Reviewer: ahattab33
Date: 06/19/09 12:24
Chapter: Chapter 1

First: the title.

"Dead? Ha! Fools!"

Awesome. This story was very well written! I loved how you interwove the flashbacks into the story (and the prompts into the flashbacks), making two characters we know very little about become personable very quickly.

You write dialogue so well, and I thought the pacing (throwing us the situation and their entire relationship in this one shot!) was good, too. It didn't feel rushed, and it flowed nicely...and the ending took on a sweetness that is probably not associated with Death Eaters very often. :)

I would love to see their relationship fleshed out. Great work!

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 06/17/09 15:50
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hi there, OOH, I do like this, Whit. Rosier/McKinnon - that is an interesting pairing and you've put them together well. I couldn't work out how the pairing would work, but somehow the heat of the battle and the fact that they're trapped with each other just leant to the overall intensity of their emotions.

I particularly liked how you interspersed the fighting/mating dragons with the scenes of them together. And the scene at the gravestone was touching. Hmm, I'm intrigued now, is Marlene alive, or is it her ghost saving him?

Minor -eensy nit pick These burns had healed so much quicker than the last, but this just spurned Rosier on to greater attempts at increasing his suffering. I think you mean spurred and not spurned.

Enjoyed the story very much. Carole xxx

Reviewer: MarauderMagic
Date: 06/14/09 0:17
Chapter: Chapter 1

I have to say this was really well written. It kept me wanting to know how it was going to end and when it ended, I wanted more. Which in my opinion is what makes a good story. :)

I'd really love to see you write a story about this pairing, so I'll keep an eye out for it!

Reviewer: ron lover
Date: 06/13/09 20:43
Chapter: Chapter 1

I really like this story. It's the first that I've read that have to do with dragons and it's really good. You did a good job on it.

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