You know, Hadeer, I don't read a lot of fanfics. I really only read them when someone asks me to, or for classwork or something. For that reason, I haven't read that many unique, original, bunnies, but this is certaintly one of them. I thought you did an excellent job with the flashbacks in the beginning symbolozing Snape's love for Dorothy and her death. Throughout the story you conveyed the sides of Snape that we don't see in the books, and rarely see in fanfiction. I've never read a Snape romance, but this was quite good as they go. You did an excellent job portraying his turn to the good side, and leave the reader wondering what really happens. My one complaint is about this though. I would think Snape would have had to do a little more than simply convince Dumbledore. I don't feel like that was a strong enough statement. I think you should use something stronger, like, "he would do all he could to prove to Dumbledore..." Then again, thats just me.
Other than that, it was absoloutely amazing. Especially the last line. The entire think is D/A, and than there's this spark of happiness at the end. Its beautiful.
Keep up the good work,
Author's Response: Thanks so much, CJ! I see what you mean about the convincing Dumbledore part. It was a bit jerky with me as well. Thanks, though!
Very sweet but I just can't imagine anyone loving Snape, no heart that one. Sorry but it was a lovely story all the same.
Author's Response: I dunno...I think Snape is very capable of loving and being loved...he just needs the right person to bring it out of him. Thanks for the review!
OMG! That was beautiful! I still always wonder what made Snape go to Dumbledore, and you've provided an excellent explanation for us. Even though you don't spend too many words on Dorothy, I still get the feeling that she is a pure, wonderful person.
It's so sad that Snape became a Death Eater because Dorothy died, but then he redeems himself because of her, too. Such beautiful mirror imagery there.
Your writing flows just beautifully! (Huh, I really need to find another word -- I'm using 'beautiful' too much!) All the words paint lovely pictures, and I can see Dorothy in the dream, and I can see Severus's pain. Well done. I'm glad that you've chosen for Snape to turn himself in before the Potters' death. That seems nicer, somehow.
Well, good luck in the challenge! I can't wait to see more of your writing!
~ Abigail, Knight of the Turnip Table
Author's Response: Wow, I don't know what to say, thank you! I'm so happy you mentioned that it flows well, I worry about my writing sounding forced. Thanks again!
This is very sweet; I had never thought of Snape turning away from the Dark side because of love! But it is sad. . .of course, you are the author, so you knew that :)
Specifically, I love your descriptions of Dorothy at the beginning. The contrast later is so drastic; it adds a certain level of drama to it all.
However, I was wondering if wizards/witches can have leukimia, or Muggle diseases (other than cold and flu, I mean) at all. I don't know, I'm just asking.
Personally, I would like a sequal about Snape asking Dumbledore for forgiveness, and then maybe a dream the following night about Dorothy be happy. Or something like that to finish it all off.
Kate - Knight of the Turnip Table
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm really glad you liked it! As for Muggle diseases, I acutally posted a thread on the forums asking everyone's opinions and it became filled with contradicting opinions so I though - what the heck?-I'll just go with my storyline. A sequel...hmm...I'll have to think about that...Thanks again for the review!