Reviews For It's Killing You
Reviewer: Russia Snow
Date: 07/15/09 10:24
Chapter: Even the Strongest of Us Break

This was such a powerful story, it was well written, and I loved how you dramatic and intense you made it feel. I have read the other reveiws, and I ddnt realise either that it was about Charlie, i think maybe you could make this a bit clearer. I remember now that there is a slash warning, but unless it is obvious, people tend to think non-slash, so Ginny would be the obvious choice, as the main characters name is not actually mentioned. Like I said before, this was such a powerful story, it was really well written, I expecially loved this line: "heavy as rain but silent as shadow" that was so beautiful.

I have a few tiny nitpicks, "reflection is staring back is haunting" the first is isnt needed."loved was is haunting" Is or was? “I’m not normally this soft to," I dont really understand this line.

I just want to mention again your fantastic use of words, "infiltrating a soul dark as ash" The way you structure these sentences is beautiful, you really have a way with words, and if you just proof read a little more, and watch your word order, this story could be a really fantastic.
I in awe of your wording skills!
Russia xxxxx

Author's Response: Thank you! The nitpicks were helpful, by the way because I read it over and the sentence you picked out didn't make much sense to me either, and I wrote it! Yeah, people always tell me that I have a way with words and it helps bring my stories to life. Thanks so much for the review that actually gives me some real feedback.

Reviewer: ron lover
Date: 07/12/09 17:09
Chapter: Even the Strongest of Us Break

I like that story. I feel really bad for her. I like the choice of words you used for this. It was really good.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the reviews guys! By the way, it's not Ginny. 0

Reviewer: ringobeatlesfan4
Date: 07/12/09 15:16
Chapter: Even the Strongest of Us Break

Oh my. That was definitely moving. I didn't expect it to be Ginny, but the fact that someone so strong might inside be so weak was so shocking, it was almost better that it was her. It shows readers that suicide is likely for anyone. This was very strongly written, and I so hope to read more from you. {BeccA}

Author's Response: Thanks. Like I said above; it's not Ginny. It's Charlie, actually. Sorry if I didn't make that clear. >.<

Reviewer: Belledeg
Date: 07/10/09 12:59
Chapter: Even the Strongest of Us Break

Very moving. The second person approach gave it that extra touch of poignancy. The pace was just right as well. Also an excellent use of language and word choice. Well done, you!

Author's Response: Thanks. I actually didn't expect it to be accepted (if that's the right word...). I had fun with it and was very proud when it was done.

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