this was wonderful!!!!
Cassie! :) I realised earlier that I’ve never actually read any of your Ted/Andromeda fics, even though you have as many of them as you do next-gen ones. And I’m glad I did sit down to read this and leave you a review, because this is just as good – if not better – as your other fics.
This was so dark and haunting. You only give your readers a hint of an idea of what Andromeda’s life is like with the Blacks and the Slytherins, and it leaves this shroud of mystery over it, and you can’t help but pity her knowing that she’s trapped by her family and Rabastan. It’s a little like she’s been brainwashed, and although she doesn’t want to be there she doesn’t have the energy to fight her way out.
I thought the first meeting with Ted was just perfect. It’s a really nice touch how she stands there in his warmth, because it’s kind of like he’s protecting her from the cold, which is a nice touch to show his caring, protective nature later that appears later in the fic. His character struck me immediately – he just seemed like such a Hufflepuff. :) One problem I had with this little segment was this line: Each of their faces was distorted with anger … It just seems a little far-fetched for them to all be so angry at one girl holding up their path for about thirty seconds, especially since Ted is talking to her.
The scene with Rabastan and Andromeda in the classroom was really well-written. Like, scarily well-written. You’ve made Rabastan into such a cold, terrifying character. It interested me how he showed her his Dark Mark proudly – you get the impression that he thinks it’s a great achievement, but being at school he wouldn’t have been doing much of Voldemort’s bidding, and I don’t think he quite realises what he’s up for yet.
I sucked in a breath as his fingers crept up under my shirt. This was my favourite line of the entire fic. It was just so chilling – I actually got shivers up my spine reading it. The use of the word “crept” is brilliant, I think. I can practically feel his cold fingers on me. Ugh. That whole scene is so disturbingly creepy, but in a way that isn’t too graphic or horrifying. Well done.
The last few bits of dialogue between Ted and Andromeda are really lovely, but I have a bit of the problem with him saying that he’ll marry her before Rabastan does. Even though it’s slightly justified with his apology, I just feel like it’s a bit much considering he’s only spoken to her for a brief few minutes in his entire life. Even if he’d said he’d kill Rabastan or something similar, I think that would have been a bit less intense, if you know what I mean. A proposal of marriage just seems a bit extreme, even if she was nearly raped.
I love the whole “don’t apologise” thing that runs throughout the fic. It ties in really well with Ted making Andromeda care and feel again. I don’t know if you intended this or not, but it’s as if he’s showing her that she doesn’t have to apologise for who she is or what she does, which would be a stark contrast to her life before, where everything she did was wrong. It’s a lovely little theme and it really makes the fic, in my opinion. :) Thanks so much for this gorgeous read, Cass.
I love your Andromeda from the start. You immediately begin with her showing her individualism by breaking away from the meeting. This is definitely how I see her in the series, so well done there. Not only that, but also you introduce her pride that she inevitably has as a Black with “ Not really,’ I answered, honestly. ‘You were the one who bumped into me.’ That was really awesome. I also really like how she is envious of the friendship Ted and his friends in comparison to the acquaintances she has.
This is really awesome, and through it all, I love the conflict you create with Rabastan, and then how Ted breaks it up! That was so great.
Through this all, I think the apathy you create in Andromeda is an interesting twist on her character. I’ve always seen her as really strong, but in the way you create her, I think the apathy definitely works, like she has gone beyond everything else.
The ending was perfect too, so hopeful for her to feel again. It seems like the apathy is going to do a turn around now that she has some light in her life.
Really awesome story. Did I see a sequel? I might have to check that out… :D
Author's Response: Eep, Kat. What a lovely review. Thank you so much! (and for linking it in the Character Class >.>) I'm so glad you like my characterisation of Andromeda; she's someone I really work at. I've never determinedly made her the apathetic person as she comes across, but she somehow just does. In this particular setting, she'd certainly be drained. Thank you for picking up on the little things about her character :D And yes, there is a sequel, and the first chapter of a chaptered fic thats new, although it isn't necessarily a sequel. *stops self-promoting* Thanks again, Kat :) ~ Cassie
Author's Response: Thank you! And I am writing more, I have a follow up to this that's currently being beta'd. :)
Aww. That was sweet. And I'm not a Ted/Andromeda fan at all, really, but this was a nice story. Short and sweet. I happen to sort of like Rabastan for my own strange reasons . . . but your characterization of him here was definitely plausible. Anyhow, nice work. :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much :) I quite like Rabastan as a character, but not so much as a person. I've always pictured him as someone that would be very creepy! I'm writing a follow up to this story at the moment, too. Thanks for reading and leaving a review. ~ Cassie
I love the way you describe Ted. Actually, I love how you describe everything--it's so real and therefore powerful.
Author's Response: Oh, I'm glad you like my Ted. I love him. Thanks so much! ~ Cassie
This was so incredibly amazing! I really love it. I really, really, really, really love it! Great job! This is just wow...
Author's Response: Aw, thanks! I'm really, really, really glad you love it! lol. ~ Cassie
Well done, I really enjoyed this story. I was a bit worried about how you would play the "non-consensual" part, but you pulled it off well and it was very believable (and creepy too, but I suppose that is what you were going for!).
Really great stuff!
Author's Response: Thank you! And yes, creepy is the only word to describe Rabastan! Thanks for reviewing, dear :) ~ Cassie
I have been searching everywhere for the perfect A/T fic. Thank you so much for finally ending my search. That was brilliant, sorrowful, beautiful and moving. Yay!
Author's Response: Oh, wow. Thanks so much! I'm glad I could do that for you. ~ Cassie :)
your story was very good....i also like honey and the one about rose and scorpious.
Author's Response: Oh, well thank you very much for reading my stories! I'm really glad you like them. ~ Cassie
Wow, Cassie, that was amazing.
I liked the way the story developed from Andromeda's POV. I especially liked the characterisations of hte main characters. They were so good! And Ted was so sweet! I loved him in this story.
There were a couple of grammatical errors, but nothing too bad.
This simple touch removed the cold completely, and as his warmth spread through me, I realised that Ted Tonks had given me the ability to feel what I had never felt before; he’d somehow given me the ability to care.
This line is just plain awesomeness!
Great story! Definitely favouriting.
Author's Response: Thank you so much Samarie! I'm glad you liked it. I'll try to find those grammatical errors now. Thanks for leaving a review :) ~ Cassie
Aw! I fucking LOVED it, are you MAD? How on earth could you HATE such a tale? *huggles*
Author's Response: Haha, wow. I'm glad you
f***ingloved it :) ~ Cassie
that was really, really good.
Theres no way I could have hated it.
It was awesome.
Author's Response: Aw, thank you! ~ Cassie
Aw, the ending was so sweet!
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you liked it :)
Very, very sweet. :)
Author's Response: Thanks for the review :) ~ Cassie
This was wonderful!
I loved how Andromeda changed over the course of the story. The interactions between her and Ted were wonderful. I love how he blurted out how he would marry her if it meant helping her, so sweet!
The part with Rabastian, though obviously a terrible subject, was very well written. I'm glad, at least that Ted was able to come to the rescue, and was of some comfort to Andromeda.
Author's Response: Thanks alot! I'm really glad you liked it. ~ Cassie
Loved it! What a great story. Would you believe I always wondered how she ended up in a circle with someone like Ted? I love your solution. Great job! You are offically on my list of favorites! :)
Author's Response: Aw thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. ~ Cassie
It was really good! I liked it a lot. It makes you think about what to the Slytherins really do feel with all the pressure of the pure-blood thing. I really liked it.
Author's Response: I always got the feeling she'd feel overwhelmed with the burden of being a pure-blood and having to carry of the pure-blood line, etc. Thanks for reading! :)
Aww...Tonks is so sweet. However I don't think he would've said the mairage remark after they barely knew eachother. Also, Rastaban was rather flat. Still, the story was quite good.
Author's Response: I appreciate your opinion, thanks for the review :)