This story is fantastic. I really enjoyed reading it. I love the originality and depth of the characters, especially Alexandra of course, and I couldn't help but be frustrated along with her all through the beginning of the school year when no one was treating her fairly. It's brilliant how every now and then there are references and tips of the hat to the world of Hogwarts and Harry Potter that we all know so well, but your version of the Wizarding world is clearly Americanized and stands on its own. And the plot -- there's nothing worse than a fanfic from another generation/location that basically rips off what J. K. Rowling already wrote, but your plot was fresh and addictive and creative. I can't wait to read the rest of the series! Thanks for writing.
Remarkable! I really wasn't sure I would like this when I started, but a couple a chapters in and I was completely hooked. You've created a world that I would say is every bit as detailed and fantastic as JKR's, and I'm eagerly looking forward to reading the rest of the Quick stories! Bravo!
Overall, a great chapter. A few points strike me as exaggerated or cliché though, such as in particular Alexandra just laughing at the screeching of brakes.
Hodag? One of the high schools in the area where I grew up had a mascot called the Hodag. Nice to see a local legend show up in a fantastic story! Really enjoying the read so far...
Are you J.K.R.? Just joking just joking...or am I? Moving on from my deranged humor, I think that you are a brilliant author. I can actually convince myself that I am reading a novel instead of Fanfiction!
Great writing! Brian reminds me of Ron and Bonnie is rather like Ginny--he's the overprotective big brother who loves his little sister more than anything while she's the independant (yet rather accident prone) little sister who wants to prove that she can fend for herself.
Wow, you are a really good writer! For a while I forgot that I was reading fanfiction and was convinced that this was a novel! Well done!
Very much enjoyed this!
I'm new to the word of fan fiction and I am thinking of writing a Harry Potter themed story set in America as well.
I really love the way the Redcaps were introduced here! Made it really seem as if it were part of the Harry Potter world.
darn, these Charmbridge people sound like modern day teachers so much! "Focus on things that will be tested on SPAWN."
and I really really like Hogwarts much more than Charmbridge. the people are so full of prejudices. and so intent on getting everyone to conform to their culture! but that's almost how it works in USA, so it fits the location so well.
i like your writing nonetheless =)
Your version of the magical world is appropriately Ameriican, and different enough to avoid embarassing parallels to Harry Potter & Hogwarts. Awesome writing and Alexandra seems to be a very complex & layered personality!
This made for great reading... :)
I really love your characterization of David. Another thing I really like about this story is that it touches on racial prejudice and not just the magical kind.
I've been reading this story on and off alll day, and I LOVE IT. I especially like how you've created a completely different wizarding world, but with little references to Harry Potter.
That was a wonderful ending. I'm happy that Alex's father contacted her. She has so much courage. I think when the time comes she'll make the right decisions about her father. I'm not sure which of your stories I'll check out next--either the Hogwarts Houses Divided one or the second Alexandra Quick one but I will see you soon--probably later today:D
You've gotta feel bad for Alex and all she's been through. She has some loyal friends but other people seem more interested in her celebrity status, meaning the government types. I wonder if she'll ever meet her father. And I wonder how her summer will go when she has to return home and can't really discuss all she's been through with her family. Great chapter.
This turned into such an amazing and creative story. You've developed some original characters and creatures. It seems like you took very little from JKR. I liked that you based it in the United States too. There are things that are possibly a little more understandable to us Yanks:D Alex hasn't met her father yet so I'm sure she will have many more adventures. With that said, let me get to the last couple of chapters.
I thought Ms. Grimm was a goner after the crows attacked her. After all these chapters, the bracelet did have significance. I was surprised to read Journey's story and that Alex was a Secret Keeper. I've really enjoyed reading this--now for the wrap-up.
For a moment I thought it was the assistant custodian who was after Alex. I'm so impressed with Alex's skills. Anna has become such a loyal friend. Between Grimm and Shirtliffe I'm surprised Journey got away. Journey didn't seem as powerful as the two witches. Great chapter.
I always get a kick out of Journey's nicknames for students. I think that's kind of a unique twist to your story. I also love how the Ozarkers talk. I hope you keep Constance and Forbearance in your stories. This was an interesting chapter. It's getting to the time for you to wrap it up. I can't wait to see how this ends. Great chapter.
I know it happens but it just seems wrong that Alex's mother had her memories erased. And now we know that Ms. Grimm knows more about Alex than she's letting on. Great chapter.
I figured Larry was up to something. Poor Anna sniffling and sneezing in the woods. I'm really glad that Alex has such a good friend--someone who will be beside her no matter what she does; someone who is willing to get into trouble with her. Great chapter.