I have really enjoyed this story: all the characters are more real - and I agree that no-one can die of a broken heart, however much they might want to.

Just one small point: while using 'thou' does make it feel more medieval, you need to use it properly. 'Thou art', not 'thou is', and also I think 'thou hast', but I'm not so sure about that. It was annoying in an otherwise lovely story.

Author's Response: Thanks very much for your kind review! I had far more fun writing this story than I originally thought I would. =D And you're absolutely write about the dialect -- I wasn't at all used to writing medieval dialogue, and wanted to strike a balance between realism and readability. ;D