Reviewer: Russia Snow
Date: 05/29/10 6:17
Chapter: Prologue - In which a potion goes decidedly wrong

What? No! How can that be completed!

That was amazing, honestly it was really well written. I just don’t understand why there is no more! Please tell me you were planning on writing more? I don’t normally go for Snape fics, but the summary of yours made me very curious and it looked very interesting.

Your characterisation of Snape was very impressive. His face, usually bearing an expression of unpleasantness, was even stormier and stung with irritation that evening. I loved that description, and the description of the dungeon at the beginning of the story was also very effective. I also really liked the first line, The air was cold in the Hogwarts dungeon. this is a really good opening line because it draws the reader in and makes them curious about what is going to happen next and why the character is in the dungeon.

Just the whole character that you have created for Snape is so realistic, I desperately want to see you write some more!

From your summary I can see that the plot looks very good, and because of how strong your Snape characterisation is, I would love to see how you work with other characters. As they rest of the story is set in Harry Potter’s year, I was wondering if you might try to write Harry’s characterisation. This is something I have never tried myself because I believe it is so hard to get right. But I would be really interested to see how you tackle other characters. Snape’s interaction with Mrs Norris was also very strong, but I would like to see some human interaction!

I will make you a promise, if you write more chapters for this story I will review every single one and probably end up leaving long waffly praise like I have here =p

A really well written fic, just far too short!

~Russia xxxxx

Author's Response: Hey mate, sorry for the late reply. It really is finished but this website won't let me post the chapters (they are a tad too long). you can read the whole thing at a whole bunch of other websites (just google it), or here's a link to one: www.the-potions-masters-nephew.com i hope you enjoy the actual completed version :)

Reviewer: The_Dream_Team
Date: 09/21/09 17:22
Chapter: Prologue - In which a potion goes decidedly wrong

ooo! very intense and i cant wait to see what happens next!!

Author's Response: the fic is complete but mugglenet doesn't like my lengthy chapters. you can read the entire thing here: www.the-potions-masters-nephew.com

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