Reviews For Phoenix Flames
Reviewer: OtterMoone
Date: 07/22/11 5:34
Chapter: Phoenix Flames

It was very good! The only thing that slightly bothers me though, is, wasn't the Triwizard Tournament supposed to happen every 50 years? I could be wrong, so I apologize if I am.

Author's Response: Uhm, I think it says 5 years in wiki, although I don't know where they get that from. I'm probably out with dates, but I needed it to be Victoire and she needed to be 17 (at least). Anyway, they wouldn;t have held one in 1999, because of the Battle aftermath, so I can rig it to the dates I want - ha ha. Very eagle eyed of you. By the way, Chasing the Scoop, is about this comp as well. I've never completed it, but it partially stands as a one shot, if you're interested. ~Carole~

Reviewer: luinrina
Date: 09/28/09 8:19
Chapter: Phoenix Flames

This is really brilliant, Carole. Like I already told you several times before, your poems are amazing. They seem so simple and easy flowing, and yet I can see that it took you quite some time to perfect the poem like it is now.

I really liked about the poem that it told a story in a few stanzas, and yet it felt like I read an entire novel. The imagery you used in such a few words is so spectacular, painting a clear picture in my head, so that I could easily follow the poem’s plot without ever being deterred from the rhyme and rhythm.

And speaking of which: The rhyme scheme you chose is just beautiful and perfect for the plot of the poem. That each stanza has only three lines goes nicely with the Triwizard Cup theme. Additionally, that the third lie of an uneven-numbered stanza rhymes with the third line of the following stanza keeps every second stanza linked to the previous one, making them stand together even more. It all reads fluently as one piece because of this build up; it’s just amazing.

The rhythm is working great as well, keeping the poem smooth, and the reader interested and entertained at the same time. I really felt like I was there in the stands with Lavender, watching the first task. I also very much liked the portrayal of the characters, especially Victoire. In just a couple of words you showed her talents and her wit, her charm and her power. It’s a really short-kept but intense characterisation.

Carole, this poem is exceptional and evidence enough for me to tell you whole-heartedly that you’re a brilliant poet. Don’t let anyone ever tell you otherwise.

Excellent work. Thank you for an amazing read.

Author's Response: It is wonderful to get a review that makes you feel it was all worth the work, rather than one that makes you want to chuck in the towel- so thank you very much for that. I am especially pleased that you've reviewed my poem because I know what a good poet you are, and that you're very appreciative. You're very authoritative, I just read things out loud and hope they sound right, but you analyse superbly. Thank you, again. I'm smiling and feel like dancing ~~~ in fact I think I will ~~~ *does jig* ~Carole~

Reviewer: ron lover
Date: 08/15/09 13:21
Chapter: Phoenix Flames

This is a really good poem. I like it.

Author's Response: Awww, cheers. I don't write mucxh poetry so it's lovely to get a review when I do.

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