Reviewer: Dixie92
Date: 11/10/08 15:10
Chapter: Chapter 3-Misery Business

I loved it!!!
-Dixie92

Reviewer: Dixie92
Date: 11/10/08 15:02
Chapter: Chapter 2- No Bravery

I loved it!!!
-Dixie92

Reviewer: Dixie92
Date: 11/10/08 14:50
Chapter: Recognizing A Talent

I loved it!!!!
-Dixie92

Reviewer: lullaby BANG
Date: 03/29/08 18:06
Chapter: Chapter 4-Miserable At Best

There was that flashback! And I'm still amazed that you beta'd this yourself. This was amazing, Emma, and I can't wait until Chapter five.

Author's Response: Well, thank you very much. Everyone was suprised that I edited this myself. I told them all I could do it :) Thanks so much for reviewing and glad you liked it! Chapter five is slowly coming along. I'm really trying to stay on track with chapter five and not stray away from my original plan, as I have already done. So chapter five will not be as D/A as the previous chapters and there will be tons more Draco in this one as well. **Emma

Reviewer: lullaby BANG
Date: 03/29/08 17:52
Chapter: Chapter 2- No Bravery

That was really intense, and again I envy your descriptive writing. I want it. Now to continue onward!

Author's Response: Aw, thanks for reading! Lol...I'll gladly give you some of my descriptive-ness...lol. Hope you enjoy the rest of it! rn--Emma

Reviewer: prettyprincesss
Date: 03/23/08 18:55
Chapter: Chapter 4-Miserable At Best

Great job! I like the D/A mix up with the story. Keep going!

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I like my D/A undertone as well. I promise something good will happen to Melanie...eventually...lol. :) -Emma

Reviewer: BertieBotsBeans741
Date: 03/23/08 18:23
Chapter: Chapter 4-Miserable At Best

Wow, this chapter was fantastic, Emma! Melanie is developing into a great OC. I really love the plot that you're creating. I can feel the tension and I feel for Melanie. What an awful situation. She must be so torn. I am most impressed that you beta'd this chapter yourself. A job well done. I look forward to the next update.

Brittany

Author's Response: Ah, thanks Brittany! I know, I kind of feel bad for Melanie myself. When I was writing this I was like gosh, next chapter, something good will happen to Melanie...lol. Thanks for the beat compliment...I was quite shocked myself when it was validated because everyone cautioned me against betaing myself...lol. :)rnrn**Emma

Reviewer: deadlyseduction
Date: 02/02/08 16:10
Chapter: Chapter 3-Misery Business

I LOVE that song
and I LOVE this story =]
keep up the good work!
xxx

Author's Response: Thanks! I love basing my chapters off of songs so I just pick a song on my MP3 player and base the chapter on that. Right now I'm thinking chapter four will be based on the song 'Direction' by the Starting Line. Thanks for reading! :)

Reviewer: Angel Feathers
Date: 02/02/08 11:15
Chapter: Chapter 3-Misery Business

Can't wait for more - really well done and IC!

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm writing Chapter four right now :)

Reviewer: harry_victoria
Date: 02/01/08 13:26
Chapter: Chapter 3-Misery Business

EM! *tackles* It's FINALLY up; yay! I remember all of those PMs between you and I; I'm sure you do, too. Keep up the awesome work, m'dear. -victoria

Author's Response: Thank you so much Vicka! I just sent you a screaming pm because I was so excited this was up but you had already beat me and reviewed it! Lol...this is my baby, seriously I worke SO hard on getting thie chapter right and I would not have gotten through some of my block without you. Thank you so much! :) **Emma

Reviewer: BertieBotsBeans741
Date: 01/25/08 20:27
Chapter: Chapter 2- No Bravery

Hello there, Emma right? I like the story so far. It's great. I can't wait to see all the plot bunnies from the questions pop up. Very nice job. =)

Brittany

Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, I am currently sorting through all the plot bunnies for chaper four. Ted should be coming into play in chapter 4. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) **Emma

Reviewer: hermionefanficxo
Date: 01/24/08 21:19
Chapter: Chapter 2- No Bravery

Sorry to write you again! I tried to read Chapter 3 but it says "Access denied. Not validated yet." or something like that.
:( I also meant to say that the storyline is good. lol. xoxo. -Lee

Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, chapter three still hasn't been validate yet. I'm very anxiously waiting for it to be validated. I've been trying to make the storyline interesting. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) **Emma

Reviewer: hermionefanficxo
Date: 01/24/08 14:11
Chapter: Chapter 2- No Bravery

Hi, Emma. Well, its pretty good. I have a few tips as a writer, if you don't mind constructive criticism. I noticed while reading that you like to repetitiously use the same adjectives such as "dangerously". For example, you could try out diff. words like "menacingly" or "ominously". Also, try diff. dialogue words from time to time instead of the usual "said,asked,replied, exclaimed". For example, when Melanie confronts her brother and says "you". You could say >> "You," Melanie accused through gritted teeth.

Author's Response: Ah...thank you very much. My beta gets onto me a lot for only using said or replied. I don't know why, but it's just my first reaction to use those words...lol. Thank you very much. :) **Emma

Reviewer: hermionefanficxo
Date: 01/24/08 14:11
Chapter: Chapter 2- No Bravery

Hi, Emma. Well, its pretty good. I have a few tips as a writer, if you don't mind constructive criticism. I noticed while reading that you like to repetitiously use the same adjectives such as "dangerously". For example, you could try out diff. words like "menacingly" or "ominously". Also, try diff. dialogue words from time to time instead of the usual "said,asked,replied, exclaimed". For example, when Melanie confronts her brother and says "you". You could say >> "You," Melanie accused through gritted teeth.

Author's Response: Thank you very much! My beta also told me I had a problem with this and I asked around and a friend sent me this huge list of words to say instead of the normal said and whatnot and I now walk around with a thesarus and dictionary attached to my hand. Thanks for the suggestions! :) **Emma

Reviewer: hermionefanficxo
Date: 01/24/08 14:11
Chapter: Chapter 2- No Bravery

Hi, Emma. Well, its pretty good. I have a few tips as a writer, if you don't mind constructive criticism. I noticed while reading that you like to repetitiously use the same adjectives such as "dangerously". For example, you could try out diff. words like "menacingly" or "ominously". Also, try diff. dialogue words from time to time instead of the usual "said,asked,replied, exclaimed". For example, when Melanie confronts her brother and says "you". You could say >> "You," Melanie accused through gritted teeth.

Author's Response: Thanks for that. That is one of the things I really need to be working on. I've tried during my re-writes to do this but I don't know how well I actually accomplished it. Thanks for reviewing and for the advice (:

Reviewer: juli_dances
Date: 01/22/08 14:21
Chapter: Chapter 2- No Bravery

I like it, especially Melanie, but she's a bit over-dramatic. Just wondering about cannon to understand it better: up to which book is it compliant? I'm looking forward to the third chapter and I hope the mods update it soon!


Author's Response: Thank you. Yes, I made Melanie a bit overly dramatic, but then again, she's had a pretty horrible life and you find out a little more about it in the third chapter. It's set in their seventh year so I guess up to the end of HBP, just because Draco returned to school and stuff. So it is compliant with the fifth book for sure and parts of the sixth. Glad you like it! I'm still waiting with my fingers crossed for chapter 3 to be accepted! **Emma

Reviewer: CarlyJo
Date: 01/18/08 9:35
Chapter: Chapter 2- No Bravery

I love it! I can't to read more! I love the way you have Melanie and Draco as friends, but Melanie not being submissive like I've seen others do. It's great so far!

Author's Response: Thank you :) I just submitted chapter 3 moments ago. It's a little different, to say the least. I had to up the rating and add in two more warnings. I really tried not to make Melanie submissive and the only thing that kept me from making her like that was thinking 'How would I act in that situation?'...lol. So, I'm glad you like it! :) **Emma

Reviewer: dancingwithneville
Date: 01/02/08 11:47
Chapter: Chapter 2- No Bravery

I loved it! Draco was written exceptionally well and Melanie was amazing! I like how you portray Melanie and her brothers relationship. Charles fully admits to the killing of his parents and I think thatís essential to their brother/sister relationship. And the end part was very sweet and Draco's promise was gentle.

Author's Response: Aww! Thank you sooo much! I worked reallyyy hard on this one. I don't know why, but for some reason I wanted to make Melanie seem like a really nice person who didn't have any problems on the surface, but really she's got more problems than she can handle. Chapter three is giving me a hard time because of all the content I'm planning on placing in it...lol. The rating is going to have to go up after this chapter. Thanks for the review! :) **Emma

Reviewer: irrevocably blair
Date: 12/10/07 18:26
Chapter: Recognizing A Talent

EMMA! Absolutely phenomenal job. :]

I can honestly say that I really enjoyed it. I love how you got the plot started out right from the beginning. Thank Godric that this wasn't one of those stories with interminable descriptions in the first chapter, it actually kept my attention quite nicely! I love the way Draco was portrayed, he's very nicely IC. Melanie could have used a bit more subtle characterization, but otherwise, it was splendid.

:] So excited for you!

Author's Response: YAY! You're my first review! Thanks sooo much Blair! And thanks for the tip about the subtle characterization of Mel...I'll def get that up in the second chapter. I'm so glad you thought he was IC. I was sooo worried I would be rejected for OOCness because I made him like so nice to her and stuff but I got some help on the boards and they said it would be fine as long as like she came from a good family and stuff...but dont think that just because I have this fic going too that I will forget all about my poor lily/james fic...you be ready for that one soon! Equally excited, -Emma 12/10/07

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