Reviews For The Invisible Girl
Reviewer: Pissenoffanis
Date: 09/05/07 1:45
Chapter: Chapter 1

This is a beautiful story! You've captured the numbness at the beginning very well. I really felt very sympathetic for her. And the ending put a smile on my face.

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you thought the ending was happy. =)

Reviewer: kehribar
Date: 05/06/07 12:40
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hey Melissa!

Wonderful story! You pulled off the second-person narrative masterfully, and Lisa'a characterization is excellent. She really got me thinking about being invisible, and the people who think they are invisible.

You chew, swallow, and take another bite methodically, not thinking about anything in particular.

I love this sentence, for some reason. I don't know; throughout the whole fic, and maybe somewhat because of the style, it seems to me that Lisa chooses or condemns herself to being invisible. I don't know if this was your intent, but I think it fits well with the choice she makes between laughter and crying in the end, because she makes a resolution by hoping that she can break the chains of invisibility. Did this make any sense? ;)

Congrats on a story well-written, and good luck in the challenge!

Author's Response: You're exactly right about Lisa condemning herself to being invisible. She's so set on it, that she never tries to reach out to anyone else, until she decides she's sick of crying. So, yes, you made perfect sense! Thanks for the lovely review! =)

Reviewer: Disappearance_26
Date: 04/22/07 16:19
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hey Mel!
Wow! This is amazing, honest, I loved it!
The second person narrative is not something we see often, so that gives you points for originality. You go girl!
Besides, the reader (who happens to be me, as for now ;)) really gets a feeling of what it's like to be the Invisible Girl. Every line just touches every fiber and makes you feel as though you were really her. You show-- not tell, which is just brilliant!

You are falling, falling, falling, but no one cares, and you can’t quite seem to throw out your arms to brace yourself in time for the landing. You know that eventually you will hit the ground and you will shatter into a million pieces — pieces so small, that even if you could put yourself back together, the lines where you did would be visible to everyone; scars serving as reminders of your loneliness.

Whoa, this particular passage was really profound and impressive, my jaw dropped.

The ending is wonderful, it kinda gives you a lesson. Personally, I'm proud to say that it left me thinking, and actually changed my views on life. So... now you can say you actually changed someone's (my) life with this. Superhero Author! :D

*hugs*
~Priz

Author's Response: Wow! Thank you so much, Priz! This review makes me smile everytime I see it. I'm really glad you liked it, and thanks for reviewing! -hugs back- :D

Reviewer: SiriuslyMental
Date: 04/19/07 21:10
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow! That's all I can say. Amazing work with the characterisation of a character I can honestly say that I forgot existed. This is how every single teenager feels at some point, and it was portrayed so painfully and so realistically. I really love this, especially the second person tense and the way Lisa sort of mocks herself, because everyone does that. And Theodore. He's my fav, so I loved the way you brought him into the story.

Très magnifique!

Author's Response: Hah, I love Theodore too. I'm really glad you liked it. Thanks for reviewing! :D

Reviewer: beachbum
Date: 04/17/07 15:10
Chapter: Chapter 1

This was such an interesting fic. really enjoyed it. You gave a different twist to a character that normally people don't even remember nevermind acknowledge. Loving your writing style x

Author's Response: Thank you so much! :)

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