evolved on a few of those points, to make it seem a little more real - as suicide is a very drastic step.

I did like the little details you put in, such as the chess match against Eleanor and Susan's bitten nails - all these things help to make the story more real and add those finishing touches that make a story memorable. I particularly liked the nail part, actually, as it's like Malfoy to have pristine perfectness - and like a girl to be jealous of his nails!

I loved the ending, Susan's thoughts about being scared she wouldn't do it right, Malfoy showing his bully nature in a different form - and how after Susan got back her champagne feeling, he leaned in again - and of course, her final thought. It was lovely, a great finish to a truly great story. Well done!

Author's Response: Wow. I kept reading and coming back to this review, I didn't know how to respond to something so sweet! This is doing wonders for my ego. Thanks so much Kiara, darling, this is a treasure!

Reviewer: Krissa
Date: 10/21/06 11:20
Chapter: Oneshot

Shouldn't this rather be under Draco/Other character? It's easier for the Draco/OC-fans to find it that way. But I'm not one of them;) Nice story:)

Author's Response: Well. Yes, I suppose it should be, but for some reason I like the Other Pairing genre under my fic better. I can't explain it. Thanks so much!

Reviewer: just_the_contrary
Date: 10/21/06 10:44
Chapter: Oneshot

This story is so sweet, so perfect. I love how you explain one event from each year of her life from eight years old to fourteen. It's so cute how she can never find that 'champagne feeling' until she kisses Malfoy, and I love how they interact together. This story is immensely sweet and I love it. :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much for that brilliant review! This really makes my day. Thank you sooo much!!

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