Reviews For The Tangle
Reviewer: coolh5000
Date: 12/29/08 18:14
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow, this was really interesting. As it was written for your potions class, it obviously had some sort of purpose/brief and I thought the knowledge you had gained from the class came across really well. However it still remained a story, which is always a challenge when you’re writing about technical things such as potion-making. Some of the more complex bits went over my head but you have clearly put loads of work in to the make-up of the potion and really thought about what all the ingredients would do and the process was explained perfectly and in plenty of detail. I liked the subtle things, such as the potion being turned seven times in each direction (I’m guessing that was because seven is the most powerful magical number) because they showed you really knew what you were writing about. Also, as far as characterisation goes, even though it wasn’t the main focus of your fic, I thought you pulled off James and Sirius really well (though I have my doubts as to whether they would be dishonest enough to cheat – however it worked in the context of your fic.) Overall it was an enjoyable little read – well done!

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX
Date: 07/21/08 8:11
Chapter: Chapter 1

Okay, Leah, since I messed up that last review somehow, I deleted it to repost it in the correct for.

Leah, this was awesome! You really have no limits to your creativity and imagination.

I loved how they broke the rules and everything. You had their characters perfectly in check.

I really can't say much more than that this was great! I really loved this though:

“Besides,” Sirius chimed in, “It’s technically not a Felix Felicis Potion. It’s our potion, the Tangle Potion. The singularly most boring potion in the world, I might add.”

So perfectly Sirius! Great job, this story was brilliant!


Reviewer: JustLikeHermione77
Date: 12/03/07 18:50
Chapter: Chapter 1

good story!

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