This is an incredibly emotional fic. I like the importance you place on names, giving the fic a common theme that runs through it, and showing the emotions Andromeda feels about various members of her family in a natural way.
The characterisation here is also realistic, especially for two characters we know so little about. Ted is caring and loving, helpful towards his wife, whilst Andromeda is strong and rebellious, but not oevrly so. The way you have written both characters also makes them compliment each other well, and leads to the successful interaction.
I like this fic, a lot.
hmm....tad bit confusing but i got the gist of it...good story!
Very interesting…the second person narration gives this an incredible feel and intimacy. The love for Andromeda that radiates from this piece is amazing, and the forlornness of Andromeda herself a real work of art. Each sentence has its own charm, and the dialogue portrays each person's character remarkably well. The twist at the end with Andromeda "determined to break a thousand years of tradition, determined to have her own way and to besmirch the name of the Blacks…" makes for a very satisfying finish to a very satisfying piece. Great work!
It Always Breaks is one of the most innovative pieces of fanfiction that I have ever had the privilege to read. It’s written in second person, so in that spirit I’ve decided I’d do my review in second person as well. (Normally I write reviews in third person.) Alright’ so let’s hop to it.
You sit there perusing your usually “Most Recently Updated” and click on the the story, It Always Breaks by wendelin the wierd, expecting the usual fare of darkness and angst, but with the lovely first sentence you are immediately caught off guard. Why? Because it’s addressing you, not the reader, or another character but you. You have become Ted, Tonk’s father, an underwritten and under appreciated character.
This is how it should be, you think, it always seems as if everything- everything is falling apart in your world, except it isn’t.
You end up wondering if Wendelin means that everything should be falling apart, or that everything should look like it is. Either way this is a slightly confusing beginning which really does a disservice to the rest of the story. What she really does well is use the word choice to convey a character.
This time she looks up into your eyes, and they seem to be filled with some sort of wild fury.
The use of the phrase they seem to, convey the uncertainty and fragility of Ted and the wild further distances the couple. This growing distance is one of the one-shot’s main themes. Overall, this was an incredibly skillful and innovative piece, and I’ll be on the look-out for more of Wendilin’s work, and you should be too.