So, I find this a very interesting story. I have a few problems with it, but they did not prevent me from enjoying it. So I guess "problems" isn't the right word. But here are my thoughts, most of which you can do nothing about considering how far you are into the story, but I would love to hear what your thinking was.
-It seems a little forced for it to be Dudley's granddaughter. I mean it did require two teenage pregnancies so his granddaughter was at school at the same time as the next-generation kids. I'm not saying it doesn't happen, but like I said it just seems forced. Obviously there is nothing you can do now, but it is just something to think about with future stories.
-Would Vernon and Petunia have let Dudley and his daughter live with them? We know they loved their son, but they loved their reputation more.
-Like everyone has said, would Dudley become a mini-Vernon. I liked the part about the owls, I could see that happening, but I thought he might be a bit more accepting of magic. Might still get nervous around Hagrid though if they ever meet again...
-So good things now! Dandelion is a great character and I can't wait to see how you develop her. This is a very original story and I really enjoyed reading it. Sorry for this being long, but I do have one more thing. I recall J.K Rowling saying that Dudley would never have a magical kid because Vernon's DNA would stamp out any magical Evans DNA. However, we don't know who Dandelion's father is- so it would be interesting if it was a wizard and she was actually half-blood. I don't know how that would even fit in or how she would find out, but it would be interesting.
This is a fun, original story. I am surprised that Dudley is beahving rather like his father (maybe we all do this as we age) - you think he'd be more comfortable with magic having lived on the periphery of the magical world. I liook forward to her experinces at Hogwarts.
What about Dandelion's mother?
Just like you said! : p
Hum, after DH I really thought that Dudley had changed... Maybe with time he calms down. Just like his dad, he has a problem with owls, apparently, lol.
Keep it going please!
:) can't wait for more!
Author's Response: I promise that I'll sit down and write some more today or tomorrow.
I really like this story....Please Update Soon!!!!
Author's Response: I plan on updating soon, and getting kind reviews like yours makes me want to update very soon!
Please, keep it up! I want tou read what you've "cooked" for us!!!
(Please don't mind the metaphore)
Author's Response: I promise I'll keep going! The next chapter is actually currently in the queue awaiting validation. I'm really enjoying writing this story.
Thanks for updating! This story is really cute and I'm looking forward to read ahead :)
Author's Response: I started writing the next chapter today, so hopefully you'll be able to read it soon.
Looking forward to more! Love it!
Author's Response: Thank you!
Hey Laura, interesting beginning you have here, I'm looking forward to reading the rest :)
Only one Britpick: it should be 'nappies' instead of 'diapers'. Sorry, just had to point it out!
Author's Response: I'm so happy that you decided to give my story a try, Sarah! It's always exciting when somebody I know from the beta boards, especially a fellow Gryff, decided to give one of my stories a try -- and even better yet leaves a review! ;) Sorry about the diapers/nappies thing. I'll try to change that soon. My computer and MNFF don't get along too well, so fiddling around with my stories is always somewhat risky. If my story mysteriously disappears within the next couple of days, you'll know what happened. Hugs, Laura
Wow, love this fic! Great name too, Dandelion Dursley. Anyway, update soon please!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I promise you an update very, very soon.
great story! Something unique that still is canon. Very refreshing! Please write LOTS more!
Author's Response: Much idea of this story came from my annoyance with next-gen fanfiction cliches. Obviously, the story isn't free of them (Ron and James Sirius not liking Rose's relationship with Scorpius, for example), but I try to put a fresh spin on a lot of things. I'm glad somebody thinks I'm succeeding! I promise there's tons more in store.
Loving the story!
I wonder what will happen with Dandelion choosing her wand...looking forward to it! :)
Author's Response: I'm so happy to hear that you're enjoying the story! :) I hope I don't disappoint with the wand scene.
wow i just came across this today and its reallyy good but somehow i just cant see dudly as a teen father but it was gr8 hope u update soon!
Author's Response: I'm glad you're able to enjoy the story despite your dislike of the idea of Dudley as a teen father.
Just read the your story so far, I'm really liking it :). I'm surprised none of the others noticed Dandelion was there though, unless it was a really crowded place or something, I guess.
I quite like Dandelion though. I've got an internal battle in my head about what house she'll be put into at the moment xD.
Can't wait to read more of this story! :)
Author's Response: Eek! You're right -- the Weasleys were kind of OOC in their treatment of Dandelion. I promise that I'll try to rectify this mistake in future chapters. As for houses, I've had Dandelion's chosen from the very beginning. Now I just have to figure out a way for her traits to make her belong to the house I'm planning on putting her in!
As usual, I like very much ANY update in this story!!!
I'm getting more and more fond of Dandy as time goes by. I feel for her lack of a closest family, but I think Duddley does love her very much, as well as her mum...
As for the Weasley-Potter clan... I'm surprized they did not pay a bit more attention to her.. They ought have been puzzled to have a muggle-born cousin pop out of nowhere. Right? I could understand if Harry had specifically instructed them NOT to overwhelm her, but we did not get hints towards that... yet.
I liked the details of Jame's overprotectiveness over Rose and, of course, the insight of my fave next-gen ship... Rose-Scorpious. Good one!!
We also got the hint that Albus is a bit book-wormish and quiet and that Dandy rahter liked that. Interesting....
But we're missing any clues as to what to expect from Hugo and Lily.
Regardless, you covered a lot of stuff in a short chap. Nearly single word you wrote was very important and interesting for the further development of the story.
Hope to soon see a new update!! ^_^
Author's Response: About the Dursleys -- Dandelion's family may not be close, but she does love them and they her. About the Weasleys -- they're just a little caught up in the whole exciting experience of going to Diagon Alley to prepare for a new school year. As in the books, it's a bit of a highlight of their summer. I promise they'll turn their attention to our protagonist soon. About James Sirius being overprotective -- it's probably the most fun part of the story for me right now. I smile every time I write some Scorpius-related banter between Rose and James. I'm a HUGE Rose/Scorpius shipper -- it's my second-favorite ship. About Lily and Hugo -- I'm trying to gradually work Lily Luna into the story bit by bit. Don't expect to see a whole lot of Hugo for a couple more chapters, though. I admit that I still need to do a little work on fleshing out his character. Thanks for the reminder! About your praise at the end of the review -- I'm flattered. Seriously. I can't think of a better compliment for an author than "Nearly single word you wrote was very important and interesting for the further development of the story." I promise I'll try to get you some updates soon, as there's few things that annoy me more than an author who rarely updates his or her WIP.
Great, trully and absolutrly gripping closing description of Dandelion's aspect. Which we hadn't had so far.
She's had it though BTW. No grandma, Vernon and Petunia as great grand-pa's...
I liked very much the little I read about Ella so far. You really should give bigger insight to her and her story as well.
It's an enthralling story! Keep the great work!!! ^_^
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your glowing words and especially your feedback, which I'm sure to take it into account. This chapter that heavily focuses on what Dandelion has been thinking was written the way it was because of reviews. I wasn't planning on focusing too much on Ella or her backstory, but because of your review, among others, I may put a little bit in at some point in the story.
This story is confusing. Dudley is a year older than Harry. Sorry it doesn't make sense. Dudley cannot be the grandfather if he's about Harry's age. Also reread your story before submitting it. once you do that I have a feeling your story could become a favorite. Just fix the minor errors..
Author's Response: The timeline actually does work. I have updated my bio with an explanation of how Dandelion could go to Hogwarts with Harry's children. You can go check it out anytime you wish.
This story is confusing. Dudley is year older than Harry. Sorry it doesn't make sense. Dudley cannot be the grandfather if he's about Harry's age. Also reread your story before submitting it. once you di that I have a feeling
Very nice. I look forward to more
Author's Response: I'm glad!