That was beautiful and heartbreaking... and I love the parallel you drew with the romance novel. Well done.
I. love. Your. Work. Really, I do. This was enchanting. I had never really thought about this aspect of Hermione's life much before- or ever, really. I think it was an exellent choice to write it from Hermione's parent's point of view rather than Hermione's herself, it made it much more powerful.
I think if I cried for stories, I would be crying now. Short, but very heart-wrenching--poor Hermione! And there's such contrast: Mr. and Mrs. Wilkins are living their everyday lives and are mildly confused by the strange actions of a young girl; meanwhile, said young girl's heart is breaking because her parents don't remember her. And the last exchange: 'Who in the world was that?' 'I have no idea.' Wow. Have to say that this fic is going on my favorites for being super-powerful.
Very good story. I can not write but i can read and i liked what i read. The teeth thing should have told me the story but it went right over my head. Thank you for the 'story note' or i would have been confused.
Thank you for writing this.
Author's Response: Cool, then I'm glad I put in the end note. Sorry for any confusion, and thanks for the review!
Beautiful piece! Without the note on the end, I admit I was somewhat confused, but very good job! I had never thought much about the memory charm until now, and you do a great job of summing up just how profound the affects really are, including on Hermione.
Author's Response: Yes, the end note was added after an argument about memory charms and a bit of a chat with my slightly bewildered sister, because it is more confusing than I'd realized. Sorry if that was a problem, and thanks for the kind review!
I don't think that you needed to state that the girl was Hermionie. While I personally think that she could and did reverse the charm she placed on her parents, I think that this is a very realistic idea on what would happen if she couldn't.
I love the way you wrote this. You really feel for Hermionie, and the story that you chose for Monica to be reading was perfect. You can really make the reader feel the emotions.
Author's Response: Mm. If I did a poll on whether or not Hermione managed to lift the spells, I would probably be overruled. I thought of it in the shower, though, and shower ideas are strictly non-amendable. :) Thank you for your review--it means a lot that you could sympathize with Hermione when her name didn't come up until the (unnecessary?) clarification at the end.
From reading DH I got the impression that the memory charm Hermione put on her parents was slightly different to obliviate as she said in the cafe when they ran into death eaters that she'd never done it before but knew the theory. And I think she also said when the trio were sorting books in Ron's room, that if the war went well she'd find her parents and lift the charm. However, I thought your fic was brilliant. It was beautifully written and held so much emotion and it makes much more sense for this particular one-shot for memory charms to be irreversible. Did Hermione send the parcel so she could watch which house the postman delivered it to? I'd love this to go on my gap fillers list, but for the purposes of canon I'd have to fit it between HBP and DH, a moment in which Hermione was checking that her charm worked and her parents would be safe. Sorry, this review wasn't very helpful was it? Scrap most of it and just remember that I think it's a heart-wrenching, wonderfully composed piece.
Author's Response: That was really flattering! Yeah, the fic wouldn't work if memory charms were easily reversible, and I really haven't figured out the theoretical difference between "memory modification" and "obliviate", as they both come under "memory charms". I'd say modifications were just a block and obliviate was an erase, if Voldemort hadn't proved with Bertha Jorkins that the memories clearly aren't completely erased. Perhaps I'm a total nerd for finding this all intriguing, but this would make an interesting discussion thread in the forums. Now I'm the one who's rambled. Erm...the parcel can mean whatever you like it to, but it wasn't intended as anything other than a reminder of Monica's other life. Thank you for your review--your comments were very uplifting!
your end note really shows how gruesome memory charms are. it's true we have not heard of a cure for them, although they seem to think that Lockhart had some chance of recovery in st mungo's. anyway. I'm curious what the package was. and you did a really good job with this. I especially liked the way you mentioned everyone's teeth :)
Author's Response: Yeah, Lockhart spent years being cared for by nurses who tried to slowly break him back into the lifestyle and person he'd been before--his personality didn't really diminish, but when they chanced upon him in OOTP, he wasn't much better, was he? Nasty sorts of spells, definitely. The package could be anything you like--I admit to a lack of an exciting backstory there. Thank you for your feedback--it was a really nice review!
This was very well written, however, in DH while explaining to Harry how she obliviated her parents memories, she then also says that if they ever come back from the Horcrux hunt alive, she will track them down and lift the charm. I'm just curious where you got your information about memory charms being permanent. But great story none the less.
Author's Response: A chocolate frog for pointing that out.rnrnJK has been my hero since I was ten, but consistency isn't really her strong point. There is that part you mentioned and I forgot/disregarded, but other than that, I've never heard of a memory charm being "lifted". It's doesn't seem to be like jelly legs or body binds, etc. where there is a simple counterjinx. I tried to cross-reference the times memory charms have come up using the lexicon and trying to figure out the specifics of the Bertha Jorkins and Gilderoy Lockhart cases. While the memory charm had to be recast frequently on Mr. Roberts in GOF, that was because there were continual wizarding slips--as far as I can see, there aren't any references to memory charms being successfully removed. Perhaps I'm just averse to the idea that there's a magical fix to almost everything. I'm really glad you brought it up, though--someone ought to start a thread on the forums for this.
So sad but so sweet. It wasn't overly mushy or too hard and cold; it was just right. I liked how Monica noticed everybody's teeth. She definitely would do that out of habit.
Your chapter end notes were also very nicely written too. I don't usually comment on end notes, but I want you to know you wrote the end note very well.
Now, excuse while I do a little dance because you chose my title.
Author's Response: That is the first compliment on a story note I have ever gotten, and it made me feel warm and fuzzy even though I didn't remember how I'd done the end note. Thanks a bunch for the lovely review, and also the title--yours really sort of seemed to fit, which was cool, because I didn't give you much to work with in my plea for help to go on.