Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Date: 09/15/09 22:28
Chapter: Part 2: Revelations

An absolutely fascinating tale! It was descriptive and laden with potent imagery, and every word had meaning to the story, which is so important in a two-shot.

The thought of Harry getting to live his life sans-Voldemort is heartening, and Dumbledore living longer is comforting.

Author's Response: Thank you very much for this review. I heartily appreciate it and I'm glad that you enjoyed it so much!

Reviewer: MorganRay
Date: 07/12/09 0:08
Chapter: Part 2: Revelations

I liked how you decided to not make Dumbledore a very sentimental character in this fic. A lot of authors portray Dumbledore as being a bit soft, but your choice to make him someone who is always an active character was very in context with the Dumbledore we see in canon. Although Dumbledore is a strong character, you also never lose the fact that Dumbledore does care very deeply about people. Dumbledore, even though he knows Tom murdered three people, is still very intent on finding his killer. He is still upset by Tom’s murder, which says a lot about Dumbledore as a person.

That gothic feeling that pervaded the first chapter was not lost in this chapter. I really liked this line because it gave an eerie feeling to the chase scene:

Along the walls, long glass windows let in pale moonlight, which cascaded down the stairs, causing alternating spaces of light and darkness.

You also did an excellent job at building suspense in this fic. When the murderer walked out behind Dumbledore, it was an awesome moment. I felt like one of those perfect movie moments where you just want to scream “OMG! Behind you!” I also loved how you twisted the end of HBP and made Dumbledore come back to kill Tom. Overall, this is quite a nice AU mystery fic.

Author's Response: Thanks a lot for the review. I'm really glad it evokes emotions out people, especially since I wasn't sure how people would take the ending. I'm glad to hear that you liked it.

Reviewer: MorganRay
Date: 07/11/09 23:39
Chapter: Part One The Talented Mr. Riddle

I loved how you set the tone of this chapter, by the way. The opening where you describe how the scene was made worse by the heat was particularly nice because it added an element of the grotesque to the story. The mystery element to this story was excellent, and I liked how you tied the present day murder scene together with the flowers and Dumbledore’s dream of Ariana. There is an element of gothic horror to the dream sequence, and for some reason, the way you described the wall paper stood out to me. I really loved these lines:
Afine layer of dust had coated the floor and each step of his caused a cloud of it to rise. The drab gray walls around him looked desiccated; they were pockmarked with age and curled, faded wall paper.
I liked the scene where Septimus comes out of the Hogshead, too. You seemed to flesh out more minor canon characters very well in this story. This definitely worked to this fic’s advantage because the use of minor characters, instead of just a ton of OCs, allowed the fic to remain connected to canon.

Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review and the feedback. I really appreciate it!

Reviewer: OLP
Date: 11/23/08 1:06
Chapter: Part 2: Revelations

This is fantastic. Very powerful and suspenseful, but also kind of sad. I really feel for Dumbledore.

Author's Response: Thank you very much for my first review. I really appreciate the time you took to give it to me and am glad that you like it.

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