*grabs the cookies* *mutters: 'Stale!'*
I see you didn't heed some of the clarifications I advised (hint: incest), but it worked anyway. I think it made this story sparkle more.
Good luck for the challenge, Sparksie! The rest of my comments you know already. *pokes*
Author's Response: To clarify is to kill, Luci (see, I can come up with annoying nicknames too!). And I made those cookies myself. Ungrateful wench... *mutters*
Great! I was suprised to find myself laughing many times throughout the story- it sets it apart from the rest. Question- was the name of the main character Brennan or Sparks, or were those two different people?... Anyway, I really enjoyed the different memories that she tried- the slug was my favorite. I didn't see how the one she chose was different, though, so some more clarification there would be nice. I did enjoy it, though- good luck!
Author's Response: For Question One: Sparks' real name is Kathleen Brennan. (See "Keeping It Real" for more info [/shamelss self-promoting]) For Question Two: Erm... I don't know. Can I be expected to control my muse? Especially when it takes on the form of an evil, demented PINK plot bunny who goes by the name of Wilfred... *mutters darkly* *scowls at Wilfred, who nibbles at the corners of the page*