ohmygod great! btw my names cassie to!
Oh, dear. This was such an intriguing tale right from the beginning till the end, and kept me hooked throughout. For quite some time, I was left wondering who the protagonist was, and for a person like me who can be very impatient about such things, I'm so glad I waited and read it all. Really, a marvellous character to choose, and how remarkably the premise ties in with it all! Absolutely brilliant.
Throughout the story, the emotions just flow so freely. They're uninhibited, and in the entire thought process that I saw right till the end, they remain the strongest aspect of the story. Andromeda almost shows a sort of hate towards the child in the beginning-- a feeling that shows right through, especially in this line: She is not a woman, but an appendage to the life of another. I hated that at first, but then again, I could justify it with reasons that you've mentioned. A little cowardly sounding for Andromeda, definitely, but at some level, I could sympathise-- after all, she had lost her own people in the war, and the child was indeed a reminder of their being; day and night it reminded her of the pain she had undergone. Oh, and the dark side of Andromeda, where she totally seemed to be the person who has changed due to reasons probably connected to the war, is brought out really well here: She has become the woman she spent her whole life trying not to be.
I somehow really enjoyed the role Hagrid plays in the plot. Interesting dynamic that has been introduced, and really, one of the rare stories where Hagrid is portrayed without Magical Creatures involved. And how his presence brings about a sudden change in Andromeda. It felt a little abrupt to me, but after that, we could so clearly see Andromeda's conflict, and how she changes her mind. Really, a simple thing to bring about such a humongous change in her flow of thought.
The tenderness that is in the latter half of the story-- that was really commendable work. I loved how changed her mind is; how her perspective has changed from that of hating the boy to actually liking him, and realising his beauty. The contrast between the first and the latter half is something really significantly projected-- and it almost makes the first half seem as an irrational decision taken in the spur of the moment.
Also, a recurring error I noticed throughout is that 'bassinet' is spelled with a single 's'. I do not know if it is one of the many differences between Americanism and Briticism, but I'm used to reading it with a double 's', so I thought I would point that out. =)
Overall though, a really wonderful read.
Wow I liked this story very much. It was a good one-shot and you did a good job.
One line I especially liked was this one.
Without knowing it, Rubeus Hagrid has interrupted an act that he has once witnessed before.
Author's Response: Aw, thank you :) I'm really glad you liked it.
Wow, this was very good. Thanks for writing something very powerful in so few words! Cheers!
Author's Response: no problem :) ahah thanks for reviewing, I'm glad you liked it.
hmmm. sad. sigh.
for some reason, I thought hagrid would take teddy and raise him. I don't know where i got that idea. but i believe it would be interesting. hmm.
Author's Response: oh, that would indeed be interesting. haharnthanks for reviewing :)
This is lovely. I have often wondered how Andromeda would feel; my own speculation is that, without Ted and Dora there to pull her out of depression, she would revert to what she has always known: being a Black. You captured that feeling well. Good job!
Author's Response: thank you! :)
Real people do stupid things because of pain. Make decisions that they wouldn't do otherwise. I love the use of Hagrid and his gentle kind nature as the catalyst for change. This woman was overwhelmed, who wouldn't be? To lose a husband, daughter and son-in-law and gain a life to raise in a span of a few months? Anyone would go batty! Great imagining, great characterization. Great use of the bassinet as symbolism of separation. Great human story! Thanks.
Author's Response: Thanks so much, I'm really glad you liked it :)