Reviews For To Remember Luna
Reviewer: Indigoenigma
Date: 07/18/09 13:35
Chapter: To Remember Luna

Cassie –

What a very interesting story! I don’t think that I’ve ever seen one from Draco’s point of view while the prisoners were being held in his home. I thought that you did a lovely job with it.

Based on what we saw of Draco in DH, he was having a rather rough go of it. However, I always did wonder how he felt about having people imprisoned in his home. And, of course, not just people, but people that he actually knew. I could only imagine it being stressful and traumatizing. This is why I rather like the way that you’ve written Draco’s response to hearing Ollivander’s torture session. He’s clearly been conditioned to witness torture, but he still has enough feeling within him to feel guilt about the activities.

Although she has a small role, I was very happy with the way that you wrote Narcissa. She seemed very much like she is in canon. I mean, she tolerates torture and holding captives within her home for the sake of maintaining appearances, but that also connects to her more protective side. We saw, both in HBP and DH, that she would do just about anything to protect her family – especially Draco. Thus, having her stop Ollivander’s torture because Draco communicated that he was uncomfortable with it, was perfectly in character for her. The only part of Narcissa’s characterization that felt a little bit off was when you described her as “hesitating” before asking Bella to stop the torture. Although I think that it’s an accurate description of what Narcissa would have done, I think that the word “hesitation” implies a little bit less poise than Narcissa is always described as having. It’s amazing how individual words, even when they’re perfectly accurate, can affect the characterization and I think that, although this one was good, there’s a better one for the situation. Personally, I would have used the word “pause” just to convey a little bit more poise and sophistication.

I noticed that you have a very powerful way of writing. You consistently pulled individual lines/sentences and made them a stand-alone paragraph. This is a very good way to emphasize points within a story and I wanted to give you big-time kudos for not over-doing it. It’s very easy to get into the habit of over-doing that, which leads to over-emphasis, which then leads to confused readers. So, it’s nice to see that you have a firm grip on that style and an understanding of how to properly do it.

I’d like to open my comments about your characterization of Luna with a quote that I thought was absolutely stunning.

And I was enraged by the effect her presence as a prisoner was having on me. To have her sit there, eating the food I had provided, and challenge the person that I had tried so hard to be. But the hardest part about all of this was that within Luna Lovegood’s insanity, there was sense. Sense that even I could not deny.

Those were absolutely brilliant lines. I thought that you absolutely nailed the characterization of Luna. Especially those last two sentences in that little paragraph. It’s something that we all see in canon – Luna being eccentric. However, her words always have a lot of truth in them, even when they’re rather off the wall. Some of the insights that she had about Ron and Harry were absolutely amazing. A lot of authors don’t quite seem to grasp that Luna isn’t insane; she’s just brilliant and quirky. Hands down, your characterization of Luna was my favorite part of this story. She was just so true to her character that I was, quite frankly, amazed. It was absolutely wonderful to see a story in which she was well-characterized.

The ending of the story was also quite powerful. You added a lot of depth to Draco’s character in this story, and I think that the ending really summed that up. He and his mother are both putting forward a face – a persona – but they both really do have feelings and really do care about others, even if it’s very rarely expressed.

Absolutely lovely job, Cassie!

~Kelly

Reviewer: decdraft
Date: 01/09/09 17:29
Chapter: To Remember Luna

Are you really only 17? This was very mature - and an excellent story

Reviewer: decdraft
Date: 01/09/09 17:25
Chapter: To Remember Luna

Are you really only 17? This was very mature - and an excellent story

Author's Response: Yes :) Thanks a lot! I appreciate it. ~ Cassie

Reviewer: Pinkcess of the Abyss
Date: 10/04/08 8:39
Chapter: To Remember Luna

Hey I really liked this oneshot! It's almost a set up for a LunaDraco pairing, but not one. Which makes it better.

I really do like stories that portray just what Draco went through in his own home during the seventh book. People seem to forget what he saw and experianced everyday and instead just called him a coward. It makes me angry, so I like this fic the more for showing what he went through.

Thanks for a great read! Take care xx Chicky.

Author's Response: Yeah, I think people think that Draco is a one-dimensional character that is only a coward. I personally think he has many layers :) Thanks so much for R&R! ~ Cassie

Reviewer: rayasunshine
Date: 09/21/08 4:48
Chapter: To Remember Luna

Hmnn, I really loved this, it was a great way to brign them together, and Draco and Luna were perfect together! If you wanted to write a chaptered fic of them together after the war, I'm sure it would be great!

Author's Response: Thank you! I never really intended for them to get together, though. It's a thought. ~ Cassie

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 08/27/08 12:56
Chapter: To Remember Luna

Good characterization of Draco. Shows his inner torment

Author's Response: Thanks so much :)

Reviewer: fg_weasley
Date: 08/27/08 2:20
Chapter: To Remember Luna

YAY. Its up. eeep. I love your writing, dearest, truly. Your Luna is absolutely wonderful. [hugs] :D

Author's Response: Thank you, Nikki! I'm glad you like my Luna, it's hard to keep her IC. [hugs] ~ Cass

Reviewer: sam_1034_lily
Date: 08/26/08 23:42
Chapter: To Remember Luna

n one more thing u could turn dis into chapter fic i would really luv dat

Reviewer: sam_1034_lily
Date: 08/26/08 23:41
Chapter: To Remember Luna

oh i absolutely luved it n luved ur writin style luna was so much in character she was perfect

Author's Response: Aw, thank you :) I'm really glad you liked it ~ Cassie

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