Allie, I am in shock. This was a fabulous entry. I was never one to be into AU, but I have to say, you have definitely changed my mind. Lucius and Sirius were wonderfully in character in such an odd situation. What’s even odder is that, it is quite believable!
Clearly, whatever tasks you were assigned, you took them with ease. It flowed and I have to comment once more on your flawless grammar. Ironically, Lily/Sirius is the one pairing that goes against my OTP that I can stand, funny how things work out. Anyways, I really like how you’ve written Lucius. I actually found him likeable until he told Sirius that the time change didn’t hold him to the vow. Also, I’m quite partial to Molly, she sounds like a delightful daughter. Who doesn’t love a heartwarming reunion? You didn’t make it mushy, but there was that peaceful feeling at the end that sealed things up.
You’ve made the setting work well with the characters. Your description was great. I liked the mini-battle scene too, some people have trouble incorporating action but it seemed pretty natural to me. Overall, this was a fun read. I thoroughly enjoyed it.
Author's Response: Awww, thanks, Brittany! *huggles* Awesome review, lol!
Yeah pleas ewrite more it is really good
Author's Response: Thanks!
Awww the end of this chapter was so cute:) Haha the punishment is so funny...and awesome:) Great job:) (Yeah I finally review every chapter of the story...I forgot to reveiw this chapter yesterday.....
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm afraid that I made it waaay too cheesy! *embarrassed* Thanks for the review!
You kow, I only started reading the story becues of the summary, I really liked it!
Very nice story, there's another chapter coming, right? Let's see what happends when they get back!
Author's Response: Thanks! The summary was a whole, let's run with it thing and see where it goes! I'm really glad that you liked it! There might be more...
Oooo cliffie....so good but it makes me want to read it even more!! Ouch, the suspense is painful......jk lol
Please update soon this is really good:)
Author's Response: Thanks!!! I'm glad you liked it! Admittedly, though, this is not my best effort... >.<
OMG this is soo good!!! I love it :)
I am definitely going to read the next Chapter right now!! :) Great job, please keep writing:)
Author's Response: Haha, thanks for taking time to leave a review!