Reviewer: Phoenix Song114
Date: 06/21/12 14:31
Chapter: Haunted

Can't wait til you finish the next couple chapters!!

Reviewer: HazeyHero
Date: 01/07/11 21:32
Chapter: Haunted

awesome story

Reviewer: Salace15
Date: 07/23/10 12:52
Chapter: Haunted

very good

Reviewer: LyssLyss
Date: 07/01/10 7:13
Chapter: Haunted

Hola, I came across your story when I randomly decided to Google my name "Alyssa Potter."
It made me laugh when I saw it listed there and I had to read it. It was okay but I was hoping for it to be a little more different. Maybe thinking she'd do different things or something..I don't know..

Reviewer: Luna_Midnight
Date: 03/03/10 19:24
Chapter: Haunted

hmm i caught this out of curiousness sense my name is Alyssa. Thanks keep writing more

Reviewer: sahasra
Date: 12/19/09 23:28
Chapter: Haunted

nice one.exciting enough......when are u going to post the next chapter

Reviewer: Filius_Flitwick101
Date: 09/19/09 4:59
Chapter: Haunted

dis stryy suxx!!

Reviewer: TJ neill
Date: 04/14/09 8:59
Chapter: Haunted

Good idea!

Reviewer: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer
Date: 04/10/09 17:21
Chapter: Haunted

well, i really like the idea but i don't think that there's not such a big difference in this chapter than when harry was , well, a boy.
and snape?pretty?
but stii, i'm looking forward for the next chapter!

Reviewer: Inverarity
Date: 04/10/09 13:51
Chapter: Haunted

Harry-as-a-girl AUs can be interesting, but I'd really like to see something original and different. So far, this is just the same story we're familiar with, except Harry is "Alyssa" (and Snape is "good looking, tall, and muscular"? Oy.) How does "Alyssa" change the dynamic of the Trio? Is it Hermione who is her best friend now? Does Ron have romantic feelings for her?

The scene with Draco seemed pointless, especially since he treats her exactly the same way he treated Harry. On the one hand, I'm glad that you didn't immediately have Draco crushing on Alyssa, just because she's a girl (or worse, her crushing on Draco), but on the other hand, it just reinforced the impression that the only difference between this and the original story is that Harry is a girl (with an improbable name) and Snape has been made good looking.

Starting right in the middle of OotP makes it hard for us to see how your character diverges from the canonical Boy-Who-Lived, so I would recommend that future chapters perhaps cover a bit more of her past, and how she might view the world differently than Harry did.

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