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Name: theroadtripper (Signed) · Date: 05/01/11 15:26 · For: Chapter 13 - Yuletide
Is that a Friends Quote I see??? I think it is but i won't judge. This is an amazing story and all the characters are so real and easy to relate to. Please hurry up and finish, please....

Name: Afifa (Signed) · Date: 03/22/09 11:49 · For: Chapter 13 - Yuletide
Um, I'm back. :D I warned you that I would be... it took me long enough. Seven new chapters to read. Awesome. :D Well, on with the review then. :)

You know, I don't think I've ever mentioned this before in any of my previous reviews, but Kirsty's enchanted bag was a fantastic invention. Really, it's so cool. Sort of like an online blog where one posts and the friends comment and such. It's something not exactly important to the story but it adds a wonderful touch to it. I wish I owned one. Sell me one? :D

He really hoped that there would be many more such evenings to come as that night, for the first time, he had truly felt a part of the group. He knew he would never infiltrate the closeness that they all shared, and part of him did not even want to, they were brilliant as they were. In his opinion, the fact that the group had willingly accepted him was enough.

I like this part. It shows that Sam has a lot of fun with the Marauders and the girls, that they were all together in the real sense. But he's truthful enough to acknowledge to himself that no matter how lovely a time they had together, and even though he liked being with them and appreciated that they acted as if he was part of the group, he would never be able to fit in properly. And he's not complaining, he's just content with the way the things are. Excellent characterization!

Another thing I noticed. Again, a pretty random thing. Lol. Sam kisses Emma right after he wakes up. >.> Don't get me wrong, I in no way mean anything bad, I'm just pointing out something which happens in so many books and movies. Guy's sleeping, girl arrives, he kisses her. I personally would find it very weird and sort of yucky kissing a guy who just woke up and hadn't had the time to brush his teeth. Unless, of course, Sam did a cleaning spell before snogging Emma. ;)

I love how much the Christmas reactions wary. I like how Remus is all overly excited about Christmas presents. How he isn't the one going logically like, 'Let's get this done and over with. The sooner we do, the faster we can occupy our beds again.' Something like that if you know what I mean. Lol. He's sarcastic and mature, but when it comes to Christmas, he acts like a kiddo unlike the rest of the Marauders who prefer sleep over the ocassion. Though I clearly do not blame Sirius on professing his hate for his friends. Poor guy waking up at seven am on a holiday. Lol. [I am up right now at five am, but that's because I never slept. >.> Lol.] Emma's acting like... well... Emma... excited and impatient. :D

Sam received a bottle of nice smelling aftershave from his parents, which he hoped Emma would approve of.

This made me laugh. Lol. Approval needed so she continues to kiss him, huh? :p Lol. The rest of the gifts were... hilarious! Especially the picture Sam received. XD Lol. James' gift reminded me of Krum's figure which Ron bought. I love how you have Remus get lots of chocolate. A tiny PoA thing, but I like it. :) Haylee loves 'Pride and Prejudice' maybe because her maker loves it? :p And a reader [that's me] loves it, too. :D Peter being great at Chess is fantastic. There is something in which he's good at. And Chess does need brains. So it isn't as if he's good at something dumb. Also, Sirius' gift do Kirsty... damn. Now why can't he give me a necklace? :( Lol.

Sam was pretty observant in this chapter. The girls know about Sirius and Kirsty, and now Sam's guessed that Kirsty likes Sirius as well. Are the Marauders to thick that they can't see that? Really. This has gone too far now. Everyone notices everything except the people who can change what's happening. Sigh. And then he notices the look in Sirius' eyes... that the feelings are reciprocated... and he tells Emma. Why in the world can't anyone else notice that? :/ Or is Sam being overly astute? Huh.

Oh! And I found something :

“Delicious thanks,” replied Sam, patting his stomach.

I'd say add a comma before 'thanks'. Otherwise, it sounds more like you're saying that 'thanks' is 'delicious'. Lol.

“We compliment each other beautifully then.”

I think you mean 'complement' with an 'e' instead of an 'i'.

The playing in the snow was fun. :) Skating, snow mans, snow balls, snow angels. Wow. And with friends. Perfect setting! The part actually reminded me of my last year at school. No, we didn't do anything with snow seeing that it doesn't snow here, but we did leave a 'mark' behind as Remus says. Though one thing which I noticed is that Remus never mentioned anyone else than the group. He could've made a random observation of a couple walking or something. Just to say that there's other human life as well and not just a few Gryffindors. But it’s not like, important. Maybe he's too busy having fun with his pals?

And damn, man. What is up with the moon? :@ Christmas night? Really! *hugs Remus tightly* *gets glared by Haylee* Lol. But I do feel very sorry for the poor guy. And Haylee too, since it isn't her fault anyway. Why can't Remus just tell her and get done with? :/ Oh, well, I hope the transformation goes fine. :(

I am off to read the next chapter. :D

- Afifa

Author's Response: Woop! Another Afifa review! Oooh maybe I should set up a business selling enchanted bags. Oooh! Have just had a spark of inspiration for story *must write it down before I forget* Thanks, Afifa! lol.
Yeah it was important to me to establish Sam's role within the group.I didn't want people believing that he'd become like the fifth Marauder, because that's what I don't want to happen. So I'm glad you liked it.
Hehe! It was way too much fun writing the reactions to Christmas and the presents. One of my favourite bits in the whole story.

Thanks so much for another brill review! I look forward to the next one :D.


Name: muggler180 (Signed) · Date: 12/14/08 22:54 · For: Chapter 13 - Yuletide
so close i feel so bad for Remus great chapter even though the ending was mean why couldn't they have finally kissed

Author's Response: I know, Remus has such a hard time of it , bless him!

Name: pooliewoolie1 (Signed) · Date: 12/01/08 17:03 · For: Chapter 13 - Yuletide
I've been reading this story for a while now and I had to comment. Iove this story and think it captures the Marauders perfectly. PLEASE get Kirsty and Sirius together soon the wait is killing me.
Keep up the good work.

Author's Response: Aww thank you so much! Hehe, maybe I'll get them together if you say pretty please? :p

Name: The-heir-of-Gryffindor (Signed) · Date: 11/28/08 12:18 · For: Chapter 13 - Yuletide
bless remus!
tragic.... sniff sniff

another great chapter
so glad that these updates are fast! i couldnt live without my TAABW fix every few weeks.....
exagguration but i love the stroy.
fan for life

best bit was the snow angels
i love the gang!!

Author's Response: I know, it's all very sad :(. Hehe, TAABAW fix, I like it lol. Awww fan for life, thank you! Wooo for the gang, I love them too :D.

Name: Nova (Signed) · Date: 11/28/08 2:09 · For: Chapter 13 - Yuletide
You tempted us all with the preview of the chapter, with us all anticipating that something would happen! They're supposed to get together! Aaargh.

Moving on from the dissapointment...
The story is absolutley awesome. I've been reading since you first published it. :D

Please please please pleeease update soon.
Can't wait!

Author's Response: Hehehe! I know, aren't I evil? Awww, thank you! It's great to see that you've stuck with me for so long :D.

Name: RIP_Fred (Signed) · Date: 11/27/08 20:05 · For: Chapter 13 - Yuletide
Wicked awesome, best fanfic ever!!!

Author's Response: *blushes* Aww thank you SO much :D

Name: kritchen (Signed) · Date: 11/27/08 18:03 · For: Chapter 13 - Yuletide
:O poor Remus! I really want more of this Kirsty and Sirius relationship. :) Blissfully good as always. Thanks for the fantastic reading. It was exactly what I needed.

Author's Response: :O! I know :(. Hehe, bless Sirius and Kirsty. Aww thank you, I'm glad to be of service :) xx

Name: PeaceLovePotter (Signed) · Date: 11/27/08 11:57 · For: Chapter 13 - Yuletide
This chapter was good, it just would have been better with more dialogue. I still can't wait for the next one!

Author's Response: Thanks! Yeah, I know, this one was very description heavy, which is strange for me as I usually have chapters either dominated by dialogue or an even split. Thanks for the constructive criticism, I'll bear it in mind :)

Name: rayasunshine (Signed) · Date: 11/27/08 11:54 · For: Chapter 13 - Yuletide
Poor Remus! I really thought they were gonna kiss!
Sirius was so sweet! And he and Kirsty interacted perfectly!
Update soon!!!

Author's Response: I know, bless him :(. He doesn't have a good time of it, does he? Aww glad you liked the Sirius/Kirsty bits. Thanks for reviewing :)

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