Love it. The Black brothers relationship is really interesting, I think. "We walk the same road, Sirius. We just chose different paths." perfectly sums it up, I think. Love that line.
Great work! :)
Lovely tone, well done, except the poem/song(?) was interruptive of the flow, though it did fit the scene.
Author's Response: Thank you for the constructive crit and the review. :)
That's all I can say.
Author's Response: Reviews like these make my day! Thanks!