Reviews For My Boys
Reviewer: captburke
Date: 12/20/08 21:43
Chapter: My Boys

Good story.

Author's Response: Thank-you! x

Reviewer: fawkeshermione221
Date: 10/18/08 9:04
Chapter: My Boys

Wow. This is really, really good. The story flowed really nicely and was very suspenseful - it kept me on the edge of my seat, waiting to see what would happen. You had me scared that Louisa was going to die for a minute there! But I like that you gave the story a happy ending. I almost felt like the ending was a little rushed, actually, but maybe that's just me. Anyway, this is a fantastic story and I hope to read more of your work soon.

~Vivian~

Author's Response: Oooh - thanks for the lovely review. I'm pleased I had you on the edge of your seat - I can't be too bad if I managed that. :) lol. I agree with you: the story is slightly hurried. To be honest, I think all my stories are. When I have the time I'll go back and give them all a good edit. I think this one is worthy of a few chapters at least - I could slowly build it up, and this chapter would be the climax. But less hurried. Anyway, thanks again. x

Reviewer: Vitamin Vicki
Date: 08/14/08 9:31
Chapter: My Boys

This was awesome! I really loved how you managed to capture all of Louisa's feelings, and you were so descriptive! The happy ending was kind of sappy though... But I'm a sucker for happy endings, so of course, I loved it. c: This was excellent. In the beginning, I thought some parts were maybe too descriptive, but you had nice flow and I really liked that. Great job!

Author's Response: I'm really pleased you liked it. I know what you mean about the ending, though. When I first drafted it out she burnt at the stake, but I was so sure I'd read about JKRs Witch Trials not actually catching a real witch that I changed all that. Description ... umm ... sometimes I love description, sometimes I just want to get to the action! In this story I really wanted to get my point across about how horrible it was, but I can definitely see where you're coming from when you say maybe too much. Lol. Thank-you for your review. :)

Reviewer: gryffindor_girl21
Date: 08/12/08 14:38
Chapter: My Boys

That was such a good story. I was shaking just imagining the stones being thrown at Paul and how horrible they were being to Louisa. You did a great job writing it. I loved it and it made me a little teary eyed. I really enjoyed reading it.
~gryffindor_girl21~

Author's Response: Thank-you so much! I tried to keep as realistic as possible, though I think I probably gave it too happy an ending (I'm a sucker for those happy endings lol). When I studied the Witch Trials and all that in school it sounded a lot worse, my story was quite soft I reckon prepared to the real things. I'm really pleased you enjoyed my story - thanks for reviewing. :)

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