I really liked this chapter. I thought that it worked well from James's perspective, especially with the part where Lily reveals her true motivations to James; that was really sweet. I also really liked the structure of the dance section; I don't think it would have had the same impact if the chapter had continued on.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad that you enjoyed the bit about Lily's true motivations :) And I'm glad you like where it ended and that structure. As for James's POV -- I'm think I'm too attached to it now to start switching, so maybe some one-shots showing major scenes/missing moments from Lily's POV?
Yay for updates!!
Great chapter! I loved the bantering between the Marauders. And the dance idea: very clever! But of course, Snape has to ruin everything.
I do like that this is in James' POV, but I don't see why you couldn't do an aside or something for Lily to show the argument.
Can't wait for the next chapter! Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Thanks very much! I really like trying to show the Marauders simple friendship, so I'm glad you like their bantering :) And, actually, I was thinking about maybe writing some one-shots that show "missing moments" that happened to Lily and other scenes from her POV.
Wow. Lots of action in this chapter!!!! James/Lily is one of my favorite ships, along with Teddy/Victore and Remus/Tonks
Author's Response: A lot was happening, you're right. Lily/James is one of my favourite ships, too. Thanks for the review!
Loved it - especially from James POV. I hope he beats Snape to a pulp. Can't wait for more! Your characters are so great in this story.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked the characters in this and enjoy it from James's POV :)
DRAMA!!! I hate Severus Snape. With a burning passion. But I loved this chapter, and I'm so glad the second part is coming soon :).
Author's Response: This was a pretty dramatic chapter, wasn't it :) I'm glad you liked it! And I have to admit -- I'm pretty anti-Snape myself (although when writing him and not ranting to other HP obsessed friends, I try to be fair to him). Thanks for the review!
pshh i was studying for finals untill i saw this and i must say i never thought 'studying' could be so sweeet!! loved it and please update soon the lastt one was sooooo loooongg!
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! It wasn't as long as the one before it, but the next chapter should be up soon! Thanks for the review.
good one.. but i cant imagine Snape actually saying that to Lily..whatever his faults, he still was in love with her, and even all those years later he still had a problem with people using the word Mudblood... at any rate, the chapter was good, and it made me so happy to see it in the recently updated!! cant wait for the next one
Author's Response: Thank you! I think that Snape would call her that as he already has before and he's surrounded by the people he calls his friends and they all expect it of him. He does love her, yes, but I don't think Lily would have ever given up on him if he'd been even a little nice and a little able to stand up to his friends or even not give in. I guess it's to each his own :)
I loved this chapter. I'm not sure why but it felt different from the rest of your story but in a good way.
I love the dance idea and I like how you didn't make it a cliché sort of dance with a lot of fluff and mixed it with fluff, drama, and humour.
And I love how you are writing this is James' POV. Not many author's do and I prefer james' pov to Lily's just because I find him to be the more interesting character and the more funny.
Can't wait for the next chapter !
Author's Response: Thank you! I think it's a little different, too -- especially in having the dance start at the end and then go backwards to explain how it got that way. That might not be what you're talking about, though. I'm glad you liked it nonetheless :) And I'm also glad you like it written in James's POV; it's certainly the less travelled path.
Wow! Amazing chapter! I'm really excited to see what's going to happen- this story always keeps me on the edge of my seat! And I love James' POV. I think his thoughts are great and I just like following him around. Maybe Lily could tell James what snape was saying? I'd love to know! Please update soon cuz this is one of my favorite stories!
Author's Response: Thanks very much! I'm glad you like James's POV -- he's so much fun to write :) And it makes me smile to know it's one of your favorites! I'll try to update soon.
AHHHHHHH!!!!! SOOO GOODDDDD!!!
please tell me that you're writing the next chapter!!!
Author's Response: Yes, the next chapter is in the works and should hopefully be up soon! Thanks for the review!
Can you puh-lease update soon!
Author's Response: I'm working on it! The next chapter is almost finished. :)
I have only recently begun reading fan fiction, and initially I thought some of the stories I've read so far were mediocre at best, but then I came across you and I have to say, you are by far one of the best fan-fiction authors I've seen. You could literally have been J.K. Rowling for all I cared but you also kept to your unique storytelling style too and you didn't try and mimic anyone else's which I thought was excellent. "I'll Pick You Up" is one of the best stories I have ever read, it's witty, well-paced, sometimes sombre and sentimental and sometimes I just find myself smiling while I'm reading it without even realizing it, and few stories can make me do that. I could actually realistically imagine this happening during the Marauders era in actual Harry Potter canon so that's how damn good it is to me. So, please continue writing as fast as you can, because I am dying to find out what happens next. You are amazing, keep at it.
P.S: Made of Steel is now one of my favorite songs :D
Author's Response: Thank you so much! That's such high praise! I think my writing has improved a lot over the years I've written fanfiction, so I'll Pick You Up is really my baby in that I think it's the best I've written. I'm glad you enjoy it so much and can imagine it happening in the actual canon Marauder Era! The next chapter is almost finished and I hope to post it soon :) Oh, and I'm glad you like Made of Steel -- it's always been a favourite of mine!
Love it! What a great story teller you are. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks! Hopefully the next chapter isn't too far off :)
Great story - but then I always love your work. This is exactly how I picture Lily and James. Loved the I Never game and the tipsy Lily. So real.
Author's Response: Thanks very much! I really want to make James and Lily realistic in this story -- it's probably my biggest goal -- so I'm glad you like how I've written them :)
It may not have been thrilling but it was nonetheless entertaining. It gives us a small view into James' life as a pureblood. I really liked this chapter, can't wait for the next.
Author's Response: Thanks! I liked getting to write James's father. I'm glad you liked this chapter, even if it wasn't the most exciting :)
Best Fan Fic I have read so far!
Author's Response: Thanks! That's high praise!
I love how your going to add the thrice defied thing into this it's going to be soo awesome I can't even describe how great it is! I can't wait for the Boxing Day chapter its going to be liek the highlight of my day when I read it!!
Author's Response: Thanks! Hopefully the next chapter isn't too far off.
I really liked this chapter. The way Lily confronts James about Remus was kind of unexpected, for me at least. I truly liked that, it showed that Snape is a push over when it comes to Lily. When James' dad talks to him about responsibilities and what might happen after Hogwarts with his relationship with Lily and his blood status. It is definitley an eye opener for James at this point. I cant wait to see how Christmas goes for them and Boxing Day at the Evans' house!
Author's Response: Thank you! A lot of people in reviews were saying that they thought Lily already knew, which took me by surprise because I thought it would be a shock to everyone when I revealed that Lily already knew! I guess maybe a lot of stories have Lily learning early on? Well, I'm glad you were surprised, and that you enjoyed that scene!
Yeah, it was kind of boring in spots (Well, I suppose not boring, so much as not as exciting as others). But I definitely think that it was important to advancing the plot, and I really did like how you treated James' revealing his Animagus powers to Lily. Well done.
Author's Response: Not as exciting as other parts . . . that's a very nice way to put it ;) I'm glad you liked the revelation. Thanks for the review!
i really liked this chapter...i was so sure that they would break up at the beginning and i am so glad that they didnt't. you wrote their emotions perfectly and they talk with james and his father at the end was really intense and kind of reminded me of when arthur weasley tells harry about sirius in PoA i'm not sure why but it did. i like how you added Cassie into this chapter and how this first christmas w/o her parents is affecting her and how she's dealing with it and all.
i cant wait for the next chapter :D
Author's Response: Thanks very much! While I can certainly imagine James and Lily breaking up over something like this -- most young couples would when trust issues this large are at stake -- I couldn't help but have them manage to talk it out. They're about to face much darker things, and they're gonna need each other ;) I'm glad you enjoyed Cassie in this -- she's going to pop up continually. I'll definitely try and update soon!