Reviews For Wait
Reviewer: coolh5000
Date: 05/02/09 17:37
Chapter: Chapter 1

One of the good things about modding is that it does mean I get to find fics which are a great read and make me want to come back and tell you the author so. And I have to say wow – you took a period of time that most people would cover in several chapters and squeezed it all in to a long one-shot and it still worked. I felt that each segment gave me enough detail to understand Harry and Ginny’s thoughts and feelings and the development of their relationship, but without any of them going too far and becoming boring or repetitive. I liked the restatement of the definition of wait used to split the sections, rather than just the simple use of a horizontal rule, as I felt it really emphasised the point of your story.

It is hard to pick a favourite segment of this story as one of its strengths is that they all fit together extremely well. I did like Harry’s proposal, however, and the wedding scene, particularly this part: Hermione and Ron both protested and tried to convince them to reconsider. Ginny told them if they didn’t want to come, then she’d owl Luna to act as witness. made me smile.

The plot was good and addressed some interesting issues. I like that you stuck closely to canon, incorporating all of the information that JK has given in interviews. It is true that with Harry and Ginny both starting such hectic careers they would have struggled to find time to spend with each other and even after the war, waiting still would have played a part in their relationship. I found the idea of elopement believable as Harry, especially, has shown his hatred of extra attention. It was interesting that they were able to convince a priest to marry them in the middle of the night, but sweet nonetheless.

Your characterisation of Harry and Ginny was excellent and I really felt you understood the characters you were writing about. The Christmas Eve scene was especially fitting and it is very easy to believe Harry reacting to Ginny’s letter so literally, by quitting the program to be with her. His actions seemed perfectly natural for Harry and exactly the way he would deal with such a problem. Ginny’s reaction: “Harry, you’re an idiot!” she exclaimed. was very fitting and a realistic response to Harry’s behaviour.

Being nit-picky, I did notice that there were some canon capitalisation errors in this sentence: All the bodies had been taken to the great hall and the House Elves had already done quite a job cleaning up most of the blood and lesser debris. Great Hall should be capitalised while house-elves shouldn’t and should also be hyphenated. Other than that, however, it was technically strong.

The only other thing I noticed while reading was that the tone of the dialogue occasionally became Americanised which did have an affect on the flow of the chapter and moments of the characterisation. It was mainly only simple things, such as the use of the word ‘candy’ and Ginny saying “You smell like arse,” which are simple to change but have a big impact on the way a British reader, especially, might read something.

All in all, this is a great one-shot and a really good example of a Harry/Ginny romance.

Hannah

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I greatly appreciate you taking the time to leave such a wonderful review -- and for pointing out those errors, which I'm about to go fix. My biggest problem with writing Harry Potter fanfiction is the tendency to Americanize, and I apologize for that. I'm glad you enjoyed it otherwise! I've read a lot of fanfiction that takes place in those years right after the end and while I have enjoyed most of them, I've always wanted to try my own hand at it without having to devote myself to a chaptered-story. It's good to know you think I was able to write it out well in only one chapter! :) And as for understanding Harry and Ginny -- that's high praise and I think you very much! I love Lily and James and Ron and Hermione, but Harry and Ginny always have been and always will be my favorite.

Reviewer: JustLikeHermione77
Date: 05/02/09 16:15
Chapter: Chapter 1

wow. what an amazing story!!! that made my day, thank you!! :-)

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad I could make your day -- it certainly brightens mine to know that! :)

Reviewer: ink_daughter
Date: 05/02/09 14:43
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow! This is most definitely my favorite Harry/Ginny fic I have EVER read, set during or after Hogwarts. And that is a high compliment, my friend. The definitions scattered through this were PERFECT. Now I am going to go to your author page to see if all your stories are as good as this one.

Author's Response: Thanks so much -- that's high praise! I hope you enjoy everything else I've written, although I think my writing has improved over time so my later stuff is better. . . . But thanks again!

Reviewer: lily_death_flower
Date: 05/02/09 11:41
Chapter: Chapter 1

this was brilliantly written. i loved it! not really a ginny harry person but i loved it!



Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it even if you aren't big on Harry/Ginny.

Reviewer: WeasleyWeakness
Date: 05/02/09 11:30
Chapter: Chapter 1

I absolutely loved this. It made me want to read the whole series over and then find some good Harry/Ginny post-DH fanfics. I'm awfully exciting, aren't I?
Hahha. Great writing.

Author's Response: Whenever I read a particularly good fanfiction it simply makes me crave more Harry Potter -- I either have to pick up one of the books of find another fanficion. I'm glad to see you liked this so much! Thanks for the review.

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