Haha that was perfect and so funny! I've never read a story with Ron and Al talking and I thought you did a great job. 10/10!
This was wonderful! Short, sweet, and straight to the point, as well as perfectly hilarious and extremely entertaining. I loved the deal, but I do wonder how Harry managed to persuade Ginny not to name Lily Luna something horrific. I mean, she is a girl after all. Ginny got her wish. (:
I actually laughed out loud at Albus' response! "Oh." Haha!!
Ah... but doesn't Clifferton Potter have a ring to it? *thumbs up*
Ahem :D Imagine that.. And the teasing at school... oh dear, the poor boy! Lucky he did get the other names, at least he can be nicknamed "Al" now.
Else he'd be called "Cliff", which reminds me of a troll, or there'd be evil jokes, about "cliffhangers".. ooh, too many silly thoughts flooding my head now :D
Oh right- I too particularly enjoyed the ending. Bet he appreciates his name now...
Author's Response: Clifferton.. I think that's the most decent name Ginny came up with.:D I imagine a big red dog. Cliff... Clifford. Everybody loves the ending! Including, of course, the writer, moi! Thanks for your second lovely review!
Haha, that was so funny. Ron acted OOC, but it answered a question we've all been asking since June of 2007 very humorously indeed.
Author's Response: Ron's OOC? I was afraid of that. But others think otherwise. Hey, we don't think all the same, right? Thanks for the review!
ahhhaha this is great!! :D
Author's Response: Thank you for the review!
This was a short and sweet little insight to Albus Severus' young life, and the incident was described perfectly, especially the small flashback scene which tied in so well. I must say, the summary was what drew me to the story, because the mystery beneath a name-- ahh. It's something that I'd love to have seen written down, and the idea of Ginny naming her child something else has been a possibility that I've wondered about since the time I read the epilogue. I won't lie, I actually thought I'd be seeing a full-blown angst with Albus finally realising why he'd been named that way, that too after two Headmasters who couldn't have been more different from one another. However, the incident described in the story just gave a completely different twist to the story, and it was a very refreshing read. =)
I liked how you began the narration with his name itself, and bring about Albus' all too familiar annoyance at his name. The style with which you wrote, that of plunging right into the topic without any description or narration, fit in really well. It was to-the-point and direct, a style that worked well throughout the story. I somehow also liked the fact that Albus was interested in books far beyond his age level... a fact which I usually tend to find cliche'd. It justified the "Potter Gene" comment, I felt.
Ron calling Albus by his full name was probably the only thing that bothered me a little. Ron doesn't strike me as someone who would resort to formally calling children by their christened names. It also seemed contradictory; Ron calls his daughter "Rosie" in the next few lines.
The flashback scene was perfect, though. I loved the point at which you brought about the transition from the present to that incident. The setting seemed to change suddenly, but I found that the conversation between the three men at that time to be very hilarious. The names that you came up with in Ginny's "list" was another thing that made me chuckle out loud; the mixing up of popular characters to form really absurd names was a great idea. George's characterisation was something else that I loved... he seemed to have regained his usual, jovial self. =D
The ending was just superb, I felt. Ron putting across the fact so simply, and Albus' very short reply, which spoke volumes; both have to probably be my most favourite lines in the story. That was just a very brilliant way of ending the story, and I found that it was effective. It leaves little doubt as to what Albus' feelings were at the end of his enlightening conversation, and probably teaches him to be grateful for what he's got already. Bad is better than worse, isn't it?
Overall, it was a great story! Keep writing!
Author's Response: Ooooh.. a long review!:D I am speechless -- overwhelmed by your review -- so I hope I can convey my response understandably enough. Ah, the name. It came about as just a little quote I thought of. It was posted in my DeviantArt, going like this: "Maybe Harry was just worried to have his children named like Pigwidgeon so he took over. Lucky Albus Severus." I chuckle whenever I think of that, imagining how Harry persuaded Ginny into naming the children by himself. The idea was getting out of hand so I wrote it. I haven't had drama in my life for quite some time; angst would not be a good genre for me so I sprinkled a bit of humour. That's also the reason why George is jovial. The book thing... I thought of that because while Al looked a lot like Harry and they may have some similar personalities as well, Al is not Harry. Harry doesn't read. He doesn't even read the book given to him by Sirius and Remus, which is the book Al was reading, by the way. And like you noticed, I justified it by the Potter Gene and relationship of the book to DADA. The calling of the full name was just brought up by Ron's shock at finding Al reading. After that, he reverted back to calling him Al. The flashback.. I was kind of worried about that. I was anxious of the way I wrote the transition. I felt stuck as well. Even my characterisation seems a bit off to me. Especially Harry. The "list" was one of the hardest. I kept switching syllables to form absurd names but at the same time "name-able" names. Somewhat similar to Pigwidgeon. There, I realised the hardship Jo faced to create names. Or maybe she was just creative.(: I'm so glad you liked the ending. It's my favourite (as you can see, I'm practising Briticism.xD Hope to get it soon!). The "Oh." Had it formed even before I wrote most of everything. "Bad is better than worse, isn't it?" You summarized the whole thing!LD And for keeping on writing, I was thinking of writing 'Lily Luna' or just a sequel. Just to justify Lily's name -- how she got a normal, shameless, burden-free name. I mean, the bet was to have the poor, poor baby girl named by Ginny with those horrible names. I'm still deliberating. I've got loads of time. It's my summer holiday already. Thanks for the nice long review! I was smiling the whole time I was reading it!
When there is an Americanism in the summary ('Mom' should ALWAYS be Mum), it is not very encouraging. Originally, I actually clicked ont he story just to give that little snippet of advice. However, I am very glad I clicked on this story, because it was so sweet and well written, and, unusually, very original. You did a very good job. :D
Author's Response: Thanks for that 'Mum' thing. Fixed it!.(: My beta told me about that. Slipped my mind. It's a good thing you thought of giving me an advice. And I'm glad too that you even gave my story a chance despite the discouraging summary.xD Thanks for the review!(:
Author's Response: Thanks!
interesting story..i especially liked the "Oh." at the last part. xD
Author's Response: Haha. The last part had been stuck in my head for a while. And my beta liked that too.XD
I must agree with your first review that you did get Ron and Albus character well. This was hilarious! I loved it! Haha. Good job, very good job.
Author's Response: Thank you!
Ha ha! This is funny! I think you got Ron and Albus's characters down very well.
Author's Response: Thanks! I was afraid about how I wrote Ron. I don't know if my humour would go well with my writing. But I guess I did all right.:D