Reviewer: Dad
Date: 04/28/13 6:44
Chapter: The Most Final Equality

I have read this before. What I want to know is why so few readers leave a review on this site? Is it because the stories have been published elsewhere?

Author's Response: Maybe they've seen it before, I don't know. This was actually one of the first sites I started posting on but I abandoned it years ago. I've decided to catch up now since I'm putting together a revised edition of the story.

Reviewer: FireflyPrincess
Date: 12/17/12 15:58
Chapter: Nothing Important Happened Today

I loved this story! Really kept me hooked until the last chapter ... well done :)

Author's Response: Thank you - I'm assuming you continued reading on a different website after chapter 11? I suppose one day I should try and get the full thing posted here on Mugglenet. Anyway, if you enjoyed it then, on the chance you would care for more, there's a sequel currently in progress. It's called 'Vis Insita' and you can find it on Phoenixsong. Thanks again!

Reviewer: Frank Bryce
Date: 02/11/09 19:43
Chapter: Nothing Important Happened Today

Great fic. I'm pretty sure that if I was eating while I read it that my computer screen would be covered in Nacho cheese from laughing so hard. So thank you for posting a well writen and hilarious fic

Author's Response: I love nacho cheese. Perhaps too much. It's a weakness, it truly is. Anyway, thank you for the kind words. I always appreciate them.

Reviewer: raveralways
Date: 10/23/08 13:35
Chapter: Three to Get Ready...

Haven't posted a review since the first chapter, but I would like you to know that I have been here eagerly awaiting every update. You possess a wonderful gift that I've witnessed rarely, one of which that I am every enivious, and I wished that I had a fraction of. (Horrible english ending in a preposition, sorry.)

I feel that your character development with the canons has gone even farther than the series. And as for Scott, I love him. I love this story, and I love your brilliant writing. Please keep the updates coming. Currently this is the only story that I look forward to farthering.

Author's Response: Hey, thanks. I don't think I've really earned such high praise, but I'm glad you've enjoyed the story thus far. I thought I'd let you know that if you want to read the next chapter now, it's up at This site takes a little time to get things posted since they have to be okayed by an admin. Anyway, hopefully you'll continue to like my writing. Oh, and I probably end sentences in prepositions all the time.

Reviewer: SecretKeeper42
Date: 08/27/08 1:31
Chapter: Some Internal Bell

Brilliant. Where did you get that password poem? Don't tell me you made it up!

Author's Response: Yeah, I just made it up. I wouldn't quote someone else's poem without identifying the source.

Reviewer: SecretKeeper42
Date: 08/27/08 1:29
Chapter: Winterlude

The part I find most interesting about this fic is the many contrasting themes. On one hand, you have a collision of worlds, the violence a first-person video game shooter meets the Wizarding world, a classic crash of American and British/European cultures. And just to spice things up, you throw a very sophiticated philosophical tangent. Nicely done.

One question: who was the LAST person to stop shooting at Scott when he was nullifying their magic in this chapter? My bet is on Ginny. She's stubborn, and the existence of Scott's mission has implications for her on a personal level that she isn't quite ready to address (of course, the same was true of Ron and Hermoine, and look at where they are now.)

Author's Response: Contrasting themes is very important to this story, I think, though I wouldn't define it so much as American vrs. British culture as KharadjaiModern culture vrs. Wizarding culture. I don't think Scott would be very out of place in Muggle London. As for the violence, I think Rowling's books always had the potential for violence, it was just always kept under the hood. For example, she never describes what happens in book seven when all those mandrakes get shot at the Death Eaters, but it had to have killed a bunch of them. The Wizarding world is a dangerous place, it was just always Rowling herself who shied away from the violence implicit in giving everyone lethal magical powers. Interesting question. To be honest I never really thought about it, but I think you're probably right about Ginny's motivations. However, if I had to go back and write the scene out, Luna would be the last person to stop shooting, because she'd be having fun and wouldn't really be surprised that it wasn't affecting Scott.

Reviewer: LadyZQ
Date: 08/19/08 16:15
Chapter: Winterlude

I love this, keep it coming

Author's Response: Thanks. The next chapter is in the beta process so I don't know when it will be ready.

Reviewer: swimmerfreek63
Date: 08/08/08 19:16
Chapter: The Dark Line on the World

Luna Lovegood enjoyed hallways.
:-D :-D :-D :-D :-D :-D :-D :-D :-D :-D
I love statements like those.
I await your further genius....
THanks! :-)

Author's Response: Luna is so whimsical and wonderfully unaffected by all the things that startle everyone else that I just really have fun writing her. There's a certain turn of phrase and absurdist sensibility to writing her that is enjoyable. Thanks as always for giving me a review. Sometimes they really keep me writing.

Reviewer: Time Shifter
Date: 08/07/08 15:29
Chapter: The Dark Line on the World

This story amuses me to no end. I enjoyed seeing how Hermoine thinks (the language was of a much higher level), as well as Luna (I spent a lot of time laughing). I particularly enjoy Scott, both for his ability to view the war like any normal person would (strike back; you know where they live), and how he isn't afraid to talk back to and fight with the Slytherins. And I'm glad Harry's starting to grow from being around Scott. He doesn't react as much to the cursing, and he seems to be a lot less tense, enjoying his time more.

Author's Response: Hermione and Luna are surprisingly easy for me to write. I'm not sure why, since I've never been a sixteen or fifteen year old girl before and therefore can't really identify with them, but I guess I have solid concepts of who I think they are in my mind. Ginny is always the female lead who's a problem for me. I don't think I know her very well. Scott sees the war as just another small scale conflict that can be solved with a few well chosen fatalities. He's been involved in so many that they've ceased to be anything out of the ordinary for him, and in his mind the Slytherins are nothing more than an annoyance and occasional stress reliever. I'm really glad that you think Harry has been changed a little bit by Scott's presence. In the books it was always the more aggressive side of himself that he kept suppressed around Ron and Hermione, who were never very comfortable with it. Scott tends to encourage Harry's offensive tendencies, which makes him an immediate confidant for all the things that Harry never really shared with anyone else in the canon timeline. It's the fight more than anything else that brings the two of them together as friends. In Scott, Harry sees someone who is not only willing to lend a violence that might be necessary to the side of good, but just might be able to get Harry out of the whole mess alive. Thank you very much for reviewing.

Reviewer: LadyZQ
Date: 07/20/08 16:35
Chapter: Unimprobable

this is great, please keep the chapters coming. Love the blank looks on the faces (in my mind) of those who do not understand the U.S. slang.

Author's Response: Those blank looks are precisely the reason Scott uses such slang. He's easily amused and, as is obvious by this point in the story, takes a near-malevolent enjoyment from annoying others. Thank you for the kind review.

Reviewer: swimmerfreek63
Date: 07/20/08 8:50
Chapter: Unimprobable

*rolls on ground laughing*
Oh my.
haha *tears run down face*
I love your story. It never stops being funny.
Thank you so much!

Author's Response: I'm glad you find it humorous. While technically it is not a humor story in the purest sense, I am unable to separate my sense of humor from my writing for any length of time so pretty much all my chaptered works end up that way. Thank you for reviewing.

Reviewer: bigtimer
Date: 06/10/08 13:34
Chapter: Remember October, November? Part II

I love this story, well written. Scott and his sister are weridos but i'm not sure what to think of them can't wait for the next chapter. keep up the good work

Author's Response: Thanks! The Kharan siblings are fairly weird, but that's fairly predictable considering their line of work.

Reviewer: swimmerfreek63
Date: 06/08/08 4:24
Chapter: Remember October, November? Part II

YAY! haha
This chapter was super confusing until the part where harry overheard scott talking on the phone, but once I caught on it was super good!
I love your writing! Can't wait for the next chapter! :-)

Author's Response: The chronology of the story is frequently out of order, which is sort of a running theme. Scott doesn't see time in quite the same way as most people and the writing reflects that. Thanks for reviewing, and I hope you enjoy the next chapter as much as this one.

Reviewer: swimmerfreek63
Date: 04/23/08 21:12
Chapter: Remember October, November? Part I

You, my friend, are an extraordinarily talented writer! I hope to see the next chapters soon! And thank you for providing me with such hilarious entertainment! :-)

Author's Response: And thank you for providing me with a review. The next chapter is forthcoming and I hope you find it as enjoyable.

Reviewer: rae12
Date: 03/14/08 13:51
Chapter: Shape and Diverge

scotts weird and sorta reminds me of a friend i have. good story so far i like the kockturn aly scene. really grand.

Author's Response: Hey, thanks. And yeah, Scott is pretty weird.

Reviewer: FanFicFanatic12
Date: 12/01/07 21:40
Chapter: Nothing Important Happened Today

Scott is so funny! Can't wait to read more.

Author's Response: The next chapter is in the Beta process, so it shouldn't be too long. Scott amuses me too, of course, though perhaps I shouldn't admit that I spent an inordinate amount of time giggling over my own jokes... Thank you for the kind words.

Reviewer: swimmerfreek63
Date: 11/29/07 23:30
Chapter: Shape and Diverge

Oh my! You have a wonderful way with words! Your discriptions! And your plot line! oh they are beautiful! If you ever write a book, please please please let me know! I will be the first to buy it!

Author's Response: I don't think I can ever recall inspiring such an enthusiastic reaction before. Unfortunately my novel writing ability is lacking as I've never really had a good idea for one. I keep telling myself I'll take a stab at it someday. Anyway, thanks for reviewing.

Reviewer: juleiscool
Date: 11/22/07 19:52
Chapter: Nothing Important Happened Today

This is really well written so far, I can't wait to read more.

Author's Response: Thank you. I've finally gotten a replacement Beta so I can start updating again - the next chapter has been submitted and should be up soon.

Reviewer: radishearrings3
Date: 10/27/07 18:38
Chapter: Shape and Diverge

I think you're doing a very good job. you're writing style is impressive, the plot isn't confusing or anything, you display the canon characters well, and even though you switch points of view pretty often, it's easy to recognize what's going on. Good job!

There's just one thing-I'm a little nervous about Scott. You seem to fit this kind of 'master of the universe' in pretty well with other characters, he's strange, but you show the other character's reactions really well. The thing is, Harry's got to do some things on his own. I know I haven't read real far into the story, and I don't know whether you're sure what you're doing with Scott or not, but I'm worried about him. Perfect people-the kind that fully understand Luna as soon as they see her, the kind that is more powerful than Harry and Voldemort and Dumbledore, has a frightening grip, and on top of all that, has teenage girls falling all over him is not a very interesting person. You wrote him surprisingly well, but with him as a main and very influential character, I know exactly how the story will end-exactly how Scott wants it to. Destiny usually isn't a character in a story, and even if it is, where's the conflict in having 'him' support the protagonist all the time?

I hope you're alright with Scott. Good job and good luck writing more!

Author's Response: First off, let me thank you for the encouraging review. I am fully aware that this story fits itself into an odd niche and I always appreciate when anyone takes the time to try and understand it further. Secondly, I would be more than happy to address your questions concerning Scott. Your worries are fully justified based on fanfiction in general, I will freely admit. The original character is often nothing more than an idealized representation of the author. I'm sure we both know what that's called. As the story progresses it is my intention to illuminate things further, but in order to assuage your fears I'll jump ahead a bit. Let me assure you that Scott is both neither a physical representation of destiny, nor is he a 'master' of any universe. What he's doing with Harry is his job, and he's being paid to get it done. Harry does indeed have to face some things alone. That's the will of the universe, and before that Scott is helpless. Without revealing too much, I'll say that much of Scott's conflict derives from the fact that he is unable to do the things he wants to. The shape of things is the master. If Scott breaks it, he fails. He is working within a very tight and limiting set of rules, and those rules change by the minute. Scott is not very happy about that by the time you get to the chapters I'm writing right now. His power means nothing if he's not allowed to flex it. I'd also like to make a special note that the reason Scott attracted any female interest in the first place was because he was a new and therefore somewhat interesting person. That passes with time. I'll state right here and now that he never has any romantic entanglements with any canon characters at any point. Ever. His affinity with Luna is nothing more than sympathy and a hint that Luna is even more unusual than she seems. It's also important to say that it was never my intention to completely change the story of the sixth book. In many cases I'm simply retelling the same or similar events from a different point of view, which I enjoy. That's not to say that everything is the same, because it isn't. The most subtle variations can have long term effects. And again, without giving it away, I highly doubt the now-infamous ending of book six will change the way you think it will. Obviously I don't know what you're thinking... But for Scott success does not necessarily mean there have been no sacrifices. I hope to finally get a new Beta and continue the story and thus illuminate things further. I've had many chapters completed for months now but the lack of a Beta has been holding things up. Thanks again for your review.

Reviewer: Angel of Dreams
Date: 09/15/07 19:30
Chapter: IntegralExtrinsic

Bravo! Although I haven't seen a fifth chapter in a while, I found this chapter to be excellent and rather hilarious. I particularly liked Scott's choice for the takedown rather than the magic - it shows just how ineffectual Snape really was! Again, great job!

Author's Response: Sorry both for not responding sooner and for the lack of a new chapter in a great deal of time. The story itself has continued to progress well, but I've struggled with finding a new Beta for it. There are roughly 16 completed chapters but without a Beta I don't feel comfortable in posting them. Thanks for the kind review. I'm really trying to get the story in shape so I can continue posting.

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