Reviewer: PadfootnPeeves
Date: 05/22/08 15:33
Chapter: Chapter 12: In Which Pigs Fly And Emma Hugs Tyrone

Oh, darn. I'm so disappointed... you should really stop the false advertising...

Sure, Emma hugs Tyrone, but not one stinking pig flew! It didn't even get airborne! The outrage! The scandal! The...

Oh gosh (now I sound like David Archuleta), Jordan is amazing. And this line:

“I don’t know. It doesn’t exist.”

It sounds like something I'd say ^_^

All the characters were pretty awesome in this chapter. I'm sad to admit I don't really remember the hair ribbon thing, but as long as you won't eat me, I guess it'll be okay. What'd Marina say to Arden, anyways?

Harry smiled. “That’s impressive. Teamwork. I’d give a long and very dull speech about it, but I have to go and sort out this insane mess.”

Dad is so cool, thought Jordan.


Aw, Jordy loves his daddy!

Apple was kinda creepy. He didn't talk that much, but if he fought them or something, it would have been a total repeat of the last book. Not that I mind, but...

The Emma/Tyrone was adorable (practising for a play... *snort*... will they be singing 'Get that thing back where it came from or so help me'?), Marina was irritating (I'm biased), Haley was awesome-possum, Ted was cute (even though he had little time, but that's okay), Vlady was cool, Ivy was sweet (who else would work so tiredlessly for their boyfriend?), Arden was neat (I'm running out of adjectives and she truly was), and Giorgi was surprising in that she had no friends- I'd be friends with her! And I've already mentioned Jordan.

That was a runon. And I think I've violated the number of parentheses you're allowed to use in a sentence.

All in all, it was so hot, it could sing the phone book! I'm sad there's only one chapter left; In Which The Last Chapter is Posted, but then we get Potter's Pentagon: The Next (Book Three). Yes, be glad I'm not writing your story...
~PnP

Author's Response: PIGS DID FLY. Remember? Tancred Apple made pigs fly when he was doing his little whacko works of magic. Yeps. See, I wouldn't lie to you. I don't know what Marina said to Arden because I don't speak French. (I love these little plot devices I can use to get out of answering questions.) Hahahaha, you got the Monsters, Inc reference! You just won, my friend. As for the parentheses... join my club! I've been REJECTED for using too many parentheses before! And you know what, you SHOULD write my story. That'd be hilarious. My friend made up the weirdest plotline for a third book involving an evil barbershop quartet putting the Imperius charm on Ted and making Ron's hair never stop growing. Yes, my friends are odd.

Reviewer: ringobeatlesfan4
Date: 05/22/08 15:11
Chapter: Chapter 1: In Which Jordan Spends Most of the Chapter Being Surprised

Oh yea!!! *facepalm* I normally have an excellent memory, so why can't I remember the conclusion of, like, the best thing Mugglenet has seen?? (Your other books all tie for second)!!!!!!!!!!! By the way, congrats on your Honour-Society-thingy........... yea, congrats!

Author's Response: Fwahahaha, that's okay. I was just reminding you. As for the honour society, I've already been in it for a year, so it's not my induction, but I get to see everyone else inducted and I get food and there's cool skits and stuff. Though Nevilles_Girl (author of "A Day At The Spa" on this site) is being inducted today... cheers for her!

Reviewer: ringobeatlesfan4
Date: 05/22/08 14:59
Chapter: Chapter 12: In Which Pigs Fly And Emma Hugs Tyrone

Emma got to her feet. “You know what?” she stated. “Not only will I keep going, Tyrone Jonathan Thomas—“

“My middle name is Vincent.”
^^hhahahaha!! I just had the best day ever going out to lunch with my friends and this made me laugh so much this is officially the best day ever!!!!!!!

“We’re thinking of writing one about what just happened,” insisted Emma. “Tyrone was playing Tancred Apple, and I was playing his… er… grandma.”
^^Oh, good old Emma. Me and my friend always use excuses like this.

This Aurors-meet-kids-including-werewolf-and-unconcious-villain-in-dark-forest scene seems really familiar. What exactly did happen here?”
^^Where have I heard this? It does seem familiar...

The Shlurpee thing was really awesome!!!!! And by the way, I have no idea why people wouldn't wanna be friends with Giorgi cos she seems really cool!!!!!!! About the coolest thing that ever happened to me was... going to a hockey game where Richard Zednik got his throat cut. I assume that you heard about that as well, granted it was all over the news that February, i believe. Anyhow, A Gajilliondyzizzelion/10. {BeccA}

Author's Response: The getting-the-name-wrong thing pops up again several more times in the series, so I'm glad you liked that! It was inspired by the Eddie Dickens Trilogy, where "Jonathan" is the pet name that Eddie's mum uses when she can't remember his real name. Today's a good day for me, too, because I'm going to my Thespian Honor Society Award Banquet, so that should be fun. I like food and awards and fancy clothes. ^_^ The Aurors-meet-kids-including-werewolf-and-unconcious-villain-in-dark-forest scene was the conclusion of the previous Potter's Pentagon book-- the Aurors came after Malfoy's soul got sucked out, and the kids were all there, including Ted, who was in wolf form.

Reviewer: Heiress_of_Insanity_
Date: 05/22/08 13:35
Chapter: Chapter 12: In Which Pigs Fly And Emma Hugs Tyrone

WOOT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! HUG FEST EVERYONE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Sorry. That little incident between Emma and Tyrone made me quite ecstatic, and then Giorgi said Jordan was cute (don't get any ideas! =p), which made me even happier....and it doesn't help that I'm sitting drinking a diet Pepsi...So. I'm quite content at this very moment. *smiles widely* *sips Pepsi*

Vlad the Impaler, my namesake

??????????????????????

But it would be kind of cool to be named after a mass-murderer-by-large-wooden-incredibly-sharp-chopsticks...

Dad is so cool, thought Jordan.

AW! That's so sweet! And at this time LAST year, Jordan thought his Dad was quite the opposite. *hugs Jordan* He's come a long way. =) That or I"m making stuff up....

Once upon a time, he’d hired eager flunkies and fan girls to do everything for him, and he had no ambition or drive whatsoever outside the Quidditch pitch. If anything required work, he’d forgo it. He was a swaggering fool who charmed everyone with shallow statements instead of actually speaking his mind

Hm...this sounds like someone I know. *lightbulb pops over head* I know! My brother. He's, like, the biggest womanizer since Henry VIII. Only instead of shallow comments, he speaks his mind a bit too much.

::end quotes::

I must say, I'm quite proud of Marina. I wish I could chop all of my hair off, sometimes. But if I did it would be so incredibly curly. I sometimes wish it were straight.

I can shmell them Shlurpees burnin'...Oh my. Now THAT is a sight I wish I could see. ;)

Awesome chapter! I laughed out loud about five times and my brother was all "TELL ME WHY YOU'RE LAUGHING!!" and I thought, If you like Harry Potter, I wouldn't have to tell you, because you'd be reading the story. Alas, I doubt he ever will. X(~

H_o_I_

Author's Response: Awww, I'm glad you liked this! I was very worried. I said Vlad the Impaler is my namesake because I'm Schmerg_The_Impaler. Yep. I put that as my username because I was obsessed for awhile with adding "The Impaler" onto the end of every name... like Mr. Collins the Impaler, JK Rowling the Impaler, Tony Blair the Impaler, Britney Spears the Impaler. That particular hobby of mine ended quickly, but I've still got the username. Hehehe, I wonder how your brother would feel about being compared to Henry VIII. Well, if he's anything like Tyrone, there's still hope for him yet.

rnMy hair is a big poofball. It's gotten quite long-- it's down to the bottom of my shoulderblades (much longer if it's straight), and I've finally achieved the length I've been trying to achieve since I was five. I would NEVER cut mine off. But for some reason, in every installment of Potter's Pentagon, someone gets a big haircut. (Ron in book one, Marina in book two, and well, you'll see in the third one.)

Reviewer: Wicked_Quill
Date: 05/22/08 13:28
Chapter: Chapter 12: In Which Pigs Fly And Emma Hugs Tyrone

I think this chapter was really good! You did a great job! I loved the slurpees thing. stuff that good just can't be made up. I'm glad they didn't wipe giorgi's memory!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! The real Bob (the burnin' slurpees guy) didn't rip off his clothes and dance on the roof, though. He ran up the hill and danced on the hill. But he did say that he could shmell dem shlurpees burnin'.

Reviewer: hpheart
Date: 05/22/08 11:04
Chapter: Chapter 12: In Which Pigs Fly And Emma Hugs Tyrone

You have such brillant, random, amazing, crazy ideas! It's not fair, you're such a good writer!

I have a question. What sort of music does Giorgi like? (Its really hard to spell her name by the way...)

Author's Response: Very familiar!

Reviewer: hpheart
Date: 05/22/08 11:04
Chapter: Chapter 12: In Which Pigs Fly And Emma Hugs Tyrone

You have such brillant, random, amazing, crazy ideas! It's not fair, you're such a good writer!

I have a question. What sort of music does Giorgi like? (Its really hard to spell her name by the way...)

Author's Response: This looks familiar...

Reviewer: hpheart
Date: 05/22/08 11:04
Chapter: Chapter 12: In Which Pigs Fly And Emma Hugs Tyrone

You have such brillant, random, amazing, crazy ideas! It's not fair, you're such a good writer!

I have a question. What sort of music does Giorgi like? (Its really hard to spell her name by the way...)

Author's Response: Awww, thank you! I don't think I'm that good a writer, but I have boatloads of fun doing it. Giorgi likes popular rock, but I can't name any specific bands, because this story takes place in like 2019 or something, so who knows what will be popular then. But just mainstream rock, nothing too obscure or too hard-rock or emo or indie or anything.

Reviewer: hermionefan25
Date: 05/22/08 10:14
Chapter: Chapter 1: In Which Jordan Spends Most of the Chapter Being Surprised

hello I would just like to say...


OMG SO COOL IT WAS LIKE SO COOL I LOVED IT YAY

well that was over I thonk you story was as you guessed really cool and I like the burning house bit with 'I can shmell dem Shlurpees burnin' hehe loved it and I loved the tyrone and emma and her dad bit

I would just like to say I love your storys and can't wait for more

Hope xx

Author's Response: AWww, wow! Thanks very much! I have so much fun writing these stories...

Reviewer: wodcdre
Date: 05/22/08 8:09
Chapter: Chapter 12: In Which Pigs Fly And Emma Hugs Tyrone

I was really impressed at how this chapter seemed to flow so seamlessly. Is this the end? Or do we get to see what happens between Giorgi & Jordan in the following days?

Author's Response: We still have one more chapter. I'm really glad you liked the 'flow,' because I was rather worried about it. I don't think Giorgi is in the next chapter much, though, sadly.

Reviewer: Pussycat123
Date: 05/22/08 6:34
Chapter: Chapter 12: In Which Pigs Fly And Emma Hugs Tyrone

The "schmell dem shlurpees burnin'" story IS the coolest thing ever. Interesting stuff like that never happens around here. Although possibly even funnier than that was "We're rehearsing a play" (Monsters inc. reference?). That made me laugh so much, especially imagining the look on Ron's face. And I totally wasn't expecting Giorgi to have made most of that stuff up. That was pretty cool. Well, not that she was making it up. That you'd written it so that it was as much of a shock to us as it was to Jordan (speaking of Jordan ... JORDAN!). Or, at least, it was a shock to me, I can't really speak for everyone else. But I generally believe whatever anyone tells me anyway. So maybe it's not that amazing. But I was impressed. =)

I don't know why you didn't like this chapter. I thought it was pretty fun. Although when they kept stopping to talk about their feelings, it was kind of like, "GO! Stop it! Apologise later! Run!" but I guess it made it a better storyline because they didn't quite make it, and Haley had to take over. Which was also pretty cool, by the way.

One of my favourite lines was also Jordan (JORDAN!)'s: "I tend to be." It was so Jordan and adorable.

So, anyway, back to more Chemistry revision for me ... *head hits desk*. If I didn't have all this work to do, I would totally enter your art challenge. *Sigh*.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I always like getting reviews from you... yep, the 'rehearsing a play' was totally a Monsters,Inc reference. I'm just that kind of person... can't come up with anything original. ^_^ Yeah, see, I hate this chapter because it's like, you start up the lawnmower, you start mowing grass and... the motor dies. And it comes back on, and it dies again. The action keeps stopping for the weirdest things. But I couldn't figure out how to fit these plot points in any other ways. I HATE CHEMISTRY. IT IS MY WORST CLASS AND MY LEAST-FAVOURITE. And until this year, I was Li'l Miss Science Whiz. What kind of science is it, anyway? It's just math in disguise. And I am bad at math... but weirdly, I'm better at math than chemistry.

Reviewer: HPisgreat72
Date: 05/22/08 0:12
Chapter: Chapter 12: In Which Pigs Fly And Emma Hugs Tyrone

Still as good as ever. So you're not content with stealing my personality (Jordan) you steal one of my quotes “Aww! How sweet! I could just vomit!” I started saying a version of this a while ago. But that just adds to the experience.

Now before it is revealed I would just like to make it known that I believe Lee is really Lee Jordan. I have a couple of reasons for this, Firstly the name, Duh. secondly he has said that McGonagall was his head of house. Thirdly the sense of humour lee has fits that of Lee Jordan. Finally he has been mentioned in this book, usually when someone is mentioned in passing it is to make sure people know they are there, in this case because he is really Lee.

Impatiently waiting for the next chapter to be validated - HP

Author's Response: Awww, thank you so much! Cool, so you are Jordan with Vladislav's quotes? That must make you awesome... aren't you lucky. ^_^ Nice theory... can't say anything at the moment, but you'll find out in the next chapter! Which I am submitting today when I get home from school!

Reviewer: Luna_Lovegood11
Date: 05/21/08 20:15
Chapter: Chapter 12: In Which Pigs Fly And Emma Hugs Tyrone

I CAN SCHMELL DEM SHLURPEES BURNIN!!! You have made me laugh more than I have all day. Thank you so much for ending my rather bad day nicely :)

AWESOME CHAPTER! I don't know why you didn't like it!! It was fantabulous.

I ship Giorgi/Jordan now and forever! They are made for each other!!

How many more chapters are there giong to be??? The third one will be longer, correct???

Arden is so cool. I forgot to tell you, I named a character in one of my stories Arden, but she was the complete opposite of this Arden. A little cruel too.

I can totally relate with Giorgi. Not that I was a new girl this year, but I am weird, with a weird fashion sense, and I don't have a lot of friends. I feel bad for Giorgi :(

EMMA HUGGED TYRONE!!

I would write more, but I have to go.

Great!!

~Rory~
P.S. I DO like Twilight, but not everybody is going to, I understand...
P.P.S. P&P is getting somewhat better...

Author's Response: Thank you so much! And whoot, first review. I'm a bit overwhelmed by all this Jordan/Giorgi shipping that's been going down lately (at this point, I'd rather the focus be Emma and Tyrone, but that's okay). There will only be one more chapter of this story, but the third book will be obscenely long-- 27 chapters, unless I decide to restructure it.

rnIt's cool that you're using the name Arden for your story. I always thought that was such a pretty name. I'm sorry you didn't make a lot of friends. :( You and Giorgi both deserve 'em... maybe you'll meet a Jordan of your very own!

rnI'd probably like Twilight more if I liked Edward, but seeing as he repulses me, I can't really enjoy the book. Most of my friends swoon over him more. And I'm glad that you're liking P&P a little more... it's a hard book to get into, but I always enjoy reading it. You might like the movies more.

Reviewer: Carma Godsun
Date: 05/17/08 19:06
Chapter: Chapter 11: In Which Ivy Gets Quite The Workout

wait... was that the last chapter of two??? ack!!!! (sorry about the excessive punctuation, i've been reading too much giorgi.) i need to know what's going to happen. RIGHT NOW

Author's Response: Don't worry, there will still be chapters twelve and thirteen. I'd never end a story on a cliffhanger-- but I love to leave chapters on them!

Reviewer: LunaTheLoony
Date: 05/15/08 16:19
Chapter: Chapter 1: In Which Jordan Spends Most of the Chapter Being Surprised

Jordan rules! But Hayley is my favorite because I sometime act like a eight year old as well. Is it my fault? No, it's the people I have classes with because most of them have the intelligence of a flea of crack, heroin, acid, sharpies, weed, and every other type of drug possible.

Author's Response: Bleh, I druggies are irritating indeed. Say, LunaTheLoony, I appreciate your comments, but I don't think the mods really like reviews that don't immediately pertain to the story. If you want to chat, you can always PM me on the forums, or email me via the link on my profile.

Reviewer: LunaTheLoony
Date: 05/15/08 15:02
Chapter: Chapter 1: In Which Jordan Spends Most of the Chapter Being Surprised

no, my brother does not have an account. He would never be caught dead on this site because he "has a life, and friends who aren't imaginary."
I had to take $15 off the tab (which is $54) to get him to beta my stories since i have sucky grammar.

Author's Response: Awwww.... tell him he's a meanie. He sounds like a far less awesome Jordan.

Reviewer: marauderteddylupin
Date: 05/14/08 19:43
Chapter: Chapter 11: In Which Ivy Gets Quite The Workout

ooooooo what an exciting twist, eeeekkk i can't wait for the next update, definitely keeping my eyes peeled for that one

Author's Response: Mwaaahahaha, thanks! I submitted awhile ago, so stay tuned!

Reviewer: harryfan4ever
Date: 05/14/08 15:51
Chapter: Chapter 11: In Which Ivy Gets Quite The Workout

T-T No I don't have a scanner . . . well I did . . . but I'm moving . . . so it's in storage until further notice . . . T-T

Author's Response: Awww, well, that's okay. Good luck with your move!

Reviewer: harryfan4ever
Date: 05/14/08 11:15
Chapter: Chapter 11: In Which Ivy Gets Quite The Workout

AHH CONTEST!!! I would enter but . . . I don't know how to get images onto the computer!! T-T I feel so sad . . . Anywho . . . HE'S GOING TO TELL THE WHOLE WORLD ABOUT MAGIC?! . . . well I guess that's not as bad as torturing them . . . but still . . . OMG!!! 0_0. . . *faints*
. . .
. . .
I'M OKAY!! (Haley moment)
SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!! FOX IVY!!! OH MY GOSH!! SHE ALMOST GOT ATTACKED!!! YAY Arden stopped her from getting mauled! . . . Dhrrrggh? . . . interesting . . . wolfish name . . .Anyways. . . GOOD CHAPTER!!! UPDATE SOON!! ^-^

Author's Response: Do you have a scanner? Most printer/copiers have them. Or you can take a photo with a digital camera and upload it to your computer. And from there, you can either send it to me directly or post it on photobucket or another site like that. If not, that's okay.

Reviewer: Heiress_of_Insanity_
Date: 05/13/08 13:42
Chapter: Chapter 11: In Which Ivy Gets Quite The Workout

Ooh, the plot thickens! Again! But Tancred Apple is still evil and I don't like him.

I blushed so much when Arden told Ivy that the wolves now thought she was Ted's mate. *is immature* Poor Ivy...But I thought it was rather funny when Tancred Apple thought Giorgi was Jordan's girlfriend...=p

And as if that wasn’t enough, scientifically speaking, all males are mutants, because the ‘y’ chromosome is a mutation of the ‘x’ chromosome.

Oh, Jordan! Well, at least I had SOME science today...I would like to tell that to my stupid sexist brother!

And wouldn't it be rather hard, carrying someone/thing as big as Ted into a pit full of wolves?? I could NEVER do that! Hm...

That is SO cool that Vladithing wants to be a writer! But I must disagree with you, Phoenix. I write away 1/3 of the day, and people are always staring at me like “Be QUIET!” However, I don’t talk when I am writing…Who knows?

I had another dream with Potter's Pentagon in it...This time, evil mermaids were attacking the good guys' camp or whatnot, and Jordan was one of the soldiers. He and Ted (they were Pre-Juiced Plums age, I think) got in a fight and Jordan killed him by stabbing his neck with a barber's shave-thing...So Haley and *pregnant* Ivy were really mad at him. And I started crying, I think. So once again, I hope dreams are not prophetic ;) Or I'll *unfortunately* have to kill Jordan...

such as Tyrone and Jordan snogging in a canoe wearing tiger costumes

Now THAT I would like to see!

Schmazawesometicklypinktiger job!~

H_o_I_

Author's Response: Oh that shameless hussy Arden (that's one sentence I thought I'd never say...) I love makin' fun of my sexist friends with that one. Anyway, I think it would be extremely hard to carry Ted into a pit of wolves, which is why I made it so hard for Ivy in the story! She is no athlete... I can talk and write at the same time, but I don't do either very coherently. Okay, your dream is like the creepiest thing ever, because I once had a slightly similar dream about two years ago.

rnIn that dream, I walked into my bedroom, and the lights were off, so I turned it on, and there was a guy dressed all in black sitting on my bed. I came closer and I saw it was Jordan. At first I was excited and happy, but his eyes looked weird, and he came walking very slowly toward me. He was like 'get out of here' and I was like 'this is my house' and he's like 'not anymore.' Then he backed me up against the wall and pulled out either his wand or a knife-- can't remember which anymore. I thought he was kidding, and I was like 'Jordan, I invented you, I know you're not serious,' and he goes, "YOU DON'T KNOW ME AT ALL, DO YOU?" And then he just started slicing me up, my whole body, either with a knife or Sectumsempra, and it was horrible-- I remember just watching this blood gush out of my chest and side and face and thinking 'that's going to stain the carpet.' I ran screaming out of the room and I jumped out of the window like the Cowardly Lion from the Wizard of Oz, and I ran into our back shed, limping and bleeding. I was sitting in the shed crying and terrified, and I felt breathing on the back of my neck, so I turned around, and in the darkness I could see Jordan's vague outline and his eyes shining in the night, and that was when I woke up. It was TERRIBLE. I had this dream two years ago when I was finishing up writing "The FIve."

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