P.S. Just read some other reviews which provoked a few rare thoughts. I'm really hoping Lillian doesn't get caught using the lucky potion, I'm hoping it will get her through the tasks safely, but not let her win. Doesn't felix take you where you want to go, if so then it might recognise the slight subconscious thought that she doesn't deserve to win when she's cheated so outrageously and therefore just guide her to safety, the dominant thought in all their minds. Somebody also said that the characters seemed quite formal, but this escaped my notice, primarily because I expect such behaviour of the wizarding world. Many of it's occupants are very traditional particularly when it comes to events like the triwizard.
Wow, what another excellent extention of the VV universe. I'm finding it hard to think of Harry as anything other than canon, but apart from that I'm loving it. Not sure it's such a good idea to sneak Teddy into her room, hope she changes her mind he gives me the creeps a bit, very pushy. I'd love to know who his parents are are if they know Severus, oh and the Durmstrang judge needs watching too. Can't wait for an update.
Hello. =) I haven't left you a review in quite a while – I'm glad to see an update!
This was a fun little chapter. There was definitely a lot of development in the romantic area, though I sometimes felt like it wasn't as subtle as I would have expected on Teddy and Lillian's part, being a Slytherin and a Ravenclaw as they are. And I have to admit I would love to see Severus and Ginny together, even though this is Lillian's story.
I was a bit puzzled by her father giving her socks; even after explaining that he's protective and wants her to be warm, it wasn't a very Severus-like gift, to me. Also, Ginny didn't seem herself, saying “good heavens” and such – perhaps it's only that she's become maternal. Arthur was amusing, however. It's just so appropriate that Severus's and Ginny's child would be so curious and persistent. These two lines were really funny, too: 'I had no idea you could turn that shade,' and, 'unlike Hen, he actually could whisper.' I think what made the second so funny was that it's so appropriate that they call her Hen, because I visualize a hen continually sqwaking. Hee.
I don't see too much of Neville in Henrietta, though Hermione shows clearly in almost everything that she does. Lillian is just a joy. I love reading a combination of Ginny and Severus. Teddy, however, I don't have quite as much a feel for. I really do wonder what further role he'll play in the story; he is a Slytherin, after all. Perhaps my suspicion is wrong, but I'll look forward to seeing this story progress in any case.
Using felix seems like begging to be caught. I wonder how she's going to get away with it.
I'm enjoying your story so far, please keep those chapters coming!
OH MY GOD!!! This is an amazing story! Please update soon!
I check for updates on this story embarrassingly often. Your have a real gift of showing how characters think.
I loved it! You did a great job of coming up with a challenge that seemed appropriate for the Tri Wizard tournament. I know that can be difficult, since I once thought about writting a Tri-fic. Anyway, good show. I thought it was a fun chappie.
I also liked the wings. Exactly what I would have done. I am a bit surprised more wizards/witches don't try it. As soon as I read the books for the first time my imadiate question was "Why don't they magically give themselves wings?"
Now I don't want to sound like a goodie-two-shoes, but I don't like it when the hero/heroine cheats. Felix is banned. Why is she using it? Because she is her father's daughter? It would be nice to see the situation sorted out, for good or ill. I'm not sure exactly what I am trying to say, but right now the Felix has me uneasy. Will she get away with it? Will she get caught? What will McG do when she finds out?
I continue to like Lillian's character-- the subtle bled of her mother and father is perfect! I can't wait to see where this fic will go.
UPDATE UPDATE!!! Pleeeaase!!
Perfect, perfect, so beautiful. What an engaging person Lillian is - I wish I could hang out with her. This is, by the way, the *entire* reason I read fiction (inhale fiction, drown myself in fiction - whatever): to meet people I want to know. Jamie and Claire in OUTLANDER, Althea in the LIVESHIP books, Anita Blake in the ANITA BLAKE: VAMPIRE HUNTER books (though she does not write as well as you do!). Thank you for creating more persons I want to keep in my life!!
Well, first of all I'd like to say that I've read almost everything you've posted, and I love your style.
And second, damn you, write more so I have something to read!
Yay! I was desperately eager for a story about Lillian. This is a very promising beginning. I can't wait for chapter 5.
enjoying this one...as with your work, always!! keep writing!!
Oh, I love this twist. It's so characteristic of Severus to do something like this, and his daughter to rationalize it. Still think the speech is a little too formal for teenagers, but Lillian is wonderful. I'm looking forward to seeing where this story goes, especially with Teddy. ;) I have this suspicion that you've been waiting to write about Ginny + Severus in one person for some time...
I love it! Glad to see that Severus retains a bit of sneakiness along with his fatherly concerned. Lillian is a wonderful character.
Hurry up and write some more it'e so good.
Henrietta Granger-Longbottom ???!?!?!?!!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!!?!? neville and hermione????? never thought of that one.....
its killing me....who are her parents?!?!!?!?!?
Three chapter, and I'm hooked. Lillian is a really fun character to read. I can't wait to find out what happens next!
Haha, that reminds me of having lunch with a boy who had a DUI conviction. *coughs*
Very amusing. This is an entertaining story, and it's interesting to see how Lillian is similar and dissimilar to her father. One thing, though--everyone seems to be a bit more formal than most people are in real life.