That was so sad! MY eyes are blurring with tears right now. That has got to be one of the best HP poems I've ever read, and I've read quite a few. I don't blame you at all for liking this one. It was absolutely brilliant and I hope you keep on writing poems and stories. It was really really deep and it made me think. Well done, keep it up and don't stop writing!
Author's Response: WOW. Thank you so much for all of the lovely reviews you've left on my fics :)
I'm glad you enjoyed this one, even if you did tear up a bit ;)
Dear Nitwit Blubber Oddment Tweak x,
That was a very touching poem. The sense of tragedy that you managed to encompass within the lines is quite moving. It makes the reader feel a lot of sympathy for Ariana and for Aberforth.
I was quite intrigued by the title, which is, of course, repeated throughout the poem. It is rather curious how the Dumbledore family seems to express a lot of emotion through their eyes. We know that Albus was always described by his eyes – they twinkled or did something that always seemed to express exactly how he was feeling. And, when we officially met Aberforth, he, too, was described by his eyes. With that in mind, I found it interesting that you chose to have Ariana describe her brother via his eyes and what they were doing. The reason that I find this interesting is that it seems to draw a parallel between Albus and Aberforth.
Throughout the series, we were given a lot of hints that, despite being brothers, they were extremely different. And, indeed, when we do meet Aberforth, he is different from his brother. However, the way you have Ariana describe him, with such deep respect and caring and with an emphasis on the eyes, I feel as though this is almost an alternate universe in which Aberforth was “the better brother”.And, of course, from Ariana’s view, he very might well have been.
I did want to commend you on writing from Ariana’s point of view. Not only is she truly a minor character, but she is also one with so many limits that it is exceedingly difficult to give her a mind while still making sure that she is not a “normal” witch in her thought process. I think that a poem was an excellent way to express her thoughts. That way, you can still have the emotional impact, without having to worry about things like dialogue or, really, anything that would impede the progress of her thoughts.
My world is growing dark
I’m really going to miss you, Aberforth
Your love - it made a mark
Even though that was a very painful passage to read, I really loved the allusion to the big, overarching theme in the HP series: the effects of love. The fact that Aberforth’s love “made a mark” on Ariana is so poignant with regards to the entire series. I mean, Harry’s scar is quite literally a mark of his mother’s love for him. So, having Ariana say this in the context of this universe, is just incredibly touching. It implies so much about Aberforth and how he must have sacrificed out of his love for Ariana, even though it was she who died and not him.
I just wanted to let you know that I really enjoyed this poem and all of the very touching symbols and ideas throughout. Excellent work.
Author's Response: Kelly, I can't believe I never replied to this review before! I'm just... speechless. Honestly, I don't know how to reply to such a wonderful review! You picked up on everything and just... gah. Thank you so much :)
I loved this poem from the first time I read it on the forums. And now it's up! You did such a lovely job with it. Keep up the great poetry!
Author's Response: Aww, thanks! And thanks for all your help and input - I really appreciate it :)