Gina, this is amazing! I like how the refrence to the pranks is what discribes the marauders, and not their love stories as it is in most fics. No mention to being a heart-throb *thank g-d!*.
And his tragedies did definatly come in bundles. Great Character! Your focus on them is not misplaced. I can see plenty of people focussing on the happy, but that's just not his life *is an optimistic gone wrong*
Author's Response: Hi there! Thank you so much for coming to read this and for leaving such a nice review! I really appreciate it. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. It didn't seem appropriate to refer to the Maruaders' love lives, somehow; that was not the focus of what happened in Sirius's short and tragic life, after all. I'm so glad you agreed. Thanks again, and good luck on your own!! ~Gina :)
An excellent entry! The rhyme and rhythm were great, and the subject matter excellent (I mean, *anything* about Sirius is probably going to be excellent...)
The last two lines especially were so touching. It's really a treat that you were able to condense such a long span of time and so many emotions into a sonnet! Good luck in the challenge!!
Author's Response: Hi there! Thanks so much for reading my entry, and for the wonderful review! I understand about the subject matter - certain characters really lend themselves to this challenge, and I think the Black family is one of them, along with other tortured characters like Remus Lupin.=) I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for the compliments on the last lines, I came up with the final line of the sestet first and had to craft the other five lines just to fit it, lol. Thanks again for the great review!! ~Gina :)
Really good, Gina.
I loved this sonnet. *Sorry I called it a poem*
I don't know much about poetry/rhyme but this is so eloquent, and concise. I love how you captured Sirius Black's life story in less than 15 sentences. Imagine that!
Author's Response: Hi Ritta! Thanks so much for reading this poem. . . sonnet. . . whatever, lol. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Eloquent? What a compliment, thank you! Thanks for the lovely review, I appreciate it!! ~Gina :)
I have NEVER managed a sonnet. This is an awesome accomplishment! AND it makes sense. (One so often finds, in poems that have to rhyme, that something doesn't...)
Author's Response: Hi there! Thanks so much for reading this. I'm so glad it all made sense - I do know what you mean about rhymes sometimes being forced, I'm guilty of it myself at times. Thanks for the lovely review!! ~Gina :)
Wow. I REALLY like this one!! You did a great job, and the flow is very nice. :) Great job!! Cyns
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I really appreciate you reading this. I enjoyed the challenge of the rhyme, the rhythm, and then the tricky form. I'm glad you enjoyed it, thanks for such a lovely review!! ~Gina :)
Sweet but tragic. A very accurate tale of the loss of dear Sirius (*sniff*) and the way he was expected to act when he was born. Awesome rhythm (you sure do have a gift for that!). The only problem was that it was so short.... but at the same time, you told the story through this brief poem! Good job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for a great first review! I appreciate the compliments. Sorry its short, such is the length of a sonnet. I did write two sonnets that I paired together if you want something a bit longer, lol. It's titled "Two Sonnets" Thanks so much for reaading this, and for leaving such nice reviews of my stories, I really appreciate it!! ~Gina :)