Reviewer: Amalien
Date: 12/10/11 20:13
Chapter: The Slow Burn of Betrayal

Hmm...very interesting. I had never thought about Peter having caused that many deaths, though it would make sense. Lol, men can be fools over a beautiful woman :)

Author's Response: Yes, my husband is a fool .... *snigger*. Glad you liked the story. I do see Peter's descent as a gradual one to the extent that he was caught up in it before he realised what was going on. ~Carole~

Reviewer: OtterMoone
Date: 07/21/11 18:43
Chapter: The Slow Burn of Betrayal

That's so sad :( But, what happened to her afterwards? Cause she obviously wasn't with Peter during the series.

Author's Response: Well, Peter's not with anyone in the series, and I doubt someone like Eleanor Flint actually stuck with him for long - she just made sure he was trapped in this web and then she would have left. Actually, I did have an idea (but never wrote it) that she was murdered by Voldemort for some reason. Thanks for reviewing ~Carole~

Reviewer: ahattab33
Date: 10/01/09 23:27
Chapter: The Slow Burn of Betrayal

I knew before I started reading that this would be good…it would satisfy a version of how this could have happened. *I knew this from stalking the MWPP threads from last term, from your theories on how this could have happened. :)

And your opening statements on solidified my belief that I was about to read a really good theory on how Peter betrayed his friends: "Back then, he merely thought it was a slip of the tongue, to someone who did not even seem interested." That section was so. Good. It was the kind of paragraph that could happen to anyone, even though as you read it, a part of you still feels like it wouldn't happen to you. But I think that's because I'm jaded and I know the ending…I firmly believe that Peter is THE hardest Maurader to characterize, but I am saying authoritatively (on what grounds I have no idea - lack of sleep?) that you need to use this opening in the MWPP class this term as an illustration for Peter. Somewhere.

Eleanor's scene was touching, and revealing about their relationship, and it made me laugh, thinking about the fact that she thought James and Sirius were stupid but she remembered Peter. But then I kept reading. She's a slick one. Ooooh, what an ego booster. And the apologies and the hand on the leg…but nothing comes of it, and he watches Lily and James and is sort of in the background once everyone else arrives. It's not hard to imagine how Peter starts to feel every day with this scene you've set up.

And then she just sets him up hook, line, and sinker. Such a sneaky Slytherin, lol.

But seriously, she was quite smart to wait several months of dating and let him slip a few times before she tried to get information out of him and trap him rather than ask him questions. And Voldemort was quite smart to send the type of spy after him that Peter wouldn't suspect - a pretty, innocent-looking woman who falls in love with him, preying on his weaknesses.

I think we've seen throughout the series that Peter is not the type to stand up to his friends or to put himself in jeopardy, and it quite honestly makes me wonder why he was sorted into Gryffindor.

I am actually disappointed this is the end of the story…for this is only the beginning of Peter's slow turn. He is now in a place where he knows he's made a mistake, but how does he actually come to betray the Potters? That is a significant difference from accidently revealing information and becoming a spy for Voldemort. I'm inclined to believe it is simply blackmail. "I will kill you/harm your friends/etc. if you don't do this for me?" He becomes secret keeper and within a week the Potters are dead, so he must be quite close to Voldemort at that point for Voldemort to obtain that kind of information from him, but I'm not sure even simple blackmail would get him to that point, especially since he is also willing to frame Sirius and fake his own death, though he is protecting himself at that point above all.

Overall, I think is an extremely great theory about how Peter would have started down that path, and I completely agree with your theory about the fact that it would have been a slow moving path.

Great story, and great characterization as usual!


Author's Response: Amanda , WOW! How to I respond to such an in-depth review? I'm pleased you enjoyed it and found it plausible. Peter's betrayal has always seemed so difficult for me, not so much the fact that he betrayed them, but that they never suspected him. It had to be something slow, in my opinion. It was never really going to be for money ... so that left personal safety (and of those he loved) or ... sex/love. I don't buy the 'family being threatened factor - because he was on Dumbledore's side and he never mentioned it in the Shrieking shack, but seducyion ... mmm, that I can see. Perhaps I'm just odd that way.

I think I shall have to write some more about Peter and Eleanor. I do have an idea for her, and Peter's ultimate betrayal is intriguing me, but is hard to write. One day ....

Thanks for the review, Amanda. ~Carole~

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 09/28/09 21:22
Chapter: The Slow Burn of Betrayal

Ooh, neat story! To think that Peter was seduced to the dark side by his lonliness and a pretty girl is a nice take on his betrayal. Great title and introduction. Very good buildup - I was really hoping she wasn't a Death Eater, but once she "slithered down the wall beside him" it was kind of over, wasn't it? I think this scenario is very plausible because it's so subtle. I think he must have been very lonely indeed, which is a sad commentary on his supposed friends. So what do you suppose happens next? Is he blackmailed into joining or does he join more willingly for Eleanor? Nice job - good luck with the challenge! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gina. Although, I knew in my mind that she was always on the 'dark side', it's nice to know that you thought she might be innocent ... I agree about his friends. It's always been my contention that leaving Hogwarts was what changed them (plus Lily effectively changing the whole Marauder dynamic). Not totally sure what happens next ... we'll see ... I think he just gets in too far and there's no going back. Thanks again ~Carole~

Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Date: 09/27/09 4:22
Chapter: The Slow Burn of Betrayal

This story left an absolutely disgusting feeling in my stomach, as I'm sure is the intention. It showed how lesser men are too week to overcome their most base of desires, and sometimes, they're not the only ones that get hurt.

Very well written!

Author's Response: OH, thank you. Hmm, I feel a bit sorry for Peter actually, but he was so ripe for this particular honey trap. I think there's a fair few women that would get drawn in by unscrupulous men as well. Thank you very much for reviewing. ~Carole~

Reviewer: the opaleye
Date: 09/26/09 18:26
Chapter: The Slow Burn of Betrayal

Oh, I really like this. I think your Peter is spot on and this situation entirely plausible. I can imagine this is exactly how Peter slipped into his betrayal and it is very well written. Well done!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. It always intrigues me why Peter betrayed them. I think he got sucked in too far and couldn't get out. It helps if the Death Eater doing the recruiting is also seducing the poor sap! ~Carole~

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