Reviewer: HermioneJean1
Date: 07/15/13 5:43
Chapter: Chapter 13: In Which Lee Comes To Light

This was a great story. I liked Arden, I think I am most like her. She is who I'll be drawing for your competition! You are amazing- keep up the good work! :)

Reviewer: Maddie Potter
Date: 03/05/12 5:34
Chapter: Chapter 13: In Which Lee Comes To Light

Haa... well, I'm kinda notoriously bad at picking favorite anythings, but my favorite OCs are Jordan, Haley, and Ted. I'm sort of a cross between Jordan and Haley -- hyper, studious, bookworm, can't raise one eyebrow to save my life, hyper, rather musical, seriously into technology, hyper, etc. Also, Giorgi is extremely cool and reminds me of one of my best friends. I would be quite interested to hear the rest of the Zabini/potato joke. Thanks for making my life that much nicer! By the way... you are my favorite MNFF author.

Reviewer: sejackson91
Date: 09/27/11 13:19
Chapter: Chapter 1: In Which Jordan Spends Most of the Chapter Being Surprised

So I have a slight problem. If you remember from Harry's fourth year, there's no quidditch and thus no quidditch captain when there is the Triwizard tournament. I didn't mind your first story differing from the epilogue because it was very well written and engaging (and I just pretended the kids had different names or different parent so that it worked in the cannon world I love). However, when things contradict the way Rowling has written the wizarding world, it does bother me a bit.

Reviewer: _Clara_
Date: 08/24/11 15:00
Chapter: Chapter 13: In Which Lee Comes To Light

Lee certainly surprised me :) I liked the story!!

Reviewer: arnold_the_pygmy_puff
Date: 05/24/11 13:26
Chapter: Chapter 13: In Which Lee Comes To Light

That was an awesome story!!! I didn't know who Lee was until before I read the last chapter actually. I thought maybe it was Ginny or Hermione because it sounded kind of like a mom talking. I was going through my head all the names I knew and none of them started with L. Then I thought, Luna... Evans? for some reason and then something just snapped in my head and I was like wow! I think the characters I can relate to are Giorgi, because I tend to use a lot of exclamation points in emails, and I too, think that the Harry Potter books are awesome as mentioned in her email. I also really like Haley, because she's so out there and she goes around singing all the time, which is something that I do. I also think that Ron's addiction to coffee is weird, but funny at the same time!

Reviewer: Dumbledores_Fave
Date: 05/22/11 8:57
Chapter: Chapter 11: In Which Ivy Gets Quite The Workout

“Technically, I am,” Jordan said calmly, stealing the ball. “Magical tendencies are caused by a genetic mutation. And as if that wasn’t enough, scientifically speaking, all males are mutants, because the ‘y’ chromosome is a mutation of the ‘x’ chromosome.”

Is that true?

Reviewer: Livigurl101
Date: 12/07/10 13:27
Chapter: Chapter 13: In Which Lee Comes To Light

I'm definitly a Haley, and I absolutely love your book things. They make me laugh

Reviewer: AReader
Date: 09/06/10 14:33
Chapter: Chapter 13: In Which Lee Comes To Light

You should write a one-shot about Harry exploring the diary a bit more. I wish I could, but, it would be like, fanfiction, for a fanfiction story...

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 04/02/10 8:26
Chapter: Chapter 13: In Which Lee Comes To Light

I'm embarrassed to say I didn't know who Lee was. I am so unimaginative at times. But in a way, that's no fair. Authors keep changing Lily's middle name so it suits their purposes. How was I supposed to know that her middle name was Elizabeth which made her initials Lee. I really enjoyed this story. I loved how everyone grew and matured this year. I liked how you went through this chapter and said good-bye to all of them. I totally forgot about OWLS. Well, I kind of thought about them but I figured they couldn't take them after all they'd done. Great story. I'll see you soon in the next one.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 04/01/10 12:52
Chapter: Chapter 12: In Which Pigs Fly And Emma Hugs Tyrone

That was wonderful. I loved how everyone worked together to capture Apple. I also loved that Jordan stood up for Giorgi and argued against the Obliviators taking her memories. I was kind of shocked when Marina cut her hair--what will her mother say? How will they explain what happened to the Prime Minister? Great chapter.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 04/01/10 12:19
Chapter: Chapter 11: In Which Ivy Gets Quite The Workout

So how will Jordan change his plan at the last minute. I have no doubt that he can. My favorite part in this chapter was when Ted and Arden had to get down into the wolf exhibit and Ivy had to carry Ted down. It sounded so cute--how you described her carrying him and him hanging on. This is such a good story but I can't wait to see how you end it. Great chapter.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 04/01/10 10:38
Chapter: Chapter 10: In Which Our Heroes Get Ready To Rumble

I couldn't for the life of me figure out who Jordan was going to pick up. I didn't expect Giorgi. I loved how you brought the Potter books back into the story which made it easier for Giorgi to accept everything Jordan was telling her. That Haley is so crazy. I also loved finding out who each person in Potter's Pentagon would choose to go on this mission. In a way this is the new Triwizard Tournament since each of the champions is involved. I can't wait to see what happens and how you bring this story to a close. Great chapter.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 04/01/10 9:21
Chapter: Chapter 9: In Which We Finally Learn Exactly What's Up

Thank goodness Jordan didn't forget that Ivy had something else to say. I was so astonished by her turning into an animagus that I just forgot. I can really see her as a fox. I figured something strange was going to come up with this Apple character. His running for Minister of Magic and Prime Minister was too weird. And Yay for Emma at disclosing the cheating. I could sense her disappointment though. I hate cheating too. It's not even fun. Great chapter.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 03/31/10 14:05
Chapter: Chapter 8: In Which Tyrone Does NOT Enjoy Brief Insanity

I don't know how Marina and Haley got their directions mixed up. Maybe the ghosts screwed up. There should've been some safety catch where the ghosts wouldn't have given the directions to the wrong person. And, why would they all have to brew the same potion? It might have been more challenging if they had to figure out which potion to brew. There has to be some reason that the Goblet picked Emma as a champion--she must have some sort of chance at winning. Great chapter. I'm still hoping that Emma has a chance at winning.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 03/31/10 12:47
Chapter: Chapter 7: That Romance Chapter

I can't wait for Jordan to fall in love. This was another fabulous chapter. I chuckled at Ivy and Ted snogging in the broom closet and getting caught by all people, Zabini. Then to have the story circulated and pretty much being told by Harry to go to the Room of Requirement was too much:D And what a big surprise--Haley going to the Ball with the kid from Durmstrang. That was so unexpected. Great chapter.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 03/31/10 9:11
Chapter: Chapter 6: In Which Various French People Anger Various English People

That chapter was pretty cool. It's so funny that Ron has a caffeine addiction from coffee and that Emma has to keep him out of the new coffee shop. It's so sweet that Ivy likes Ted for himself rather than being attached to the concept of having a boyfriend. How could any twins be more different than Jordan and Haley. That Giorgi gets into more trouble. I think it's funny that Jordan is training his Quidditch team using muggle football exercises:D Great chapter.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 03/30/10 15:43
Chapter: Chapter 5: In Which Emma Enjoys Mild Insanity

You're right--there was a part of this chapter that made no sense but it wasn't supposed to:D Poor Emma but I guess when you have two Weasleys competing one of them has to lose. Hermione is too funny--Ron's even funnier insulting himself. Again, a very witty chapter. I loved it.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 03/30/10 13:55
Chapter: Chapter 4: In Which Ted Continues To Be Adorable

These chapters get better and better. I think the best part of this chapter is when Jordan found out that there was a series of Harry Potter books and movies. Horrified, he asked Harry about them and Harry said they were fairly accurate:D It was cute when Ted was interacting with Arden as a wolf. That journal is sure mysterious. Great chapter.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 03/30/10 12:42
Chapter: Chapter 3: In Which The Champions Stood; The Rest Saw Their Better

Wow--You know, I think I like your second book better than the first. I think it's wittier. There are so many humorous parts that I don't know which to focus on. Jordan seems to have come a long way in developing a "nicer" personality. He's kind of growing on me. I liked that Giordin and friends rigged the intercom system so the headmaster sounded like Daffy Duck. I love that Jordan has an e-mail friend. This was such a great chapter. Again, there were so many wonderful things that I can't even begin to comment on them all. I think what's fun is that everything is so unexpected.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 03/30/10 10:16
Chapter: Chapter 2: In Which Deja Vu Appears In The Form Of A Diary Of Dubious Origin

Hmm--I don't think Apple can campaign at a school--although if it were a college he probably could. I'll have to see what you do about that. I love the game that Emma and Haley play during sorting. It was great when Ted overheard two first-years commenting on Remus being a werewolf. The diary is an interesting addition. I also liked that students could go to the Muggle Studies classroom and their electronics would work. Ingenious. Great chapter.

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