Serenity. Captain Reynolds. I see what you did there. I see it, and it is wonderful.
very nice twist on the series, thoroughly enjoyed it. I really think that is requires some follow ups though, track the progress of the war, or even some prequels, like what happened at the major cities, just an idea, but great fic
Only one word to describe the short story
I quite enjoyed it again, although I had the feeling you got a little caught up with the naval battle in the last part. But it's easy to talk from the backseat, there were a lot of ships to take care of^^
The clash of magic and technology/magic also wasn't as clear as before, but I guess that was unavoidable in a story at/over sea-level. Maybe the squid or one of his relatives will make a cameo in another story? ;)
Overall it was still very good and fun to read, and I'm looking forward to reading Semiautomagic. Thanks again!
Hehe, does that qualify for a Charlie Foxtrot?
Liked it very much again, so I'm going to have to choose the second part over sleep..
One thing though, it seemed to me things concerning magic kept in-canon, is there an in-story explanation, why portkeys take so long in the making?
Wow, simply.. wow!
Well, maybe not simply, that wouldn't quite do this chapter justice.
I stumbled upon this per coincidence, but so far it's the best I've read here. It's a theme I only thought about, and written far better than I ever could.. I mean, a giant hurling an axe at a chopper? Not to mention the details, which make it quite convincing.
Congratulations, and thanks for the story!
Wow. I never thought I would the see one more chapter in Weapons Free. But now its two more. Simply wow. And the story is simply amazing. I am eagerly waiting for the next chapters. Be it Weapons Free or Semiautomagic.
I'm slightly dazzled, though. Was Avarice Loony Lovegood? Or the daughter of Abeforth Dumbledore's offspring? Or are they the very same person... (assuming said offspring was Luna's mother, whose name we don't know)?
Nice way to wrap it up. Go muggles and White Hats!! :)
Author's Response: I actually had quite a bit of background prepared for this story that did not make it into the final draft. I couldn't find a satisfactory way to include it all, especially since the narrator is a Muggle and Wizards tend to be cagey about sharing information with the non-magicals. Anyhow, the events of Weapons Free occur in a timeline where Dumbledore was not able to decisively Grindelwald and the Elder Wand. Therefore, the Wizarding World was split into two factions: the Dovish under Dumbledore and the Hawks under Grindelwald. Throughout it all, Grindelwald never stopped trying to resolve the situation between Dumbledore and himself. In a misguided effort to “return” Ariana to Dumbledore, Grindelwald cast a spell on Aberforth’s unborn granddaughter (sidebar: for some reason, I decided that Aberforth and Prof. Trelawney had a son… no idea why), shaping her in Ariana’s image. Although this action caused Albus to permanently cease all contact with Grindelwald, he couldn’t bring himself to undo the magic. Thus, the baby girl inherited Ariana’s name. Eventually, a young wizard named Tom Riddle would rise through the ranks and become head of the Hawk military arm. While Grindelwald initially mentored Riddle, their relationship would deteriorate over the years over Grindelwald’s “soft” policy towards the Dovish. In the end, Riddle seized control of the Hawks in a brutal coup, killing Grindelwald. The self-proclaimed Dark Lord then used his newfound power to crush the Dovish and launch a full-scale attack on the Muggles, which leads directly into the conflicts portrayed in Weapons Free. Hope that helps!
Soon!? I'm freaking dying out here!!!!! This is bloody torture!! Hit me with the Cruciatus and don't bother lifting it, Bella, will you?
Okey, sorry about that. May have been uncalled.
I loved the nicknames, again. Royal, I presume is our dear Kingsley. And one of the twins is certainly behind the naming thing!
I had been innitially a bit sad since with the previous chapter it seemed as thought we would not get much of our usual canon characters. I've been pleasantly surprized!!
Ron, Neville, Ollivander, Luna, Fleur and Ginny were in Azkaban. Harry, Herms and Luna(?) out doing some killing...
Quite interesting your anti-Ringwraith (loved the name) missile. That was out of this world! Really. Simple, clever, effective. Your way of explaining it was what amused me the most. Caustic. I like Torrance's mind, her way of retelling the facts, precisely because of that.
Her worst moment was pretty intense and in the middle of a deadly intense moment, too! I liked the way she pulled out of it, namely, Jeff joke.
Speaking of whom, his maniacal smile (the one a psycho would envy) me likes, too.
Summing up, update soon! Great story!
Author's Response: Hey, glad you enjoyed the story! Again, apologies about the cliffhanger; I've already submitted the second half. With any luck, it'll be up in the very near future. I admit, I was a bit worried about the anti-Dementor missile; I thought I might have injected too much science (or biology, as the case may be) into explaining the Dementor's powers. Now I'm glad I kept it in. Thanks for your feedback!
Gosh!!! This chapter is so cramped with action... Took my breath away.
It's nice to see the muggle side of naming. I mean, Death Eaters are Oscars. Order of the Phoenix is Dovish, and so on...
I'm curious as to where the story is headed. But if this first chapter is a sample of what you've got in store for us... It's going to be a BLAST!
I appreciated that you tried (or at least that's the idea I got) to "translate" some of the military, gun-related language. I, personally have not idea what half that stuff is. I'm impressed you maneged to write about so much and with such a variety. I imagine it'd have taken a lot of research or copious amounts of previous knowledge.
I'm glad the summary caught my attention!! Great chapter!
Nice story, well written. It's nice to read a combat story where the author seems to have at least a passing acquaitence with the military. 'Course my familiarty goes back to Viet-Nam. Can you say "Way outdated?" Good job!
Author's Response: Hey, thanks for reading! Most of the military stuff comes from my love of techno-thrillers (Red Storm Rising is a favourite) and films/tv shows like Black Hawk Down/Generation Kill/Future Weapons. It was an interesting challenge fitting all the magic in with the tech, especially coming up with how the wizarding military structure would operate.
Exceptional writing. Outstanding plot. Any chance of continuing?
Author's Response: Hey, thanks for reading. I have been planning out the events of the next installment (hint: as of now, the featured location will be one from the books) but haven't gotten anything written down yet. When I'm done with my next chapter for Semiautomagic, I'll start work on this one.
wow, you really should've continued this story. you definitely tell a war story better than tom clancy.
Author's Response: Wow, a comparison to Tom Clancy... Thanks for the compliment! I'll see what I can do to add to this story; I'm focusing on my other chaptered fic at this moment. Maybe a push through occupied France?
Have you ever read that story by, I think, Ray Bradbury, about the automated house that keeps on making toast and sweeping the floors and ironing shirts after a nuclear holocaust destroys all of its residents? This story made me feel that same exceedingly creepy 'Oh my God, this could happen' that that stupid automated house did. Very realistic, and I loved how you tied in the Semiautomagic team into the story. They're three of my very favourite OC's of all time. Thanks for another amazing piece of fiction!
Author's Response: Ah, There Will Come Soft Rains... a classic. I'm glad you enjoyed this story and perhaps Sierra One November will pop up in future installments of Semiautomagic.
I really like this story. It was fun to read. I liked every part in it. I really like the idea for this too, it was great.
Author's Response: Hey, thanks for the review and I'm glad you enjoyed the story!