Reviews For Untitled
Reviewer: Cheshlin
Date: 03/14/08 21:47
Chapter: Epilogue

Wow. That was a great story. I never really pictured Hermione with Neville, but somehow it totally worked. I think that you really caught her character in the "ghostly" rememberances. Neville's wanderings through the story was very interesting and when he attacked Ron I could totally see that happening. I am a little confused as to where the past came into play, but I'm guessing it was all part of a dream or something. I also love the way you had Katie be a guide to Neville. I can see her stepping up and doing that for a friend. Thanks for a very different view on what could have been possible if things had gone a very different way! Cyns

Author's Response: I had a very dear friend pass recently before I wrote this, and the main point of the epilogue was more autobiographical than I intended. I really put Hermione's character in there, but what Neville was experiencing there was really something I was going through. It actually was very therapeutic for me.rnrnThere's also the symbolism I put in there just for my own enjoyment. I honestly doubt anyone caught it. See, for me, I really like Hermione as a character. And by the time I finished the epilogue for DH, I didn't like her at all, and I found that the reason for it was Ron. I despise Ron so much, that the mere fact that she kept going back to him killed her character, so to speak. So, I decided to have Ron responsible for her 'death'. It's also not in the story, but in my head, I know that Ron was responsible for it, but at the funeral Neville forgives him in exchange for never seeing him ever again. I might write that out as a one-shot in the future, but for now its home is a little nook in the back of my mind.rnrnThanks for the review! (and sorry it took so long for a response >.>)rn- Jacie the Cat

Reviewer: ginevra715
Date: 02/29/08 18:32
Chapter: Epilogue

woah that was really cool. i love how you start off not knowing who the main character is, then you're completely confused, and then it all makes sense. and the epilogue conversation with hermione really makes the story. nice work!

Author's Response: The only downside to that is that some people will get confused and give up on the story. That's why I have three reviews for chapter one, but you're the second I've gotten for the epilogue.

But I'm glad you enjoyed it. And thanks for the review!

- Jacie the Cat

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX
Date: 02/23/08 18:42
Chapter: Epilogue

Amazing job, dear. You have written a wonderful, heart-breaking story, and you even managed not to kill off Ron, I think. Really great job.

Author's Response: I actually put more of myself in this story than I have many others, even with my OC story (which is amazing because, of course, we all create OCs so we have a version of ourselves in the HP universe). You notice how Ron is only made out to be the bad guy, but you never really see if he's at fault. I wanted to kinda make fun of myself because everyone knows how I feel about Ron. I thought that if I had ONE more story where Ron is the bad guy, Ron dies, etc. then I'd be a pretty stale writer, wouldn't I? So I managed to make Ron the bad guy, but it kinda took it back.

Thanks for the reviews, too. This gauntlet took a LOT out of me.

- Jacie the Cat

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX
Date: 02/23/08 18:34
Chapter: Chapter Two

OMS! You are so evilly brilliant, a true Slyth! This is a wonderful entry! No wonder you always win, hehe. I really like the style that you have written this in. It is quick paced and in your face, which I adore!

Must... Read... More...

Author's Response: >.>


I don't win every time . . . In fact, I've only won once, and eve then I shared first place with FenrirG.

But thank you for your kind words.

- Jacie the Cat

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX
Date: 02/23/08 18:16
Chapter: Chapter One

Oh, Jace, this is such a wonderfully descriptive and mysterious story! I am confused yet not at the same time. I must read more. . .

Author's Response: I knew it would sound confusing at first. I actually only could hope that it made more sense later on..

- Jacie the Cat

Reviewer: moonstargazer
Date: 02/23/08 16:49
Chapter: Chapter One

Wow, this is a great story! There's one other story like it, which has Sirius Black looking for time tuners. Or he was sent back in time...This one sounds similiar to that one.
Neville sounds like he might have lost his memories at one time. Hopefully, he'll get them back.

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for the review!

Reviewer: wewillmissyou
Date: 02/23/08 12:26
Chapter: Chapter One

Oh! I do like this. Its very orginal and beautifully written. Good job!

Author's Response: Thanks! I appreciate it! This Gauntlet kinda took a lot out of me..

- Jacie the Cat

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