Very cute. I like the character development in your stories. Always been a sucker for R/H but I'm liking the Rose and Scorpius hook up.
Author's Response: Thank you! You know that saying "Come to the Dark Side, we have cookies?" I could say, "Come to the Rose and Scorpius side. We have Ron and Hermione." :D
yay!! love ron and hermionie, they make the perfect couple :)
Author's Response: A double review means another opportunity to say thanks. :)
yay!! love ron and hermionie, they make the perfect couple :)
Author's Response: They do have that balance of intellect and emotion going on. Mental and physical, heh.
Aww~ it's my second time reading it, and still I had so much fun! I smile almost at every line!! Please keep writing more, you are soo good at it!! x
Author's Response: Thank you! I can't see them getting old and dull, just more mature and sexier. :D
Yay! It's been agesssssss since I've read fanfic. I'm glad to be back, and this is adorable.
Author's Response: Three cheers for you being back! Huzzah! Huzzah! Huzzah! :)
Oh, I do love a good Ron/Hermione fic. I think maybe I forgot how much I really do adore this couple, and I haven’t read hardly anything that sets them post-Hogwarts. I love what you did here. It’s very brief, but also very wonderful.
The opening of this works great. You give us a bit of background without it feeling like an information dump. You connect the backstory to the present – Ron is thinking about how much he likes his life and doesn’t feel jealous of Malfoy, but at the same time, he wishes he had this elevator. This fic takes place in a rather closed setting; it’s really just the lift and the penthouse itself, but I think that suits the fic perfectly. It’s sort of about closed spaces, isn’t it? The lift, wherever Scorpius and Rose duck off to, even the bedroom that we can imagine but never actually see – it’s all about closeness.
The characterization of Ron in this is spot-on. The narrative captures his character perfectly. Ron darted a look to make sure Rose was still searching for zits or whatever… The little ‘or whatever’ is what makes this line so Ron. He would dismiss searching for zits as this sort of foreign female activity that he doesn’t really understand, not to mention he’s mostly preoccupied with this subtle conversation he’s having with Hermione. The whole idea of Ron and Hermione and the stairs is so great, because it doesn’t feel out of place for them at all. I don’t really know why, but I just think the stairs works for them. Possibly that sounds odd, but yeah. I just love how you gave them the stairs.
I really like the way you depict the brunch between the two families. We don’t really get any real picture of the actual meal, but somehow it’s nonetheless clear. We know what Ron and Draco talk about – Quidditch is the perfect choice, by the way, because what else would they really have in common? – and that Ron spends a lot of the time disapproving of his daughter’s, er, fondness for Scorpius. …gave Ron something to do besides watching his daughter pick at her food while eating Scorpius Malfoy up with her eyes. I love that Rose is picking at her food and eating Scorpius. It’s a funny line, and I can totally see Ron saying something like that out loud if he were complaining to Hermione or Harry about his daughter’s new relationship.
That was one of the advantages of playing chess. He always thought ahead, anticipating responses and planning his moves. Another great bit of characterization. I often forget that Ron is quite the chess player, but I love how you brought it up here. And the conversation between Ron and Hermione in the lift is just so…well, I was going to say ‘cute,’ but I’m not sure that’s quite the right word. I’ll just go with ‘great’ again. The conversation they have is really great. -wink-
Really good job with this, Paige! I don’t think I’ve read anything of yours before, which is a shame because clearly you’ve got a good deal of talent. Keep it up!
What a wonderful review! Constructive praise is as helpful as concrit, it tells a writer what struck the reader in the story, validates that what he or she tried to get across came through, and, sometimes, reveals aspects not consciously "seen" while writing. The theme of closeness illustrated by closed spaces is such a perceptive observation. I tip my hat to you, madam (a Musketeer one with a fluffy white feather)!
Thank you, too, for agreeing the stairs works for them. Ron and Hermione had the most chemistry/sexual tension of any couple in the books imho, :), and I think they'd only get sexier over time, rather like some film stars, heh.
I hope you're having a Happy New Year!
I really liked this short little one-shot :D It was funny how Ron liked the lift :P And how he and Hermione ended up in it... I havn't read Our Little Secret, but I think now I must! I was a bit confused when he starts talking to Malfoy, but you cleared that up in the next paragraph.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading this when you haven't read the other story! Our Little Secret was nominated for a QSQ for Best Story Post Hogwarts, (if that helps convince you to read it, heh).
Brilliant as usual. This really made me smile, watching Ron struggle with his father instincts and his husband instincts. He's always so funny. Great job.
Author's Response: Thank you for smiling! When Ron isn't being a git, he's very lovable. :D
Gosh that was prettty ahhhmazzzing yet again, i swear where have youbeen all my life!!!?!
I was here, you just didn't know it, LOL.
LOVELY! You should extend your rose/scorpius fic to include their later lives like marriage and kids or something. I love Our Little Secret!
Author's Response: I'm so glad you want to read more! Marriage and kids is far in the future, but there are plenty of romantic adventures until then. :)
I love all your little one-shot companions to Our Little Secret, just as much as I enjoy the story itself I know it's almost finished but I'm looking forward to whatever you right next.
Author's Response: Thank you for looking forward to what comes next! I don't know what it is yet, :D, but it'll come to me. ;)
Love it! I love how there was a reason for Ron to send the patronus other than to stop his daughter from snogging :P and how you manage to keep them in character! Hermione would scold Ron and yet blush lol. I don't think that Ron/Hermione moments such as these will ever be gross. They are such an adorable couple-when they aren't fighting-. Again, I love it! :D
Author's Response: Thank you! Ron has his priorities, heh. I'd like to think that with maturity the bickering became banter and put spice in the marriage. :D
Awww, I LOVE Scorpius/Rose. You've absolutely convinced me that of COURSE they end up together. :D I loved loved loved it! Ron's so adorable
Author's Response: Thank you for thinking Ron's adorable. He embarrasses Rose sometimes, but that's one of the perks of being a dad. :D
Nice! I'm singing the song in my head now!
Love in an elevator,
Lovin' it up till I hit the ground...
Now you've set me off again. Ta, thanks! ^_^
I really love how you've done this. You credibly portray Ron and Hermione as the parents of almost grown children and as individuals as well.
I say he and Hermione should lock the kids in their rooms at bedtime and do whatever they want on the stairs then, too. But I suppose I'm being a bit of a hussy there....
Author's Response: Better a hussy than someone who gasps, "What? Stairs? NEVER!" :D Thank you for liking the characters mature, yet never too old to express their love for each other.
Author's Response: Your smile makes me smile!
I really like this story. It's really good.
Author's Response: Thank you! I liked the idea of Ron using his expertise at chess in other areas. :)
Cute!! Love Ron's POV and his protectiveness of his daughter warring with his desire for his wife.
Author's Response: Thank you! He's a passionate character--not always in good ways in the books (ie Lavender)--and I think that would make him a great dad and sexy husband. :D
What can I say??? Another great story! I love have the background, fill in stories. I love an elevator fantasy. I mean, really, who doesn't??
People I can't relate to. :D
Thank you so much for reading and loving the missing moments stories. I can't put other povs in a Scorose story, but this makes my inner Ron happy. :)