Reviews For Eventual Embrace
Reviewer: ahattab33
Date: 09/07/09 0:27
Chapter: One shot- Eventual Embrace

Before I started reading, I suddenly remembered that I totally fangirled this banner, and I can't believe I haven't read this story yet!!

*Cough* Sorry. Anyway, onto the review. Oh my gosh. The first paragraph is one of the cutest things I've ever read.

I think what I liked most about this moment was that I could feel it happening. It's hard not to spend a lot of time with someone and not get to know them. And by getting to know them I mean getting to know who they are as a person. I think during their 7th year, Lily would get to know who James really was through their time along with their Head duties, and would have to admit, whether she wanted to or not, that he wasn't as horrible as she wanted to believe. Does that make sense? 'Cause I think that's what you show here in this evening.

I also love the development in James' feelings for Lily. It connects to your first story and shows a real growth and maturity that I've not seen in a MWPP story before.

I liked and disliked that the story didn't end with their relationship coming to a resolution. It gave us a little bit of closure from your first story, but it seemed like a glimpse into a journey they were having…and of course, it always feels good to have the guy get the girl of his dreams. :) But that moment when she puts her hand over his mouth was intimate and I could picture the scene…it was lovely and I almost felt sorry for James. I also wonder if Lily knows what affect she is still having on him when she does things like that…

This was a delightful little read, and I am shamelessly saying I would love to see what would feel like a final part of a trilogy, and let James get his girl! :)

~Amanda



Author's Response: Ah, yes. Avery made me this superb banner which I love. :D

That aside, do you have any idea how hard I grinned when I read this review? Really. Thank you SO much for the compliments. It feels so awesome that you actually got the fact that James isn't just an 'arrogant toe rag' but has a whole personality... that people change.



And you aren't the only one who was disappointed with the ending. Lol. In fact, I can actually see what you're getting at with it being incomplete but since I am going to write a sequel, I don't particularly feel very guilty. :p Though I should be getting on with it soon and your nudge was needed. Hopefully, I'll start on it soon and you'll have it to be read within a couple of weeks or so. Hopefully. >.>



BUT. Amanda, dearest, thank you so much for leaving me this utterly lovely review. It made my day, really, it did. :D



- Afifa

Reviewer: ron lover
Date: 06/17/09 18:35
Chapter: One shot- Eventual Embrace

I like this story and how they were friends before they got togther. I can't wait for the sequel!

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. I had fun writing it. :D Thanks for the review. :)

Reviewer: BlissfulxEuphoria
Date: 06/16/09 8:22
Chapter: One shot- Eventual Embrace

The ending to this one shot wasn't as strong as your first. I think you should have at least ended it with a first kiss, whether it be James making the first move, or Lily, and have the reactions take place in the next one shot. Well, that's my ideal way I would do it...you're the author xD

I can't wait for the next sequel.

Author's Response: Hm, I wanted to show that the whole thing happens gradually, that Lily didn't fall in love with James over night. That she hated him, then liked him. They became friends, and then she started to realise that she loved him. A year is a long enough time for someone to fall in love. ;) The sequel would have the kiss though, so don't worry. :)

Thanks for leaving a review. :D

Reviewer: ginnygirl16
Date: 06/15/09 18:39
Chapter: One shot- Eventual Embrace

Yay! Finally the sequel! Super cute...haha. Great job, Afifa. And when that lucky day comes for you to right the sequel to this one (I hope it's soon), I shall be the first one to leave you a review again:)
--ginnygirl16

Author's Response: Hehe, thank you so much, Sarah! :D I'm glad you liked it. :)

Hm, I won't force myself with the follow up, but who knows, it might be there next week? ;) Muse is so unpredictable, isn't it? :p



Thanks for the first review, dear. :D

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