What do I say to this? Well, I don't see why it was hard for Mrs. Weasley to have that conversation (although, I'm not a mother, so...) but I completely understand her concern! The message of this story should be for everyone- wizards and Muggles alike! Please try to be smart!!!!!!!! So, this story only strengthened my morals. Thanks! :)
Author's Response: Yeah, I wrote this one-shot after feeling slightly uneasy over the message its companion piece was sending (in which underage Molly and several underage friends sneak into a Muggle bar).
this one deserved a prize lke your other inspired one shots!
This is a lovely little piece. I think I’ll have to set aside some time to read Shadows of the Past --- As well as More Than A Game, which looks incredibly interesting, but a little too long for half-four in the morning, I think ;)
The first paragraph snaps my attention up right way; no waiting around a few paragraphs to see if this is something I can get into. I really like your tone and writing style, it fits well with the Potterverse, and the characters come alive and into character very quickly and visibly in my mind.
I also like touches of the wizarding world in fic; they’re quite the delight, such as your kelpie marshmallows. Which, might I say, sound fascinating! Do they shift shapes? And, that hot chocolate recipe sounds absolutely mouth-watering. Such wonderful details.
She half-hoped that the girls would have some excuse of being busy. Then she firmly reminded herself that she was a Gryffindor and that part of bravery is having the courage to admit one’s mistakes. - These are great lines because it shows a very realistic fear, and it’s not something you usually see from the outside. People so often reduce bravery to being afraid of physical, outside forces rather than personal, emotion things, parts of yourself even. I sort of sense that ‘half-hope’ in Molly; she’s steeled herself to do this, and is ready, and the fear in her is convincing her that if the girls are busy, than it’s out of her hands until later, or the next day, or the next week. It’s just such a human, relatable emotion.
Molly noticed Ginny begin to mouth the word “Percy” to Hermione and quickly interrupted. -- that made me chuckle.
Ginny stopped tracing the wood grain pattern of the table and looked up in surprise. “You what?” -- Another great, realistic touch, and very IC for Ginny. I can just see her there, distracting herself while her mother begins on a boring lecture – until suddenly it turns out not to be so boring after all. Lovely.
So, yes, I really liked this. I recognise your penname, I’m pretty sure I’ve read your fic before, as a mod. So, when I ventured to your author page I knew I’d find something well-written and enjoyable. Very good fic, it really does pique my interest in SotP. Though, at the very least, I will try out some of your other one-shots :)
wow. interesting turn to the story.
the way you characterized Mrs. Weasly was a bit un-expected, but it worked quite well.
Author's Response: Thanks! :)
That was very...educating. I think that it's good that there are some stories with good morals here. (I'm not insulting any stories; please don't take it the wrong way, anybody!) I think this was a good, strong thing to post, although I don't think I would be such a Gryffindor as Mrs. Weasley. I don't think I could be brave enough to post this, but I'm glad you did.
Author's Response: Thanks, your review means a lot to me; I have to admit I was rather nervous about how this story would be received.
Wow, serious and funny. Awesomely written. One tiny thing, though:
Molly Weasley wrung her hands in her apron. She knew she had to have this conversation but she was dreading it. She and Athur had agreed though… You misspelled 'Arthur'. I won't hold it against you, though! :D
My favorite part of this whole thing was:
“Thank you dear.” Molly took another deep breath before continuing. “I wanted to tell you about a mistake I made many years ago.”
Molly noticed Ginny begin to mouth the word “Percy” to Hermione and quickly interrupted. That had me laughing very hard. Poor Percy. lol
All in all an awesome job. I really love your writing.
Author's Response: Thanks, I'll fix that as soon as I get a chance. Usually I misspell Voldemort as Vodlemort but I never caught that Arthur one. I found it quite difficult to mix the humour with the seriousness and am quite relieved that you liked the balance. Thanks again for the review!
It was great I love little compaion pieces to big stories it lets you see what happened later without killing the suspence. I'm sorry that you had to kill someone off. It was still great.
Author's Response: Thank you! I was really worried about how this piece came across and am now breathing a sigh of relief!
Wow really good!
~ Hannah Abbot
Author's Response: Thanks! :)