Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 09/07/09 11:21
Chapter: One shot- Yule Ball 2022- A Huge Success

*Bustles in* Lavender Brown here - reporter for the Prophet - you may have read about me in Chasing the Scoop. Now then, your writing style. PAH! You're no Skeeter are you! Where's the scandal! Instead you focus on all this description - Rita would be turning in her grave - if she were dead. *seethes with jealousy*

I have to say your feature piece is really rather good, my dear - the descriptions came alive and it sounded like a real journalistic piece (Don't you DARE go after my job at The Prophet).

Lavender - go away! Afifa - wonderful job. I agree with Lavender that your description is excellent and your characters came alive in very simple ways. Nicole blasting the sculpture, James being worried about people only liking him for his name - lovely touch. He would be in his dad's shadow, wouldn't he. Great Story, Afifa. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Heya, Lav Lav! :D Nice of you to drop by, hon. :) Glad you liked it.

Carole! :D Thanks for the review, dearest. :p



- Afifa

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 05/08/09 12:51
Chapter: One shot- Yule Ball 2022- A Huge Success

This is an interesting take on the prompt, Afifa. I enjoyed finding out about the champions and their dates. Ah, James Sirius Potter - he really does sound very eligible *adds to list*. Seriously, I enjoyed this and hope you write some more about this particular bunch of Next Gen kids. I want to know more about Alice Dante and Sandra Niran, for instance.

I adore your description; it is very evocative.

Nice job! Carole xxx

Author's Response: Carole! :D

He he, yeah. James Sirius Potter is after his namesakes. He's James Sirius Potter. xD



Um, yeah. Well, I do feel like writing some Post-Hogwarts stuff, let's see. RL is a problem, but after the exams I'll see if I'll write Post-Hogwarts or not. >.> I'm glad that you liked it though. :D Thank you for the review, hon. :)

Reviewer: minnabird
Date: 05/03/09 21:38
Chapter: One shot- Yule Ball 2022- A Huge Success

Afifa, I'm so happy you got this finished up! I like how this was written in the style of a newspaper article...not sure if this is how everyone else did it, but it's interesting. The descriptions are nice and I like how you added in the quotes from friends--it gave a bit of insight into the characters. One nitpick: I don't think a student at Beauxbatons would be called a Beauxbaton...more likely a student at Beauxbatons or a Beauxbatons student. Although I'm glad you didn't think up something weird like "Hogwartian!" (

Author's Response: Minna! Me too, hon, me too. It's a miracle I got it finished and beta'd before the deadline. Heh.

Yeah, it is quite different than the other entries, but then that's what I was aiming for, so that's cool. :D



And... Hogwartian? O.o Really. Lol. I'm glad too I never came up with something like that. Lol.



I'm glad you liked the story. Thanks for the review, dear. :)

Reviewer: OliveOil_Med
Date: 05/03/09 14:52
Chapter: One shot- Yule Ball 2022- A Huge Success

Very nice story! I just have one little nitpick. It's only in the movies where Durmstrang is an all-boys school and Beauxbatons is an all-girls school. In fact, when the Beauxbatons students first arrive, it is a male student who unfold the steps and helps Madam Maxime out of the carriage.

As far as Durmstrang goes, it's still only in the movies that the school is portrayed as boys-only. The books never offer any evidence to say this.

Author's Response: Molly! :D

Yeah, I know Beauxbatons has guys and girls. Nicole's boyfriend is a Beauxbaton. :) And about, Durmstrang, they never mentioned any girls in the books so I figured that it was an all-boys school. And it is a Dark Arts school, after all.



I'm glad that you liked the one shot though. :D Thanks for the review. :)

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