Reviews For Not Quite Enough
Reviewer: HarperLee
Date: 06/10/07 10:08
Chapter: Chapter 1

That really deepens the impact of their break up for me.

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 06/03/07 21:50
Chapter: Chapter 1

Very powerful poem, wendelin, especially in the last stanza. You've portrayed this pairing perfectly, in my opinion, and you do it without wasting a word and with a lot of beauty.

My only nitpick:

Remember when you held that dove?
All Iíve ever learned from love,
Is how it breaks you when you need it the most.

I don't really understand the relevance on the first line - it seems to me that you were just trying to rhyme, and so you added that in. I may be wrong, and it may be important, but it just doesn't connect with the rest of the poem and was a bit jarring.

Otherwise, though, this was a wonderful poem; great flow and rhythm, wonderfully unforced rhyme, and it was all uniquely portrayed. Great job.


Reviewer: Lalalalatina
Date: 06/03/07 12:27
Chapter: Chapter 1

Great poem. It is Ginny's POV, am I correct? A question about the dove before I go on- was it supposed to be symbolic of their love? Because it wasn't extremely clear why you added the dove. And later in the poem you mentioned revenge... was Harry getting revenge because of his own terrible life and taking it out on Ginny?

I like how you used those "remember" questions at the beginning of some of the stanzas. It gives the poem a before/after, past/present sort of theme.

A stanza I thought was brilliant was:

There were ghosts, there were wings,
But you never even stopped to think,
That there had once been angels and ash.

Excellent choice of words, excellent poem.^^

Reviewer: ginevraweasley
Date: 06/03/07 2:58
Chapter: Chapter 1

that was a really good poem!!

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