Aw, I really like this. It's so sweet!
Author's Response: Thanks! xx
I really like this story. It was a lot of fun to read.
Author's Response: Thank you! -hugs-
yay! good story about an often-forgotten character in fanfiction :D
Author's Response:Thanks for the review! xx
Hey!
This was great, and it was nice to see Hugo portrayed as the main character. However, I do have one nit-pick:
"‘Yes, Professor.’ I gulped, and turned away with a nod of my head. She smiled at me, pleased I wasn’t arguing. This essay was going to be hard, but I probably deserved it. I knew the penalty for shoddy work. Still, I never thought I’d get the penalty. It served me right, though, probably. I’d got barely any homework done on the weekend, because I’d spent Saturday in Hogsmeade and on Sunday I’d overslept. So I’d stayed up late a few nights this week finishing essays. Apparently, it had taken its toll on me."
To me, this paragraph doesn't flow very well, and it sort of takes you out of the story. I think the problem is that you recycled the sentence structure a lot...
Other than that, I thought that this was a very sweet story. Yay! :-)
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! And uhrgh, can't believe I missed that paragraph -- it's so choppy! >.< I'm pleased you liked the story. xx
Aww! I love this!
Minor nitpicks:
I thought I heard a sneer as I left. Stupid Malfoy
Isn't a sneer a facial expression? And that sentence should have some end punctuation.
Anywho, This story is really well written, and I love the premise. I don't see a whole lot of Hugo-centric stories. Lots of Rose and Albuses, though. :-)
H_T
Author's Response: Thanks! And yes, a sneer can be a facial expression, but it can be used to represent a sound as well, I think. Hm, Rose and Albus are popular next-gen characters. In fact, of all the Trio's children, Hugo is probably the one least written in FF. Huh. I hadn't realised. >.> Thanks for the review again! xx
