Reviewer: HarryPotterLover5726
Date: 02/27/11 18:25
Chapter: All Battles are the Same

I'll leave you a review that will hopefully encourage you to continue! :)

Reviewer: HarryPotterLover5726
Date: 02/27/11 17:44
Chapter: Old and New Faces

Great Chapter!

Reviewer: HarryPotterLover5726
Date: 02/27/11 16:57
Chapter: One Step Forward, Two Steps Back

I don't think you need to tone it down at all. I think your doing a great job!

Reviewer: HarryPotterLover5726
Date: 02/27/11 16:26
Chapter: Realising the truth

I think this is a great idea for a story and I think that your getting the thoughts and emotional and the behaviors as well.  Keep Going!

Reviewer: ringobeatlesfan4
Date: 10/24/08 19:28
Chapter: A Perfect Waste

Oh Merlin... I can definitely see Ginny sinking to this despair after HArry broke up with her, and there are times when I feel like I'm not good enough for anyone. Except with me, I always tell my friends and they make me feel better, so why couldn't Ginny do that??? But it's a wonderful writing style, all in all! {BeccA}

Reviewer: fanbug
Date: 08/27/08 16:16
Chapter: Realising the truth

I feel so bad for Ginny! It's sad how she thinks Harry doesn't like her because she's fat (which she's NOT) and that she would go to such high measures to become 'perfect.' I really hope somebody does something for her soon!

Reviewer: fanbug
Date: 08/27/08 16:13
Chapter: A Perfect Waste

I love this story. It's got all the needed details and I can actually understand some of what Ginny feels from your words. I can't wait for an update.

-Leslie

Reviewer: harry_victoria
Date: 06/03/08 11:07
Chapter: A Perfect Waste

Darn, I have GOT to check for updates more often. I had no idea this chapter was up!

I do hope that Ginny gets better soon. She seems to be going deeper into her anorexic battle, and I hope that somebody helps her soon.

Keep updating, Emma.

--Victoria

Author's Response: Thanks for carrying on reading and reviewing. It makes me happy.rnI've edited chapter two pretty drastically, so you might want to go and re-read that as it throws a different light on the story. I'll be editing most of the earlier chapters now I've finished my exams.rnChapter ten will still be a while, but I am slowly working on it.rnemma x

Reviewer: lalabella
Date: 05/22/08 23:43
Chapter: A Perfect Waste

hmmm ok first of all, you said Ginny was never fat. Now it's been five months of constant starvation and you actually have her playing Quidditch? running around. I love the concept of this story but you have to follow the facts by now Ginny would probably be 55 pounds if 5 months ago before she started Hogwarts she was 100. Possibly even lower. She should have no energy, her friends should be more confronting aswell as that if you want to write a story as serious is this please go more in depth. I was practically frowning the whole time reading this. You assumptions are not correct, you have jumped to quickly from each chapter. I expect you to take time posting for great result, but this was short and sloppy. Sorry to sound harsh but this is giving a complete false statement of people who have suffered from Anorexia Nervosa.

Please do some research before you post again, i'm sure your next will chapter will be great once you know the few crucial facts you've left out. Again sorry to sound harsh, but you've made too many mistakes for my liking. The most crucial being Ginny's anorexia not even developing. You tried to cover this up with one sentence of Ginny "always knowing" then it was bang, i'm starving myself. That would have worked but Ginny wouldn't have been able to immediately cut out all food, she would need a while, she would have had a few slips.

*sigh* i really don't want it to sound like i'm flaming this story, but it's just with a few corrections it can be brilliant. The concept is amazing and i'm excited for this story, just please do some research.

Author's Response: No you are absolutely right. I messed up at the beginning, and should have spent much longer on Ginny slowly developing anorexia but I was too excited about my writing and didn't really stop to think about how it would all work out and now I'm stuck because the position Ginny would be in in reality does not work in my storyline. I have considered throwing in a couple of binges to fatten her up.... but that felt cruel and I don't think Ginny's character would allow spontaneous binges as this point anyway. Maybe I should rewrite it and inject some slip ups in earlier on...?rnrnBelieve me the problem isn't research, it may not appear it but I actually do know what I am talking about from a more secondary point of view, but conveying what I know into a character in the plot is hard because I can't see it happening. Especially when I really have no sense of time, hence the leaps forward from chapter to chapter.rnrnI was working on the next chapter but maybe I need to turn my attention to improving the earlier chapters. Thanks for your review. I knew it wasn't working but I guess I just needed someone else to be blunt about it to me.rnrnemma x

Reviewer: peevesismyhero
Date: 04/30/08 13:21
Chapter: A Perfect Waste

as always, it was a great chapter! i cant wait for more! but poor ginny!!! :-(

Reviewer: BertieBottsBeans
Date: 04/25/08 14:06
Chapter: A Perfect Waste

Wonderful chapter. Poor Ginny . . . I'm quite frightened for her. The scary thing is that it's easy to see that so many of us in the real world are close to slipping down into darkness like she has, and society's fixation on weight and body image certainly doesn't help. . . . Thank you for writing this.

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing. It is a worrying how easy it is in this day and age to end up in the same position as Ginny. Hopefully one day it will be considered beautiful to just be yourself.
emma x

Reviewer: the squid girl
Date: 04/22/08 20:59
Chapter: A Perfect Waste

Wow. This story is absolutely amazing. And terrifying. I've never really thought about the extremes people go to for beauty. Wouldn't it be nice if people could just love themselves for whatever they are, not just what they look like?

I thought that Ginny was very in character, which sort of amazed me, because when I first read the summary, I thought, 'oh Ginny will probably be all weepy and annoying', but it really surprised me. Brilliantly written!

~Bella

Author's Response: It would indeed be lovely if everyone was happy within their own skin without worrying what others thought of them, but I can't see it happening any time soon. Society is too focused on appearence to have it change around so drastically. But you'd be suprised how far some people will actually go to make themselves 'perfect' if you did some digging. Ginny's actions here would seem almost normal.
I'm glad you think Ginny is in character, she is my favourite in the Harry Potter series and I want to do her justice, especially as I'm putting her through hell...
Thanks for reading and for your lovely review, I'm all smiles now. emma x

Reviewer: amzing
Date: 04/22/08 19:13
Chapter: A Perfect Waste

wow you're at the ninth chapter and this still is a good story...even though i dont like to watch people suffer this was well written not put in a harsh or mean way...good work.. i look foward to your next chapter :)

Author's Response: I don't like making people suffer. Unfortunately I seem to be good at depressing stories. It's easier to describe trauma than it is happiness.
Thanks for reading. emma x

Reviewer: how I live now
Date: 04/22/08 13:31
Chapter: A Perfect Waste

Another great chapter from a really moving story. A friend of mine is coming out of the other end of an eatin disorder, and your work is very accurate to what his frame of mind was like. Well done! I look forward to another update soon!

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I'm sorry to here about your friend but it's so good he is getting better.
emma x

Reviewer: pheonix_song_719
Date: 04/22/08 6:19
Chapter: A Perfect Waste

Wonderful! Wonderful! Wonderful! Nothing shirt of! So so proud Emma.

Author's Response: *blush* Well, you helped make it wonderful, too.
emma x

Reviewer: Pissenoffanis
Date: 04/22/08 1:15
Chapter: A Perfect Waste

Ooooh... now an unknown potion has been thrown into the mix. SO the question is, are her pains from the potion? You put quite a strong image with "my eyes cleverly averted from the odd splashes of red and other strange substances that had stained the pages" *shudders* Nice line.

I have a question though - are her roommates and friends too busy to notice her, or are they afraid to speak up in case they hurt her feelings, knowing the fragile emotional state she is in?

Author's Response: Yes, she was sick because of the potion. It was all a bit of a scam really. Have you ever had the flu or a tummy bug that made you really sick? And when you get better your stomach seems to have shrunk and turned really flat? The potion was designed to make you very sick, but Ginny made it worse by taking too much than was needed. The pain was from that.
Two of her roommates haven't noticed. She was never particularly close to them. But Patricia noticed. Of course Ginny has now lied to her and thrown her off the scent so she thinks she is safe from any more inteference. Neville and Luna know Ginny is upset about something and isn't looking well, but they are too trusting so think she is just exhausted and feeling sensitive about Harry, Ron and Hermione having disappeared, which of course she is.
emma x

Reviewer: bob6913
Date: 04/21/08 19:54
Chapter: A Perfect Waste

That was really interesting and I have to admit that Ginny's behavior is nothing short of disturbing.
Keep up the great work :]

Author's Response: Hmm, I never really thought about it being disturbing... And of course to Ginny it seems perfectly natural.rnThanks for reading.rnemma x

Reviewer: cassie123
Date: 04/21/08 19:35
Chapter: A Perfect Waste

A great chapter.
Looking forward to the next one :)

Author's Response: Thanks. Chapter ten will be a while I'm afraid. I have my exams starting in three weeks so I have to focus on them, obviously. I will get it written as soon as possible though.
emma x

Reviewer: Danielle_Malfoy
Date: 04/11/08 10:01
Chapter: The Right Path To Choose

Ooh.... I am speechless, I feel quite sad,

Author's Response: Hey, it let you read it!
rnI hope that speechlessness is from amazement at the brilliance of the fic? Or not...
rnI'm sorry for making you sad. And I can't promise it won't happen again.
rnThe next chapter has been submitted (not that you asked, but shh) so should be up any day now.
rnThanks for reading and reviewing. emma x

Reviewer: Danielle_Malfoy
Date: 03/21/08 14:22
Chapter: One Step Forward, Two Steps Back

Why cant I view chapter 1?

:(

Author's Response: I don't know... Technical hitch?

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