Reviews For Cette Nuit
Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Date: 07/31/11 22:15
Chapter: Cette Nuit

Hmm, thank you, Poetry Review Circle, for finding this poem for me. :D

I’ve been in a giant battle poem swing as of late, so it’s really cool to see others’ poems that follow the event. There is just something epically epic about the call to arms, about rousting William Wallace-esque pump-up speeches, that gets the blood flowing and makes me want to go out and punch a bad guy. But this one is a bit different in a few ways.

One of my most favourite parts is the voice of it. I love that Gryffindor ‘we might die, but screw it!’ vibe going on. It really feels fitting for how the Hogwarts fighters would approach imminent fighting with Voldemort’s scary forces of dark creatures. ‘If it be our last, then we shall fight.’ really illustrates this for me. It’s one of the first heck!yeah moments of the poem.

The flow is amazing. It’s almost all uniform in meter and in number of syllables in lines, which lends it an almost marching feeling, as if they’re parading headlong into danger and holding their heads high. Things like these are what makes poetry so worthwhile to read, almost like unwrapping a present over and over again.

But most of all, I just really like the hopeful nature of it. There is no attitude of anger that their lives could be cut short, but more that, if they have to go out, it would be for something worthwhile. You said that the poem was in the perspective of Remus and Tonks, and this really rings true with what I feel about the characters.

If I had to offer some critique, I would suggest changing the punctuation for the following:

A young man not yet out of school,
Our only hope; my heart is full
Of dreams and fears, friends and foes
And memories, our highs and lows.

 

Mostly, the only thing I find a bit odd is that ‘A young man not yet out of school, our only hope’ isn’t an actual independent clause, so it seems weird that it’s connected with the rest via a semicolon. I’m not sure there is much else you could do with it without comma overload, save for subbing the semicolon with a dash. It’s pretty subjective, but it’s really the only thing I could see that could’ve possibly been improved. If you have to change the wording, then completely ignore me, because the line itself is gorgeous.

All in all, this poem is so very impressive. It’s, as I mentioned, epic, and you formed it so well as to add to its purpose. So very well done, and I’m glad I got to read it. :D

~Jess

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx
Date: 02/06/11 5:51
Chapter: Cette Nuit

Wow! This is great. You've got a great talent of writing few words yet conveying so much power. I wish, as a rather verbose poet, that I had that talent. This is a lovely tribute to Remus and Tonks. Well done!

~Soraya~

Reviewer: the opaleye
Date: 11/25/09 14:14
Chapter: Cette Nuit

Erm, why have I not read this poem before? Bella! I love it! You have a real knack for rhyme and flow, something that I do not. This poem is short yet it has an innately epic feel. I also love how you reiterate the opening line in the final line. FAVOURITES!

Author's Response: Thanks so much, Julia! -squishes-

Reviewer: Sainyn Swiftfoot
Date: 09/06/08 12:04
Chapter: Cette Nuit

Wow, this poem blew me off my feet too...You have AWESOMOTASTIC talent...

*jermeyjeremyjeremyjeremy*

I can imagine this scene, the baddies getting closer and closer, ominous music playing, and Remus and Tonks standing at the head of the table, shouting out. Yup, it plays out very well.

I like the way this is written, it flows well, the rhythm is maintained. The language is good, and it rhymes.

Absolutely perfect.

~BB

Author's Response: YAY! I is liking the reviews.....*still siding with the haddocks* Cheers!

Reviewer: ringobeatlesfan4
Date: 08/25/08 14:09
Chapter: Cette Nuit

I can definitely see Remus and Tonks giving this speec in front before the final battle, and I think it's perfectly written. This is definitely going on my favorites. I always love poems like this, insipring courage, bravery, and loyalty. I have all three (or so all my friends tell me) but there are times when I just need to be sure of it, and to inspire others. I sound like I'm bragging, and I know it, so I'm sorry. I don't try.Just like James and Sirius, modesty is not one of my strong points. My favorite part was definitely...

Our army pales beside their force,

Yet destiny shall run its course.

It really kind of reminds me of the Battle of Troy, I think, in ancient Greece. But it's also true for HP, too, and a wonderful way to phrase everything and capture emotions... Excellent job, and I love the title! {BeccA} P.S. When copied and pasted to quote from this poem into the review box, I actually freaked out because I finally figured out how to italicize things on here! ;)

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the kind review! I'm really surprised that you're putting it on your favorites, but also quite honored. I didn't think you were bragging, by the by, as I know sometimes something is true and sounds quite arrogant. And I'm quite glad you learned how to italicize in the review box. ~Bella

Reviewer: Lady Alanna
Date: 07/31/08 18:45
Chapter: Cette Nuit

Oohh, I love it!!! It really captures the feeling of anticipation and not knowing what was going to happen, yet staying determined to fight until the end. Very very very good job!!! :D

Author's Response: Thanks so much, I really appreciate the positive review!

Reviewer: DontCallMeNymphadora
Date: 07/22/08 23:14
Chapter: Cette Nuit

Oh, I like this a lot! It is really good, and imagining Tonks and Remus reading it is even better... 10/10

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: luinrina
Date: 07/07/08 13:12
Chapter: Cette Nuit

It's a wonderful poem. It has good flow and meaning, and it rhymes (important for most poems - at least for me ;) ). I really like it. If all your poems come out like this, you're going to be an even more brilliant poet one day than you are already.

Author's Response: That means a whole lot, coming from you. I love your stories and can't wait for an update in Shining Through Blackness!

Reviewer: beaternumber1
Date: 07/02/08 10:22
Chapter: Cette Nuit

I really liked this poem it was very ..... um majestic? I really don't know what to cal it but it gave we an excited feeling like alot of good books,poems or songs do.
So congratulations.

-Beaternumber1

P.S Another thing that I can see tonks saying would be something about " fight for the future" or something of that sort.

: ) : ) : ) : D

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review and the encouragement, I might add more to the poem later, but right now it's staying as is

Reviewer: lucilla_pauie
Date: 04/21/08 13:34
Chapter: Cette Nuit

Endearing. This was my first thought after reading this. My mind filled with images of Lupin standing by the High Table waxing Romeo-esque (even more impassioned) after Voldy's pretentious suavity imitating a Muggle PA.

I can't pick which lines can have been given by Tonks. Perhaps the 'my heart is full' part. I imagine her heart was full not just of watching Remus's back and avenging her father, but also of her son...

Kudos for adding a dash of word music to my visions of that spectacular night. They can almost use this for a score. We must inform Leavesden Studios. ^_^

~Joanna



Author's Response: glad somebody else gets a tune in their head when reading this, because it was written to a tune.

Reviewer: fairiegirl
Date: 04/20/08 21:07
Chapter: Cette Nuit

I really love this poem, and i actully have a wall of poems (my mom is so wonderful she let me write on the walls and draw) half of the wall is my own writings and the other is works from my friends and other random writers, mind if i put your poem up as well?

Author's Response: go ahead, poems are written to be read.

Reviewer: Nivnami
Date: 04/20/08 14:14
Chapter: Cette Nuit

A VERY SWEET POEM!!! I feel you have done an amazing job with your creatine skills. 10/10 for such an awesome job on your second fic. Keep up the good work. I am eagerly awaiting many more of your awesome stories/poems!!!

ALL THE BEST!!!

Author's Response: thank you so very much!

Reviewer: undesirable_number1
Date: 04/20/08 13:27
Chapter: Cette Nuit

I like this a lot... It's a very powerful and encouraging battle cry. Oh... and the French title was a very nice touch... : )

Author's Response: thanks, that title took a while to come.

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